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Description Once upon a time there was a beautiful princess…

She had skin woven from the fibers of shooting stars and lips that tasted like iambic pentameter sonnets in the summer. She shone and sparkled in a way so dazzling that sometimes his fingertips went numb if they dragged along her flawless arms for only a moment; when he crept close to embrace her the scent of the bit of skin behind her ear filled his head so perfectly that he thought he was falling through space The best part by far was when their eyes met, and his heart thundered  and lightninged and he thought he could die happy at that moment.



…who was loved by a prince…

And sometimes she would catch him looking at her and she would wonder why he was so still. He did not move an inch except to breathe and open his mouth to tease her. She could see from the corner of her peripheral vision the way that his irises caressed the vastness of her curves, the way his palms itched to cup her cheek, and the way his lips twitched when they were close, as if they were ready to mouth the words he said only in her dreams. When his hand casually brushed against her legs she thought she heard them resonate through the rippling currents of air.



…from a great distance…

They played each other’s game of eyes-meeting-across-open-spaces chess; most nights while he lay in bed he couldn’t tell hot from cold nor south from something just a little too far on the chilling side, but he knew that something was askew. His mind was shredding itself into sardonic confetti every time he thought of someone else’s hands gliding across her coefficient of frictionless skin, and when he thought of someone else making her smile he wanted to scream that she was a romantic and no one was more romantic than he. Between veils of vanilla smoke he fought to convey all the things he wanted to whisper in her ear, but he knew that come the end of the night they would both say their obligated I-love-yous to someone who did not smell of lying in the open grass for hours.



…and up close she loved him back.

One day his irises wandered too far along the back-alley paths of her lips. She pushed him against the wall and spat in his face and beat his chest with her fists, hoping to hear something more than a dull echo so she knew he had an organ between his ribs that was capable of compassion. Her nails dragged along  the nape of his neck and she demanded to know why he still played the stupid games of speaking in tongues and allegories, insisted on the knowledge of why he wouldn’t hold her hand or kiss her or call her beautiful, perfect, his. She kicked at his shins and scuffed his shoes and told him she could love him harder and softer and longer and better, so why wouldn’t he jump. With his throat pressed against the plaster, he couldn’t answer her ideals.



But that didn’t make a happily ever after.
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Comments: 75

Lilac-Lenalee [2009-08-07 22:02:53 +0000 UTC]

oooh, i luv the descriptors!!! its always pleasurable 2 read well-written fiction, i must say, and your work definitely fits into that category i must read more of yur work!!

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verticalness [2009-06-19 04:29:45 +0000 UTC]

His mind was shredding itself into sardonic confetti every time he thought of someone else’s hands gliding across her coefficient of frictionless skin, and when he thought of someone else making her smile he wanted to scream that she was a romantic and no one was more romantic than he."

I love those lines because I can relate to them so keenly. I am so glad I discovered your work.

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SocraticSynapses In reply to verticalness [2009-06-20 01:59:31 +0000 UTC]

and i am so glad that you enjoyed it (:

how'd you relate to them? i love hearing people's stories

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verticalness In reply to SocraticSynapses [2009-06-21 01:43:39 +0000 UTC]

Well, I relate to the sardonic confetti bit because I'm quite a sarcastic person, and when I'm feeling self-pitying or jealous, I have a lot of sardonic little voices sounding in my head. Also, I am a romantic myself, and I can relate to this characters' frustration.

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SocraticSynapses In reply to verticalness [2009-06-22 05:05:31 +0000 UTC]

ah, romantics....we trod a lonely path, don't we?

(and hell, with such broken hearts, who wouldn't get sarcastic?)

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verticalness In reply to SocraticSynapses [2009-06-22 20:11:05 +0000 UTC]

haha, how true.

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LivingTheThesis [2009-06-15 21:23:36 +0000 UTC]

Beautiful descriptions of simple things.
This is amazing.

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SocraticSynapses In reply to LivingTheThesis [2009-06-16 03:26:09 +0000 UTC]

thank you so much

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SweetBlackRose13 [2009-05-31 18:25:05 +0000 UTC]

Ohhhh how beautiful
I love the imagery.

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SocraticSynapses In reply to SweetBlackRose13 [2009-06-01 00:33:46 +0000 UTC]

thank you so much! (:

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SweetBlackRose13 In reply to SocraticSynapses [2009-06-01 00:34:25 +0000 UTC]

You're welcome

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aikiro [2009-05-27 04:36:51 +0000 UTC]

You write very very well.
This is incredible, I'm very much dumbfounded.

Thank you for sharing

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SocraticSynapses In reply to aikiro [2009-06-01 00:39:13 +0000 UTC]

and thank you for reading! (:

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aikiro In reply to SocraticSynapses [2009-06-01 02:02:08 +0000 UTC]

No problem <3

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loverz116 [2009-05-27 00:02:11 +0000 UTC]

...well, now i do not want to be a princess anymore.

this is so beautiful and terrifying wrapped in one. i love the italicized sentences.

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SocraticSynapses In reply to loverz116 [2009-05-27 02:28:04 +0000 UTC]

thank you so much (: the italicized sentences were actually a story i told my best friend that i made up about her d:

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loverz116 In reply to SocraticSynapses [2009-05-27 04:12:08 +0000 UTC]

you very very welcome.

haha. really? but in the end of the italicized sentences, it wasn't exactly happy if you know what i mean. she liked it though right?

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SocraticSynapses In reply to loverz116 [2009-05-31 13:42:47 +0000 UTC]

/nod/ she liked it because she asked for a fairy tale with a twist that could be applied to real life. that's what stumbled out of my mouth

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loverz116 In reply to SocraticSynapses [2009-06-01 04:36:06 +0000 UTC]

oh! well, now i can see why she liked it so much. it is also lovely for what you did for her.


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SocraticSynapses In reply to loverz116 [2009-06-08 23:52:16 +0000 UTC]

thank you (:

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loverz116 In reply to SocraticSynapses [2009-06-09 00:53:27 +0000 UTC]

you welcome

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ALovelyMeInside [2009-05-26 23:07:44 +0000 UTC]

This is seriously brilliant. You're soooo talented. Props to you!

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SocraticSynapses In reply to ALovelyMeInside [2009-05-27 02:28:31 +0000 UTC]

thank you so much

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BeatingMyHeart [2009-05-21 04:02:10 +0000 UTC]

oh come on. i didn't think i could be more jealous of your writing until now XD

most nights while he lay in bed he couldn’t tell hot from cold nor south from something just a little too far on the chilling side
that part made me laugh

you're totally going to win the deviantawards thing

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SocraticSynapses In reply to BeatingMyHeart [2009-05-22 02:08:06 +0000 UTC]

oh gods, you are way too nice to me.

and i'm glad you found that bit of comedy relief. i was smiling while i wrote that part, but i didn't think anyone else would find it funny. thank you so much for proving me wrong

and oh, gods, i wish. i'm up against =Miss-Deathwish and ~ohsostarryeyed and they are quite formidable nominations! but thank you for having faith in me. i can count on your vote?

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BeatingMyHeart In reply to SocraticSynapses [2009-05-22 03:34:35 +0000 UTC]

ehh sorry about the whole two accounts thing. but everything i said on the other is 100% true
if you count all my accounts you're getting like four votes from me. haha (:

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SocraticSynapses In reply to BeatingMyHeart [2009-05-24 20:11:17 +0000 UTC]

oh gods no, don't worry about it, i was so happy like "awh there's a new random friendly person yay!" and when i found out it was you i thought "oh that makes a lot of sense (: " and was quite happy to hear from you (:

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BeatingMyHeart In reply to SocraticSynapses [2009-05-24 21:51:12 +0000 UTC]

ahahaha i love the 'yay!'

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SocraticSynapses In reply to BeatingMyHeart [2009-05-24 22:33:07 +0000 UTC]

the "yay" was out loud d:

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BeatingMyHeart In reply to SocraticSynapses [2009-05-24 23:05:52 +0000 UTC]

that's how i imagined it =]
i want to say yay while doing this [link]

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SocraticSynapses In reply to BeatingMyHeart [2009-05-25 00:33:08 +0000 UTC]

ahaha the perfect time to say yay 8D

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BeatingMyHeart In reply to SocraticSynapses [2009-05-25 21:20:23 +0000 UTC]

exactly

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BMHnumeroDos In reply to SocraticSynapses [2009-05-22 03:19:52 +0000 UTC]

psh haha sorry i used the wrong account XD
this is ~BeatingMyHeart btw

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SocraticSynapses In reply to BMHnumeroDos [2009-05-24 20:13:03 +0000 UTC]

O HAI THERE 8D

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BMHnumeroDos In reply to SocraticSynapses [2009-05-24 22:01:58 +0000 UTC]

hola señor XD

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BMHnumeroDos In reply to SocraticSynapses [2009-05-22 03:19:25 +0000 UTC]

i'm glad to prove you wrong anytime XD
yes but you, on the other hand, are the perfect candidate to win. you tell worlds with your stories, not just words.
and YES!! if only i could figure out how to vote...lol. the page confuzzles me

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SocraticSynapses In reply to BMHnumeroDos [2009-05-22 03:21:19 +0000 UTC]

gods you are sweet (:

are you subscribed to me? as soon as i'm done going through this massive pile of messages i was planning on posting a journal with voting instructions and pleas XD if you get my journal updates, you'll see all the instructions there 8D

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BMHnumeroDos In reply to SocraticSynapses [2009-05-22 03:29:51 +0000 UTC]



yes i just wasn't paying attention and used the wrong account. this is ~BeatingMyHeart . lol sorry

but i will definitely vote for you on this account too
and my photography one
and my other one
...yeah

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SocraticSynapses In reply to BMHnumeroDos [2009-05-24 20:12:41 +0000 UTC]

awh! four votes? thank you thank you thank you thank you. one thank you for each (:

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BMHnumeroDos In reply to SocraticSynapses [2009-05-24 22:03:04 +0000 UTC]

i'd type eight yourwelcomes's, just to spite you, but i'm far too lazy

so. you're veryyy welcome =]

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SocraticSynapses In reply to BMHnumeroDos [2009-05-24 22:32:32 +0000 UTC]

you so would d:

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Crayonxbby [2009-05-21 03:42:27 +0000 UTC]

this is beautiful<3
I love how this totally connects with my life.
This wonderfully amazing girl whose like, almost my twin is currently like this.
Now she just has to get to the last part of your story, for it to be an exact match

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SocraticSynapses In reply to Crayonxbby [2009-05-22 02:09:04 +0000 UTC]

she can take comfort in the fact that when she finally confronts him, he finally realizes what's standing right in front of him (:

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Crayonxbby In reply to SocraticSynapses [2009-05-22 04:18:44 +0000 UTC]

I hope she gets the courage to, though.
D:
He's awfully scary when he gets pissed.

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SocraticSynapses In reply to Crayonxbby [2009-05-24 20:06:31 +0000 UTC]

she should bring a knife. that makes her more scary d:

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Crayonxbby In reply to SocraticSynapses [2009-05-25 20:18:09 +0000 UTC]

yesh.
I should tell her to bring one.

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SocraticSynapses In reply to Crayonxbby [2009-05-25 20:51:01 +0000 UTC]

i agree XD

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paperheartsyndrome [2009-05-20 03:18:22 +0000 UTC]

seriously.
you are so perfect with imagery every time. plus you manage to tell perfect little love stories [or in this case broken love stories] that aren't the least bit cliche.
and that is why i love your writing.
this was beautiful. and can i say the italicized story totally pulls everything together.

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SocraticSynapses In reply to paperheartsyndrome [2009-05-22 02:18:28 +0000 UTC]

oh, gods. every time you give me any sort of praise i blush furiously and smile like a fool, because i respect you so much and look up to you as a writer.

but thank you, thank you, thank you. i'm so glad i'm not telling cliche stories that everyone has heard a million times, and somehow pull of the once-upon-a-time story (:


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paperheartsyndrome In reply to SocraticSynapses [2009-05-22 22:33:55 +0000 UTC]

haha, awwww.
ohhhh. you're silly. i'm not worth all that much respect especially from a genius like you.
so, i'll be keeping that praise coming since i look up to you as a writer.

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