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Description i.
you can close your eyes and count the stars and
find where they connect to draw a face years
older than yours; this weary gaze is turning
in for the night but it won't turn away from you


ii.
just please forget the taste of melancholy goodbyes
and words we haven't said; keep your tongue wrapped
around the flavors of boisterous laughs and every
"i love you" that lingers in this stubborn atmosphere


iii.
and you no longer need these wizened hands to
hold you up and hold your balance on these rocks;
these tired bones are folding themselves in; keep them
in the back of your mind and they'll keep you standing


iv.
if you forget the smell of pick-up dinners and library
pauses you're saving yourself; keep the scent of
crows feet smiles and i-remember-when stories and
every gust of off-the-lake air you breathed into your lungs


v.
so drown out this play list of regrets and avoidance you
have blaring in your ear drums and listen to the cacophony
of potential and things left to be discovered; when the
noise gets too loud i will still be here waiting in the silence


vi.
in case you begin to forget all the ways that you used to
see taste feel smell hear me i am beyond the clouds and
in the stars and in your heart and tucked inside the nuances
of your senses and missing you terribly in every sense
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Comments: 75

SocraticSynapses In reply to ??? [2010-02-04 16:26:22 +0000 UTC]

haha. uhm. thank you? i'm not quite sure what to say. i never expected someone to comment on it.

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siccave In reply to SocraticSynapses [2010-02-06 20:16:15 +0000 UTC]

somewhere between the multiple less-than-threes and i'm-yours-forevers, i saw it. and considering the fact that i'm neither smart nor perceptive, i'm sure others have recognized it as well.

it's cute, i hope it works out. you guys both have emotional upwellings that are unrivaled.

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SocraticSynapses In reply to siccave [2010-02-09 00:55:41 +0000 UTC]

well, i mean, it's not like we're being secretive, but, we just never expected someone to come right out and say something about it, i guess?

but thank you.

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mxskai [2010-01-25 02:28:53 +0000 UTC]

If I got a poem like this every time I'm down, I'd never be sad! XD

It was so thoughtful of you to write something like this.

I loved your language. It was absolutely beautiful. I can see that she lost an elderly loved one, maybe a grandfather or grandmother?

Lovely work!

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SocraticSynapses In reply to mxskai [2010-01-28 17:51:00 +0000 UTC]

haha i hope she feels the same way!

and she's a girl who's very close to my heart. i just want her to be happy all the time.

thank you so much! i won't talk about it because it's her business, but, thank you for reading. really

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mxskai In reply to SocraticSynapses [2010-02-01 20:02:46 +0000 UTC]

I'm sure she does.

No problem! And sorry--I hope I didn't come across as trying to pry. ^_^;;

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SocraticSynapses In reply to mxskai [2010-02-04 16:45:08 +0000 UTC]

oh, gods, no, it's fine. i just can't say any more than i already did.

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mxskai In reply to SocraticSynapses [2010-02-04 21:56:08 +0000 UTC]

Ha ha, I completely understand. ^_^

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ItsxMagik [2009-12-13 02:37:44 +0000 UTC]

This is absolutely beautiful Raph. I don't know what else to say.

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SocraticSynapses In reply to ItsxMagik [2009-12-14 09:14:15 +0000 UTC]

eeee i'm so glad you think so thankyouthankyouthankyou

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ItsxMagik In reply to SocraticSynapses [2009-12-15 01:23:16 +0000 UTC]

You'rewelcomeyou'rewelcomeyou'rewelcome (: <3

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aka-ash [2009-12-12 18:54:59 +0000 UTC]

simply wonderful.

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SocraticSynapses In reply to aka-ash [2009-12-14 09:07:44 +0000 UTC]

thank you so much

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balancingartist [2009-12-02 08:06:47 +0000 UTC]

Second stanza..

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SocraticSynapses In reply to balancingartist [2009-12-09 04:19:40 +0000 UTC]

E>

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verticalness [2009-12-02 01:28:39 +0000 UTC]

every bit of this breaks my heart in the most beautiful way. totally inspiring.

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SocraticSynapses In reply to verticalness [2009-12-02 04:17:11 +0000 UTC]

thank you so much

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verticalness In reply to SocraticSynapses [2009-12-03 04:37:25 +0000 UTC]

my pleasure!

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PulseofExistence [2009-11-29 18:56:46 +0000 UTC]

You write poetry with such a flowing hand, it is truly exquisite in it's form. Your words can be related to and I find it very easy to simply fall into their emotion, it's a very powerful feeling. Beautiful, my friend.

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SocraticSynapses In reply to PulseofExistence [2009-12-02 04:17:04 +0000 UTC]

oh, dear gods, thank you so much. your comment made me smile a lot (:

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PulseofExistence In reply to SocraticSynapses [2009-12-02 20:17:21 +0000 UTC]

--grins-- My pleasure.

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EsotericHeart [2009-11-29 13:53:44 +0000 UTC]

Six stanzas, yaaay.
Lovely, as always.

And I shall go now to send her love. ♥

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SocraticSynapses In reply to EsotericHeart [2009-12-02 04:16:45 +0000 UTC]

one and only time!
thank you so much


eeeee good, she deserves and needs it

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LACYDRAWERS [2009-11-29 08:33:01 +0000 UTC]

This drew a tear...

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SocraticSynapses In reply to LACYDRAWERS [2009-12-02 04:16:18 +0000 UTC]

a good one, i hope!

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LACYDRAWERS In reply to SocraticSynapses [2009-12-02 08:30:56 +0000 UTC]

Yes it was..
You write beautifully...

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let--me--out [2009-11-28 23:52:08 +0000 UTC]

"when the
noise gets too loud i will still be here waiting in the silence"

i love that line

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SocraticSynapses In reply to let--me--out [2009-12-02 04:16:11 +0000 UTC]

between you and me, it's my favorite line, but not my favorite stanza

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let--me--out In reply to SocraticSynapses [2009-12-02 06:22:35 +0000 UTC]

hahah XD
well, at least it's more equal placement of amazing lines. which stanza's your fave?

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SocraticSynapses In reply to let--me--out [2009-12-10 15:08:11 +0000 UTC]

either the first or last, i can't decide.

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let--me--out In reply to SocraticSynapses [2009-12-11 00:17:29 +0000 UTC]

that's a good thing...
it means you opened and closed it well XD

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SocraticSynapses In reply to let--me--out [2009-12-11 04:29:35 +0000 UTC]

which is what i was hoping to do!

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let--me--out In reply to SocraticSynapses [2009-12-11 06:52:49 +0000 UTC]

then a job well done

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IndigoSkyes [2009-11-28 23:11:00 +0000 UTC]

Oh, it's so sweet!

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SocraticSynapses In reply to IndigoSkyes [2009-12-02 04:15:55 +0000 UTC]

thank you, i was going for that (:

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RoseByAnyOtherName [2009-11-28 20:41:19 +0000 UTC]

LOVE the second and sixth stanza. actually the entire thing is golden.

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SocraticSynapses In reply to RoseByAnyOtherName [2009-12-02 04:15:48 +0000 UTC]

you picked my favorites!

thank you so so much

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RoseByAnyOtherName In reply to SocraticSynapses [2009-12-02 16:15:18 +0000 UTC]

heehee. you're welcome.

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losingmyfaith [2009-11-28 18:57:10 +0000 UTC]

beautifully wonderful

[and for such an amazing person!]

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SocraticSynapses In reply to losingmyfaith [2009-12-02 04:14:28 +0000 UTC]

eee thank you so much.

(i agree!)

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losingmyfaith In reply to SocraticSynapses [2009-12-02 04:30:51 +0000 UTC]

you're most welcome! (:

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MaireeMargaret [2009-11-28 18:13:14 +0000 UTC]

woohoo for six stanzas! (:

lovely, as always. your word choice never ceases to amaze me.

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SocraticSynapses In reply to MaireeMargaret [2009-12-02 04:14:17 +0000 UTC]

it's a first! and only (:

thank you thank you thank you E>

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MaireeMargaret In reply to SocraticSynapses [2009-12-02 04:46:54 +0000 UTC]

a success!

you're so very welcome, rafiki.

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SocraticSynapses In reply to MaireeMargaret [2009-12-02 04:57:55 +0000 UTC]

AWH I LOVE THAT NICKNAME E>

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MaireeMargaret In reply to SocraticSynapses [2009-12-02 04:59:26 +0000 UTC]

it means friend in swahili. (: it's from the lion king!

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SocraticSynapses In reply to MaireeMargaret [2009-12-02 05:00:17 +0000 UTC]

eeeee it's great because my name is "raphael", so, it sounds like it could come from that (:

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MaireeMargaret In reply to SocraticSynapses [2009-12-02 05:02:02 +0000 UTC]

perfect! that's my nickname for you now! (:

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SocraticSynapses In reply to MaireeMargaret [2009-12-02 05:03:45 +0000 UTC]

bleeee i love it (: i need one for you...hmmmmm

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MaireeMargaret In reply to SocraticSynapses [2009-12-02 05:05:22 +0000 UTC]

my real name is mary, if that helps at all, hah. most people call me marebear, or just mare.

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