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Published: 2003-11-28 05:07:13 +0000 UTC; Views: 107; Favourites: 1; Downloads: 12
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Is this what it feels likeTo love too much?
To have your soul crushed
Beneath the weight of the world?
To cry to yourself
Alone
Cold
And with no one to hear?
To bleed your spirit out to beloveds
And choke on the blood?
Is this what it feels like
To die?
I fall into the darkness
And close my eyes.
Is this what it feels like
To die?
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Comments: 19
goodness gracious.. so sad.. yet sooo beautiful and i can totally identify with it. you are such an amazing writer. i hope to someday be able to compare myself to you. ... great job. i liked how you connected love to death. the similar emptiness.. the similar sacrifice
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Thank you. It's good to have you back; I was missing your opinions.
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Your writing truly is amazing. I love the way you can put into words what the rest of us cannot even figure out. Such is the seed of wisdom
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Why thank you. Truly, I only try my best to write what I feel.
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Wow. I absolutely love this piece. You contrast the beauty and innocence of love with it's pain so very well.
"To bleed your spirit out to beloveds
And choke on the blood?"
There's a tragic feel of being betrayed here that truly touches
me. It's a terrible feeling: to pour out your soul only to have it denied and thrown back in your face. I'm still impressed with the inner strength that seems to be here, however. Keep writing, you're very talented.
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Thank you so much for the wonderful comment. It's just so rewarding to have someone who understands and disucsses sensibly.
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._. .... you're incredible. really. you have such an amazing way with words..
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another class poem! lovely, wicked style to, you used simplicity with 'cold' etc but the used fantastic metaphors as well, is this poem reflecting your mood at the moment? cus it sounds like it, thats the good thing bout feeling sad! you can write bout it!!!!!! well done sweetie this is your best 1 to date! i love it! D D D D 
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Thank you. I guess that is one useful thing that comes out of misery.
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I remember in seventh grade when I did forensics for the first time ever, and at St. John Vianney's.. in my first round, you were in my room and I got to hear you read the poetry you wrote.
I even remember it was snowing really hard!!
And I thought it was really pretty even then, and I still do..
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.:
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*ahem*
"DADDY LOOK AT THE CAMEL!!"
..That's all I remember.
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To love is to be vunerable... Your writing is beautiful!
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