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Bronyman1995 [2013-06-26 02:22:56 +0000 UTC]
Overall
Vision
Originality
Technique
Impact
Okay, this is very much an odd event, as your vision and originality are very well played here, however, the technique needed work and therefore diminished the impact.
HOWEVER, that being said, it was still awesome.
Let's break it down:
Kyre: Did I mention already that she's made of pure badassery? Because she is. Some good character development here, that I think got somewhat bypassed by the somewhat under written feel of this chapter. HOWEVER, I think it was awesome that she was going back to her roots here and that we got some more detailed back story. Well done on that. Just needed expanding.
Lancer: I kinda felt he was underused here, since this is very much Kyre's story and not his. However, I get the feel that you knew that as well, since he goes off on his own adventure, which hopefully will be it's own story (which I look forward to by the way).
Silver Samurai: Very interesting back story (Namor completely devastating Nippon, which, also, is an AWESOME idea). However, the main flaw is that we don't get enough of it. We graze it over, but overall, it all feels very much rushed and half-finished. So, when the fight scene happens, I'm not quite as invested as I could have been. However, he does provide an interesting villain, and I do wish he had lived or that this was more fleshed out.
Kitty Pryde: How can I properly express the awesome? OH I KNOW!:
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I think that'll do.
So, overall, I'd say that this is a good chapter, but it could have been a GREAT one. It felt half-finished and somewhat rushed, as if this were a first draft. However, your own mad skillz managed to make it good enough to enjoy to a very large degree, and also, AWESOME idea blending Sergio Leone with Akira Kurosawa. Nice move.
I await more from Krye and Kitty. Sounds like the making of a hell of a team up.
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Bronyman1995 In reply to Solaris90 [2013-06-28 16:39:49 +0000 UTC]
Ah, but a neck wound is awfully hard to dismiss...but Kyre survived an impalement so what do I know...
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pj202718 [2013-06-26 15:15:40 +0000 UTC]
Interesting.....especially since Clint Barton used that codename as well. Hmmmm.....how many more side stories are left to go?
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Solaris90 In reply to pj202718 [2013-06-26 15:30:00 +0000 UTC]
Let's see, the next story will be about Namor attacking Manehattan while Galaxy, Lir, and Cameo are meeting at a bar, written in the style of a Shakespeare play. Trying new things out here. Then after that I'll have a story about Lancer traveling to a magi-rich temple in the land of the Inequines to discover his origins. My brother's working on a new Spider-Mare story, but he doesn't have much free time so that might actually come during/after my big Crusaders finale story.
That's all I have planned for now.
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EcamMace [2013-06-25 01:19:19 +0000 UTC]
Epic!
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psycho-art09 [2013-06-24 06:45:21 +0000 UTC]
Fascinating.
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Solaris90 In reply to Starflight707 [2013-06-24 00:09:37 +0000 UTC]
*accepts flowers, smiling and waving as I step behind the curtain*
Lol, I assume you liked it?
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