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sollunestraa — slowly

Published: 2005-01-30 01:01:20 +0000 UTC; Views: 84; Favourites: 0; Downloads: 4
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Description slowly he takes your hand
as a guide
and leads you down
to the waterside


‘won’t you take my crutch, dear?
i’m oh so tired of leaning on you
as heavily as i do’

but slowly you’re falling
onto the red rust railing

‘i can’t function on my own’
‘no need to - i’m here’

so slowly he draws you back in his arms
why can’t you stand on your own two feet
?

‘i can’t function on my own’
‘of course not, darling’

slowly he’s sinking beneath you
but


‘i can’t function on my own’

come back by yourself tomorrow, he’ll say
‘honey, how you’ve grown’
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Comments: 4

flameskiss [2005-01-30 19:24:33 +0000 UTC]

lovely. Your poems are few but gooood.

The lilting thing goes along well and the ending is great.

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randomoo [2005-01-30 01:27:12 +0000 UTC]

-stares-

I love this. I can just imagine how to sing it, even, if it were a song.

I don't get that. But it's real.

I love the ending. fits the poem perfectly. I can't wait to see what you do for the picture. -squirms-

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sollunestraa In reply to randomoo [2005-01-30 01:56:53 +0000 UTC]

How would you sing it?

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randomoo In reply to sollunestraa [2005-01-30 04:04:02 +0000 UTC]

sort of softly, with a lilting tune. I don't know exactly how to describe it over the internet also, when the girl speaks, I would go higher, and when the man speaks, I would go lower, so the narrative parts in between would be at the middle of the scale.

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