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JaxxyLupei [2012-07-18 01:12:21 +0000 UTC]

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Hello! Sorry for the late response, I was out for a couple of days. Anyway! You ave a nice feeling for DP style. You know what you're doing, however, there are a few things that are buggy.

As one person pointed out, the arms are too long. Early in the first season of DP the characters tend to have long arms and short legs, but this generally gets better over time. Generally the hands should be at crotch-level, with the fingers coming halfway down the thighs. Her shoulders are a bit too long and don't really look like they have the arms properly attached to the body.

Her skirt is much too short, kind of giving the impression that her legs are attached directly to her waist rather than coming closer together to indicate where her crotch is.

The head is pretty good, the hairstyle is very rad! However, her mouth is much too low. DP characters generally tend to have their mouths closer to their eyes than their chin.

All in all it's a pretty good attempt! Much better than what I did the first time I attempted this style. Keep these tips and what others said in mind and you'll get better!

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Lazygirl440 [2012-07-16 10:09:42 +0000 UTC]

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This is my first critique so I this is terrible don't blame me o//o

Well since Mochi covered just about everything. I would like to give you some tips on the style since i'm familiar with it. Now for your first try this is really good (better then my first try).

First tip is when you draw the arms about half way down the arm or the middle of the stomach make a little lump or hill xD like in this picture [link]

My second tip is Most of the time the two middle fingers are together you don't always have to have them like this though

That's pretty much the only thing I see besides that the curving part of the head might be to big (I hope that wasn't mean 0.0) but I could be wrong since it's covered with hair.

Also adding curves to your character would be nice also unless you like the look of Sam's body then you're fine

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ShutUpSprinkles [2012-07-18 06:42:53 +0000 UTC]

You've got a general grasp of the style, which is good.

I suggest drawing a general body form without clothes first, so that you you don't end up having the legs looking more like table legs than human legs. The arms very long, as well. When it comes to the style in general, it's very angular, even more so than Fairly OddParents' style. Study how the lips and feet are in the show, or how the show goes about details such as the hood. It's not that you're necessarily out of style, but there's some things that don't quite match the show. ;)

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DivineSpiritual [2012-07-16 17:58:54 +0000 UTC]

Well, I think someone already beat me too it. In short, you could use a bit of work, but all in all, this is not bad at all. :3

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Mochi-Chan-x [2012-07-16 05:02:31 +0000 UTC]

I've never seen Danny Phantom, so I can hardly give you a fair assessment on the use of that style, though I think I have seen other Butch Hartman cartoons, so maybe I can. *shrugs* I'll see how I go in that respect, but I can definitely give you an honest opinion.

First of all, you're right. The anatomy could really use a bit of work, in that the arms are a bit too long, and I'm not sure about the hands being claw-like. If this is what you wanted, just disregard that. Characters do have all different heights in cartoons, so don't feel too put out by that, just remember that everything else has to be sized appropriately.

Secondly, Kudos to you for trying to move out of your comfort zone. It's easy to stick with something familiar, so good on you for trying to move past that. Being a versatile artist will make it easier for you to find a job in the art industry, if this is what you so desire.

I think you've picked an interesting style to try and emulate. It's more modern than say, Disney movies style, but it's also more simplistic, which is the trade off, I guess. As for the artwork itself, It definitely looks cartoon-y in style. It helps that manga style is also a cartoon-y style, so you already have the basis to work with. The thick lines are really typical of a lot of kids cartoons. If you want to become an animator, don't forget to adapt your style for your audience. Right now this kind of style is aimed at kids from 8-12, whereas styles more similar to what you're already used to are more for the teenagers. (Or I could be talking nonsense...I'm not an expert.)

As for how you did with emulating Butch Hartman's style, you seem to have done a great job, but its really kind of hard to tell at this stage, because you haven't included more complex emotions in the character. Overall it's quite good, but like I said earlier, the arms are a bit off.

For improvement, I'd suggest not only looking at tutorials, but watching a lot of cartoons to try and get a feel for the styles other cartoonists use. Sticking with one style is all well and good, but its much better to develop your own. There will be aspects of some that you like, and aspects of others that you don't, so you can pick them apart and try to use the ones you like to create your own style. Like i said, its all well and good to emulate one style, like Butch Hartman's, but networks already have a Butch Hartman, they don't need another.

I do like how you've put your own little touches to it, such as the clothes and the way you've drawn the eyes. overall, I think cartoon style suits your current level of skill. It also really seems to match with the way you colour.

I hope this didn't sound too harsh to you, because really, I do like what you've done, and I hope this is what you were looking for by way of critique/honest opinion. I didn't put this in an actual critique because I'm not sure it would fit the criteria for a critique, and I don't really want to rate your art in terms of creativity, technique and originality because I'm not an expert or a professional. Heck, I don't even draw that style of cartoon myself.

Overall, it could use a bit of improvement, but you're already well on your way to becoming really good in this particular style. Just keep practising, and I'm sure you'll be a great cartoonist.

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