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Description i. cartography

revolutions
fly east, a
21st century
trans-saharan
trade, where
the desert
grit-wind
blows. the sahara
kicks sandstorms,
brief, wavering
oases, gashes
into the skin
of your people.

brega falls.
the westerners
arrive in time
for benghazi,
and your land
bends subject
to sanded annals
of hindsight
battle jargon.
routed. ras anuf, lost.
two killed, five wounded,
one missing.

ii. ajdabiya

a boy
spray-paints
viva la libye
under the overpass.
you crunch
over bottles
and brown grass,
wait. he turns,
the rebel flag
tied around
his head:
red, black,
true green.
grab a gun,
you say.
a fighter plane
roars overhead.
his eyes
are dark
and young.
grab a gun,
or go home.

he fancies himself
a revolutionary;
you fancy him
stupid. and thank
allah, you think,
as he hesitates
before flipping
over the fence,
he is afraid.

iii. the government channel

everything is okay.
flash green.
fine, okay,
everything
in its place. the
newscaster's eyes
run black. flash
green. flash green.

iv. great socialist people's libyan arab jamahiriya

he would
have you
as terrorists
in your own
country. his
spokesman, mid-speech,
pauses. he sweats.

they say
these bullets
touch humans
for the first
time. five inches
in your brother's
leg. flash green.

v. the news

"even his mother
could not spell
his name,"
she mutters,
rolling her eyes.
you mess
your daughter's
hair. short moment
of laughter.

vi. the parisian summit

his son, they say,
and raise
their eyebrows,
sip water,
pass copies
of his letter
to a foreign
president. the
lady american
mutters something
about the republicans
loving this. the
africans peacekeep
on their own
continent; they
roll tanks
and order lunch.

vii. the road

in egypt,
they vote
on their next
coup. your
brother, back
from medical
school, teaches
the younger boys
how to roll
cigarettes
in the bed
of the truck.
you snort
and stop
at the gas station,
come out
with a pack
hitting your palm.
I buy quality,
you say, grinning;
your brother
scowls. you
tell the boys
to watch
his leg
and themselves.
you rumble
into tripoli, and
a few of you
return. the desert
blows around
your feet.

viii. ghibli

and you
will know us
by the wind
that dries
our blood
and carries
our names.
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Comments: 48

Shadowkey392 [2012-09-30 23:00:35 +0000 UTC]

I mean, last year. |)

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Shadowkey392 [2012-09-30 22:50:42 +0000 UTC]

Good job of summarizing the events in Libya this year.

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soporous In reply to Shadowkey392 [2012-10-01 22:40:22 +0000 UTC]

thank you.

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Shadowkey392 In reply to soporous [2012-10-03 03:35:35 +0000 UTC]

you're welcome. I look forward to coming across more of your work.

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russellgulliver [2012-03-14 19:42:28 +0000 UTC]

nicely written

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DaemonAndrewEverett [2012-01-18 15:44:53 +0000 UTC]

February 17
Libya's "Day of Rage" protest is held, kicking off what will eventually become a successful full-scale rebellion against Muammar Gaddafi.

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JohannaAnina [2012-01-11 15:41:22 +0000 UTC]

Beautifully written :3

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BERNA-M10 [2012-01-11 11:42:45 +0000 UTC]

I love Libya
viva Libya
viva 17Feb

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00waleed00 [2012-01-11 06:51:37 +0000 UTC]

viva Libya Viva 17th. Fab

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conartist89 [2012-01-11 03:54:54 +0000 UTC]

Beautiful and disturbing

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wouldulikesometea [2012-01-10 20:43:00 +0000 UTC]

wow...this is amazing. like a photograph in words of someone's heart

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HouseofDoom [2012-01-10 20:31:30 +0000 UTC]

Absolutely stunning. Well done

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TransientTopHat [2011-09-24 21:13:32 +0000 UTC]

Parts ii and viii hit the hardest for me... Thank you for taking on such important subject matter with a conscious artistic eye. It's very sobering.

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neuroticmnemonic [2011-09-22 17:46:33 +0000 UTC]

Wow. Very well-deserved DD.

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libelle [2011-09-22 15:59:34 +0000 UTC]

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Lit-Twitter [2011-09-22 03:33:12 +0000 UTC]

Chirp, congrats on the DD, it's been twittered. [link]

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Hiland-Rose [2011-09-22 02:31:00 +0000 UTC]

I think you captured a snap shot of the emotion in a civil war, or a peoples coup... I live in the US but I watch the news and marvel at the spririt and the heartache of the Lybian people. I wouldn't change any of the language but maybe the way you break your lines. It doesn't pause naturally where I would expect in places. If you read it out loud it gets a little muddy. Free verse is more difficult because there is no real form, but natural speech patterns provide the best foil... Keep it up, this is really good.

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soporous In reply to Hiland-Rose [2011-09-22 02:36:38 +0000 UTC]

I'll keep your advice in mind. thanks.

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Hiland-Rose In reply to soporous [2011-09-22 02:49:36 +0000 UTC]

You are most welcome, I haven't gotten brave enough to put my poetry up on DA, it's a little too personal, I do admire people who do. You have a lot going for you in your poetry I enjoyed your other works as well.

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SadisticIceCream [2011-09-21 22:10:35 +0000 UTC]

This is just wonderful. An important issue, and a beautiful poem. Congrats on your DD.

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soporous In reply to SadisticIceCream [2011-09-21 22:12:30 +0000 UTC]

thank you.

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PyroShadow18 [2011-09-21 21:43:14 +0000 UTC]

This is really heart-breaking. But so very true to read.
Thank you for sharing this.

~Josh~

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soporous In reply to PyroShadow18 [2011-09-21 22:13:47 +0000 UTC]

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PyroShadow18 In reply to soporous [2011-09-22 22:48:09 +0000 UTC]



~Josh~

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Euxiom [2011-09-21 18:50:58 +0000 UTC]

Brilliant. And yes, I thought it was rather ridiculous how many different ways I've seen Gaddafi's name spelled.

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those-indications [2011-09-21 17:23:30 +0000 UTC]

It is so beautiful. I wish I could have you write of how beautiful it is, because only you seem to write the right words right now.

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soporous In reply to those-indications [2011-09-21 22:18:50 +0000 UTC]

thank you.

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archelyxs [2011-09-21 16:05:38 +0000 UTC]

This is incredible
So much in your scope, so many details
A beautiful capture
Congrats on the DD, well-deserved

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soporous In reply to archelyxs [2011-09-21 22:23:41 +0000 UTC]

grazie.

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darkprincessstar [2011-09-21 15:51:01 +0000 UTC]

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soporous In reply to darkprincessstar [2011-09-21 22:20:31 +0000 UTC]

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Puppy-eater [2011-09-21 15:33:55 +0000 UTC]

This is probably the best telling of the Libyan revolution I've read.
congrats on the DD.
You deserve it.

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soporous In reply to Puppy-eater [2011-09-21 22:30:07 +0000 UTC]

thank you.

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vermilion--vermouth [2011-09-21 15:25:51 +0000 UTC]

Beautifully written, with a wonderful concept. The imagery was amazing; I really felt as though I was in the narrator's thoughts, seeing what s/he saw, in the midst of all of this. Simply amazing.

I especially loved, "the/ lady american/ mutters something/ about the republicans/ loving this. the/ africans peacekeep/ on their own/ continent; they/ roll tanks/ and order lunch."

Congratulations on the DD. Lit DDs just don't get enough attention; yours was so worth it.

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soporous In reply to vermilion--vermouth [2011-09-21 22:53:18 +0000 UTC]

grazie.

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aspirin111 [2011-09-21 12:51:50 +0000 UTC]

Wow, reading this makes me feel like I'm in the action, in Ajdabiya itself. Viva la libye.

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soporous In reply to aspirin111 [2011-09-21 22:52:59 +0000 UTC]

indeed.

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xlntwtch [2011-09-21 12:07:15 +0000 UTC]

Congratulations. This is something terrific and also important to read. It say a lot in a few words, each stanza building on the one before it. I don't really know a lot about poetry, but I do know what I like to read.

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soporous In reply to xlntwtch [2011-09-21 12:30:49 +0000 UTC]

thank you.

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xlntwtch In reply to soporous [2011-09-21 13:36:02 +0000 UTC]

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silverfleckedlullaby [2011-09-21 09:22:08 +0000 UTC]

Brilliant. This made me feel desperately ignorant, but the stark reality of this piece reminds me that not all art is a way to lie to oneself. I really, really enjoyed reading this and am so glad this got a DD, because I doubt I would have seen it otherwise.

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soporous In reply to silverfleckedlullaby [2011-09-21 12:36:48 +0000 UTC]

I recommend yehuda amichai if you want to read more upfront poems (if, of course, you haven't read him already); he fought in several wars and it shows in his writing. and thank you. (:

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silverfleckedlullaby In reply to soporous [2011-09-22 04:23:19 +0000 UTC]

I will check him out. Thanks for the recommendation!

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PurpleGeisha [2011-05-01 19:16:15 +0000 UTC]

nice work. I'm proud to have followed you all these years XD

Though my visits on DA are few and far between nowadays...

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soporous In reply to PurpleGeisha [2011-05-04 04:13:20 +0000 UTC]

:D

I'm graduating this month. Finally.

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PurpleGeisha In reply to soporous [2011-05-22 17:07:55 +0000 UTC]

ah, now so-called real-life begins XD

good luck!

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soporous In reply to PurpleGeisha [2011-05-22 17:26:06 +0000 UTC]

into the abyss.
thank you

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PurpleGeisha In reply to soporous [2011-06-18 18:53:41 +0000 UTC]

your welcome
enjoy your summer XD

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