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I wake up.

Ellis is up as well. He's rubbing his head. He looks a little pale. I smell no infection in him. He coughs into his good hand. I growl. He flinches. It goes silent. He inches away. I scared him. I merely snort. So bored... I lie down on the floor. Dahm. Boredom. I growl into the floor. After a while I sit up. I stare at the wall. Time moves slowly. I screech. I grab a soft thing. I tear at it. White stuff goes flying. I fume for a moment. Ellis looks at me wierdly. I snort and leave. I sit on a roof nearby.

I whine. Something is different about him. But what?! I try to focus on something, anything, but I can't. Dammit! What makes Ellis so special. I see an infected. I attack. I shred until there is nothing. Nothing's changed. It takes a few more, but I finish. I trudge back. So many things are going through my head. I head back in. He's asleep. I lie on the floor. It takes a while, but I fall asleep.
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I hear Ellis. He's trying to tell me something. I wake up slowly. I hear gunshots. He's warning me. He trying to tell me to leave. No. I shake my head. He frowns. He points that thing at me. He's tells me again. I feel a strange feeling in my chest. I finally do so. I run. I run until I can't hear them. I finally stop. Something wet rolls down my cheek. I touch it. It's tears. How...Why? I howl. I miss him. I don't know why, but I do. I hear more Infected.

I pounce. I kill. I don't know how many, but I kill. I kill until there is nothing but me. I scream. I want him back. I felt something in me. Something I haven't felt in a while.

Lonliness.

I didn't like it. I didn't want it. I wanted Ellis. But why!? WHY DAMMIT! I scream and the sky. The sun is rising. I walk. I don't know where, I just walk.
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Comments: 47

elenarichoften [2013-02-11 06:17:35 +0000 UTC]

More!

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Shordycollins1 [2012-03-28 19:39:52 +0000 UTC]

MOOOORRRREEEEEE!!!!! PLEASE!!!! MORE! M-O-R=E!1!!!!

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soryaseroth In reply to Shordycollins1 [2012-03-29 01:48:35 +0000 UTC]

Woah there, take it easy. Unfortunately the Hunter!Muse is hiding, so it's gonna be a while. Sorry.

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Shordycollins1 In reply to soryaseroth [2012-03-29 02:07:49 +0000 UTC]

ok,OK....

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stamet12 [2011-09-17 17:56:24 +0000 UTC]

I've liked the story up until this point. A very very exelent story but I don't like yaoi. Sorry.

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soryaseroth In reply to stamet12 [2011-09-17 22:36:28 +0000 UTC]

It's not Yaoi (As much as I like it). It's closer to treating him like a 'pack member' of sorts.

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CrazyVanillaCake [2011-08-30 22:24:02 +0000 UTC]

Nice work. Can't say much else. Its just epic, thats it.

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soryaseroth In reply to CrazyVanillaCake [2011-09-01 02:52:47 +0000 UTC]

Thanks!

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Superdb3 [2010-05-27 06:10:33 +0000 UTC]

I'm tearing up, please write more. :'D

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soryaseroth In reply to Superdb3 [2010-05-27 18:17:25 +0000 UTC]

patient buddy!

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Superdb3 In reply to soryaseroth [2010-05-27 18:51:04 +0000 UTC]

I'll try.

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leon42633 [2010-05-24 23:05:28 +0000 UTC]

Awww poor Hunter >.>

Is there any more parts?

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soryaseroth In reply to leon42633 [2010-05-26 20:33:03 +0000 UTC]

Yes, but be patient. (Nice icon btw, lawlz)

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leon42633 In reply to soryaseroth [2010-05-26 20:38:30 +0000 UTC]

Okay I will^^ Hehe Thanks a lot
I lik the colors on yours

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Panda-Izzy01 [2010-05-21 21:59:25 +0000 UTC]

*cry iam so sad poor hunter!

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soryaseroth In reply to Panda-Izzy01 [2010-05-22 20:22:54 +0000 UTC]

I know, it will get better though! just be patient!

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Panda-Izzy01 In reply to soryaseroth [2010-05-22 23:27:39 +0000 UTC]

OHHHH Hurry the waiting is killing meee!

ok i'll wait!

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soryaseroth In reply to Panda-Izzy01 [2010-05-23 00:27:25 +0000 UTC]

lawlz.

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Panda-Izzy01 In reply to soryaseroth [2010-05-24 04:47:59 +0000 UTC]

hehe
hey whiel your working on your story can yall cheak out mine?

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Darkshame [2010-04-15 18:45:52 +0000 UTC]

My fav survivor and my fav infected!!!

YOU HAVE TO MAKE MORE!!!

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soryaseroth In reply to Darkshame [2010-04-16 03:24:48 +0000 UTC]

I'll try. The next chapter is being difficult. Sad face~

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Darkshame In reply to soryaseroth [2010-04-16 05:14:41 +0000 UTC]

You can do it! I know you can.

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soryaseroth In reply to Darkshame [2010-04-16 15:13:18 +0000 UTC]

thanks!

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Darkshame In reply to soryaseroth [2010-04-16 15:13:59 +0000 UTC]

^w^

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xsleepxforeverx666 [2010-04-05 17:40:41 +0000 UTC]

are ellis and the hunter gonna end up together or is this just a friendship fic?

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soryaseroth In reply to xsleepxforeverx666 [2010-04-06 05:17:54 +0000 UTC]

...Possibly a friendship fic. Not sure. ^-^;

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xsleepxforeverx666 In reply to soryaseroth [2010-04-06 05:49:21 +0000 UTC]

you have to make it a romance, that would just be so kawaii!

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soryaseroth In reply to xsleepxforeverx666 [2010-04-06 15:20:15 +0000 UTC]

...Dunno 'bout that. *shrugs*

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Elkkun [2010-04-03 08:59:35 +0000 UTC]

This is pretty cool with the Hunters thoughts and all.

Everything's in short sentences which makes the Hunter seem trivial and not being able to think, speak or hear properly even though it's senses are probably heightened It gives a feeling that the Hunter is aand can be human, which I like.
With stories I have a tendacy to point out bad and good things so think of it as constructive critisism, like what you get of ff.net (fanfiction.net).

I like how you've made the Hunter feel confused, it not only shows that he's still figuring himself out but it also shows that he's still partly human and has the ability to feel it's a nice take on Hunters.

Congrats xD. Just wish you'd make the chapters a little bit longer, and not make the days so short. You get a couple of lines in and it's night-time already. What happened throughout the day? O_o Did they just sit there and listen to the moans of the infected? Did Ellis find that ball what the Hunter was playing with and teach him a new game like 'catch'? :3 C'mon tell us what happens. It'll make the chapters slightly longer, knowing what they did throughout the day to create the bond of trust between them

Bit late for that paragraph now isn't it! But it's something to think about if the Hunter and Ellis ever meet up or you wanna re-write...blah blah.

I'll shut up now.

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soryaseroth In reply to Elkkun [2010-04-04 01:49:55 +0000 UTC]

I'm glad you like my take on A hunter POV.

And forgive me on the shortness. I'd like to try Ellis, but I don't know much about his personality. Sad face~

Thanks for the Comment, very helpful!

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Elkkun In reply to soryaseroth [2010-04-04 17:52:30 +0000 UTC]

Hehe, research a bit into him then
There are plenty of people who play L4D2

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ucalyptus [2010-04-01 21:25:42 +0000 UTC]

i LOVE this! i've been waiting for a story like this! i just hope it does not go the same way that the others do... like ellis will be happy to be with hunter at the end and choose to be with him... tbh, i'd rather be with some humans then with a potenial flesh eater!!! lol, dont get me wrong, i love hunter, its just i dont want to see ellis ever give up on his freedom, he's too much of a stubborn charater XDXD MORE SOON PLEASE i mean like by tomorrow!!! XDXDXD

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soryaseroth In reply to ucalyptus [2010-04-06 05:19:27 +0000 UTC]

Stubborn? Yes.

And you're gonna have to be patient on the next chapter. Hit a bit of a writer's block.

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ucalyptus In reply to soryaseroth [2010-04-06 13:41:17 +0000 UTC]

D: nuuuuu!!!!! lol
*goes and be's emo with hunter, witch and u* D'=

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soryaseroth In reply to ucalyptus [2010-04-06 15:20:43 +0000 UTC]

D:

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ucalyptus In reply to soryaseroth [2010-04-06 17:34:12 +0000 UTC]

D: D: D: D: D: D: D: D: D: D: D: D: D: D: D: D: D: D: D: D: D: D: D: D: D: D: D: D: D: D: D: D: D: D: D: D: D: D: D: D: D: D: D: D: D: D: D: D: D: D: D: D: D: D: D: D: D: D: D: D: D: D: D: D: D: D: D: D: D: D: D: D:

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MondayMourningAsylum [2010-03-31 06:04:31 +0000 UTC]

I love this story and all of its zombiousity... no, that is not a real word, but it should be.

I cannot wait for the next chapter.^^

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soryaseroth In reply to MondayMourningAsylum [2010-03-31 15:13:25 +0000 UTC]

No probs!

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Mathi-das-M [2010-03-30 00:02:33 +0000 UTC]

awww~
This is so cute
poor Hunter...
I hope he finds a way back to ellis

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soryaseroth In reply to Mathi-das-M [2010-03-30 03:35:28 +0000 UTC]

Maybe he will...
>.>
<.<

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MidNight-Vixen [2010-03-26 06:28:29 +0000 UTC]

i like the story ^^ plz write more OwO

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soryaseroth In reply to MidNight-Vixen [2010-03-26 15:17:51 +0000 UTC]

ok!

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DeMyXrOcKz [2010-03-26 06:27:42 +0000 UTC]

awww did the other survivors find ellis and take him away?

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soryaseroth In reply to DeMyXrOcKz [2010-03-26 15:19:23 +0000 UTC]

yes. Sad face

Now Hunter is gonna be emo with the Witch...I'm gonna join him.

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DeMyXrOcKz In reply to soryaseroth [2010-03-28 04:10:14 +0000 UTC]

D': is this the last chapter then!?!??!?! now im gonna be emo and join you and the witch too!!

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soryaseroth In reply to DeMyXrOcKz [2010-03-29 03:06:27 +0000 UTC]

NO!!!!!

Our Hunter is gonna go be Emo foe a while, that's all.

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DeMyXrOcKz In reply to soryaseroth [2010-03-29 03:28:09 +0000 UTC]

good because i was gonna be all sad because the story was going to be over so soon.

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