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Once there was a girlIn my math class
Who said, "School"
"Makes me want to lite myself of fire"
And everyone laughed
Except for me
Because I saw the circles under her eyes
And I knew she wasn't kidding
Later that year
She got a gallon of gasoline
And lit
Herself
On fire
Now no one laughs in my math class anymore
Once there was a boy
In my English class
Who said, "School"
"Makes me want to blow my brains out"
And everyone laughed
Except for me
Because I saw the cuts on his arm
And I knew he wasn't kidding
Later that year
He stole his dad's gun
And blew
Himself
Apart
Now no one laughs in my English class anymore
Once there was a girl
In my Spanish class
Who said, "School"
"Makes me want to slit my wrists"
And everyone laughed
Except for me
Because I saw how thin she was
And I knew she wasn't kidding
Later that year
She borrowed my razors
And bled
Herself
Away
Now no one laughs in my Spanish class anymore
Then one day
This boy in my homeroom
Said, "School"
"Makes me want to kill myself"
And everyone laughed
Except for me
Because I was too busy
Giving him a hug
Now he makes me laugh every day
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I think that there are far too many poems out here, trying to romanticize sadness and talk about young kids in high school and suicide.. like it's getting far too old now, I'm tired of it. I do like the way you wrote it though, reminds of me of old Bukowski poems, just the form. You had a couple spelling mistakes so you should probably spell check before posting. I think if you spent less time using deviant art as a social site and more time focusing on your poetry you might produce something substantial. THAT BEING SAID, I realize at a young age it's difficult to find things to write about because you've barely lived a life... so if I can give you any advice it's this: be original, write whatever is on your mind don't try to control it. Writing is like wood carving you just free form until you start to shape something pretty and build around that, free and flowing. You need to write as honestly and as true as you would talk to yourself or your close friends. I suggest you look up poets like Allen Ginsberg, Jack Kerouac, Charles Bukowski and Baudelaire. Anyway keep writing and keep using the muscle and eventually you will get better.
Ryan.
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I think the main moral here is and/or should be that actions speak louder than words. Everyone would die a humiliatingly tragic suicide, until you stop acknowledging how troubled their life is and stop the worst from happening. If I accidentally gave mixed messages from my previous theorizing I apologize. About the opinion, I do see this was pretty well thought out. Though I feel the dark tone feels a little hammered. It's not much that I haven't seen before. But that's not to say in any way this is horrible, because it's still worth a read if you're willing to stomach it.
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I like this its like a poem ... sure it doesn't rhyme but that doesn't matter what matters is what it says and this writing has a lot of feel in it ... id say i LOVE it!!!!!!!!!!!! It truly resembles the terror about how someone saying they'd kill themselves this way or this is no laughing manner ... I really like it no loved it and if this was real then i am sorry for you but for now I can say this had a lot of feel to me and made me think of things differently ... I will never laugh at someone if they say they're going to die some way ... not that i have .... Really love this.
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i've always loved this so much!
it just reeeeally hits home for me.
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I don't know why but I can relate to this. School made me anxious and depressed and not to mention suicidal and my classmate just looked at me as the emo freakazoid because I was over reacting . I mean, we are forced to learn something that we're not going to use later on. I have to say,homeschool is better but that's my opinion,you can choose what you want to learn. But I guess we can't change the system unless you really want to stand up to it.
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Nah, sorry. These aren't really about anyone in particular
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A new take onΒ NiemΓΆller? There have been many different translations published, but I think this one says it most clearly.
"First they came for the communists, and I did not speak out-
Β Β Β because I was not a communist;
Then they came for the socialists, and I did not speak out-
Β Β Β because I was not a socialist;
Then they came for the trade unionists, and I did not speak out-
Β Β Β because I was not a trade unionist;
Then they came for the Jews, and I did not speak out-
Β Β Β because I was not a Jew;
Then they came for me-
Β Β Β and there was no one left to speak out for me." - Martin NiemΓΆllerΒ
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I've read that before and I think it's beautiful. No though, this wasn't based on that but the memory of it might have kind of influenced this.
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There have been many variations of it; this is a much later verson:
"When Hitler attacked the Jews
I was not a Jew, therefore I was not concerned.
And when Hitler attacked the Catholics,
I was not a Catholic, and therefore, I was not concerned.
And when Hitler attacked the unions and the industrialists,
I was not a member of the unions and I was not concerned.
Then Hitler attacked me and the Protestant church -
and there was nobody left to be concerned." Β - Martin NiemΓΆller, from the text of an address he gave to the United States Congress in 1968 and which appears in the Congressional Record, October 14, 1968, page 31636.Β
In any case, your poem had a comparable strength to it, well done!
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This most likely hits home for a lot of people, it certainly does for me. Well written.
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Thank you. I feel like it could hit home for almost everyone.
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Don't cry!! And thank you
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I love this!
And it does have a sort of flow - or at least, the way I read it to myself, it flowed beautifully. The storyline, the way you wrote it... everything about it is perfect. Wonderful work
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Thank you so much! I'm glad I was kind of worried about that
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It was very beautifully written. I've lost classmates and friends too. I know how true this can be. I live with people who have this anxiety or have lived through it and I'm grateful everyday that they're still here. I'm sorry if this story was true and you lost those people in your life. Even if they weren't close to you I know how devastating it can be to lose a classmate.
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Thank you. This story isn't exactly true, but it's based on the history of some of my friends who have passed on. I find it awful that there are people around us that are filled with pain and we usually have no idea, and that's what inspired this. I'm sorry that you've lost people, I know what that feels like and it is sickening. Thank you for the comment.
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You're very welcome. It's all to true that we pass by people every day and they could be in pain though we'd never know it. We're taught by society to keep it hidden, taught that no one cares, that it's our burden and ours alone to carry. So even when it becomes to much for them to carry they still try. I'm sorry you've lost people in the past as well. All we, the survivors, can really do though is move on and try to see in others what we didn't see in the ones we lost. Remember the good in the ones that are gone and see the bright side as much as possible in each day, and maybe if we're lucky help others see it to.
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Thanks. Usually my writing is really depressing so I figured I'd give it a happy spin.
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Very well written... school has always been hell for me, I started getting depressed in the 3rd grade... now a high school sophomore, I'mΒ suicidal and have anxiety so bad that I stay home most days just to avoid my lit class, but all it takes is one person to give you a hug, or just be there for you, and I'm so glad I found that person :')
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I'm socially awkward, have social anxiety, and anxiety in general. I hate school. I swear school is only there to make people's self esteem go down.
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I know right? It's awful that that's what it's become. Would you like to talk about it sometime?
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Sweet, just note me.
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This is so touching, I hope that someday there will be no self-harmers, or anyone that would ever think about killing themselves, because they don't understand; They are worth it to me <3
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It's not exactly true, but it's based off of some of my friends. I know it's sad, Β but it's even worse that this does happen
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<3
I am for this. This is the kind of stuff that I try to prevent(except for the last few lines).
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