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StrangelyShinyRose and Iris
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Published: 2017-01-26 22:28:31 +0000 UTC; Views: 4076; Favourites: 91; Downloads: 0
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They loved their garden;

Mother and Daughter would spend

Hours in the sun.

 

Behind their house was

Green dotted with red, yellow,

Pink and countless more.

 

Mother loved roses;

Daughter preferred irises.

They planted with care.

 

They watched the sun rise

While blowing dandelions,

And mimicked at dusk.

 

Their birdbaths brought in

Winged visitors who were

Greeted with bird seed.

 

All meals were eaten

On a polka-dot blanket;

Nothing but home-cooked.

 

Catching butterflies,

Looking for funny-shaped clouds,

Climbing the oak tree.

 

They ran, danced and sang,

Never tiring of their

Love for each other.

 

Daughter did not think

That her days with Mother would

Ever reach an end.

 

When the doorbell rang,

And Mother answered the door,

Daughter heard her scream.

 

"I want to see her,"

Said the angry man outside,

Firearm in hand.

 

Fits of drunken rage,

Screams, scars, curses and regrets

Ran through Mother's mind.

 

She slammed the door shut,

Returned to the garden and

Squeezed her child's hand.

 

He leaped past the fence,

Demanded to see Daughter,

Eyes full of cold hate.

 

He who left Mother

With a child and no home

Took aim and fired.

 

Red spilled onto green,

Both being sprinkled with tears

From Daughter's wide eyes.

 

He took hold of her,

Only she would not leave her

Mother's lifeless side.

 

She flailed all about,

Drawing curse words from the man

Who dragged her away.

 

He did not witness

Red soaking into green and

Strengthening the plants.

 

He gasped when the vines

Pulled the gun out of his hand

And opened fire.

 

"No one will take her",

Rang Mother's voice as ivy

Domed the whole garden.

 

From the soil rose

Dirt body, rose eyes, vine hair,

And mother's kind words.

 

"I will never leave",

She said, giving an iris

To her smiling girl.

 

Mother and Daughter

Were never separated

By anything else.

 

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Comments: 97

StrangelyShiny In reply to ??? [2018-01-04 19:47:21 +0000 UTC]

Ahh, thank you.

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oviedomedina [2017-09-19 19:22:33 +0000 UTC]

This was an excellent story!
Love the versed format as well!

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StrangelyShiny In reply to oviedomedina [2017-09-20 00:24:58 +0000 UTC]

Awww, thanks.

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aquagirl7 [2017-09-19 16:18:08 +0000 UTC]

Your poem has a beautiful and concise narrative. I love the twist! 

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StrangelyShiny In reply to aquagirl7 [2017-09-20 00:27:01 +0000 UTC]

Awww, thanks! >w<

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Fictasy [2017-09-03 17:39:47 +0000 UTC]

I don't think that I have ever read such a descriptive story in three-line stanzas. And a very good story at that. I did not see that twist coming!

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StrangelyShiny In reply to Fictasy [2017-09-04 00:09:58 +0000 UTC]

Awwww, thank you very much! I felt good about this one, but I never would've guessed it would end up being a daily deviation. ;w;

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Fictasy In reply to StrangelyShiny [2017-09-04 18:41:46 +0000 UTC]

Congratulations! I think that it deserves a DD.

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Ilovechu [2017-07-26 02:09:16 +0000 UTC]

Nice job!!

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StrangelyShiny In reply to Ilovechu [2017-07-26 19:13:55 +0000 UTC]

Thank you!

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Ilovechu In reply to StrangelyShiny [2017-07-26 20:36:49 +0000 UTC]

You are very welcome  

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shining-char [2017-07-19 16:45:14 +0000 UTC]

Wow. This tells an amazing story, I could never write a poem as good as this. Keep up the amazing work!

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StrangelyShiny In reply to shining-char [2017-07-20 19:03:29 +0000 UTC]

Thank you!

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shining-char In reply to StrangelyShiny [2017-07-21 03:18:32 +0000 UTC]

You're welcome

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EveryPreciousBreath [2017-07-16 05:21:27 +0000 UTC]

Amazing poetry!! <3

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StrangelyShiny In reply to EveryPreciousBreath [2017-07-16 09:09:23 +0000 UTC]

Thank you! ^_^

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IrisPrismMLP [2017-05-01 11:52:38 +0000 UTC]

oh Ink  ^_^ InkRose98  

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StrangelyShiny In reply to IrisPrismMLP [2017-07-10 03:27:05 +0000 UTC]

Thank you for sharing this with another! >w<

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IrisPrismMLP In reply to StrangelyShiny [2017-07-10 09:43:09 +0000 UTC]

your welcome

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ChocoBerryINK [2017-03-21 16:48:32 +0000 UTC]

It's very nice ;u;

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StrangelyShiny In reply to ChocoBerryINK [2017-03-21 22:55:53 +0000 UTC]

Thankies! ;w;

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ChocoBerryINK In reply to StrangelyShiny [2017-03-25 09:09:31 +0000 UTC]

You're welcome!

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ElegantLadyAlex [2017-02-26 15:01:41 +0000 UTC]

That's so sad oh my goodness, but the end is kind of nice in a way
I can't process my feelings... Like I have no way to describe what's going in my mind. But it is well done! Haiku's are not easy, and it is nicely done, with a very interesting story!
Lovely(still not sure what emotions I feel >//<)

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StrangelyShiny In reply to ElegantLadyAlex [2017-02-26 23:02:26 +0000 UTC]

Ehehehe! I'm just glad that whatever you're feeling is positive. ^.^ 

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ElegantLadyAlex In reply to StrangelyShiny [2017-02-28 03:17:35 +0000 UTC]

It is though XD

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lauren654 [2017-02-25 00:11:32 +0000 UTC]

I have never had feels hit so fast.

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StrangelyShiny In reply to lauren654 [2017-02-25 04:45:41 +0000 UTC]

;w;
I'm honored to hear you felt that way. ^w^

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gridtakno [2017-02-20 10:20:24 +0000 UTC]

I really enjoyed reading this. It is really good. I don't know if you noticed but if it was meant to be in haiku format some of your sections near the center left off trail for a bit then picked up on normal path again. Just giving my observations since I noticed you said you did some heavy editing on this in another comment. I still really enjoyed it

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StrangelyShiny In reply to gridtakno [2017-02-20 23:33:15 +0000 UTC]

That's a good point. I was a bit nervous about that when writing, so I kinda went with my gut and hoped it worked out. xD

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gridtakno In reply to StrangelyShiny [2017-02-20 23:39:53 +0000 UTC]

Yeah my friend and I like to do haikus a lot. We've made similar mistakes where the syllables for line 2 sound like it matches 7 when we say the word but really it's just how we actually say it. But when you break it down it really is only 6 syllables. But I still really enjoyed it. Keep up the good work😁

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StrangelyShiny In reply to gridtakno [2017-02-20 23:57:16 +0000 UTC]

Ahhhhhh! Thank you for becoming my unofficial 250th watcher! (I say unofficial because I'm being watched by two people with multiple accounts, but I appreciate it all the same! <3 ) 

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gridtakno In reply to StrangelyShiny [2017-02-21 20:43:12 +0000 UTC]

Your welcome keep up the work

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StartANewLif3 [2017-02-19 05:50:19 +0000 UTC]

This reminds me of my favorite novel The Ruins.

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StrangelyShiny In reply to StartANewLif3 [2017-02-20 01:25:58 +0000 UTC]

What's it about? :3

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StartANewLif3 In reply to StrangelyShiny [2017-03-07 13:00:43 +0000 UTC]

I'll try to be vague, in case you want to check it out and give it a read.
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It's a horror novel where a group of vacationists got trapped in an archaeological dig/ruin overgrown with vines.

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StrangelyShiny In reply to StartANewLif3 [2017-03-07 19:42:22 +0000 UTC]

Thanks for keeping it simple. :3

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dragon-roar [2017-02-18 06:10:40 +0000 UTC]

This is a really nice poem, you should keep writing them

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StrangelyShiny In reply to dragon-roar [2017-02-18 07:07:04 +0000 UTC]

I intend to!  

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Catnessa [2017-02-18 03:12:55 +0000 UTC]

Oh, this is so beautiful!   It's just so touching.......*sniffles*

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StrangelyShiny In reply to Catnessa [2017-02-18 04:42:06 +0000 UTC]

Thank you! ;w;

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JC-Solis01 [2017-02-18 01:14:42 +0000 UTC]

Haikus with a story to tell. This is pretty neat!

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StrangelyShiny In reply to JC-Solis01 [2017-02-18 04:41:38 +0000 UTC]

You know, I thought this poem was just alright at first, but apparently many people think it's something more.

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JC-Solis01 In reply to StrangelyShiny [2017-02-18 05:29:13 +0000 UTC]

Oh it definitely is. You were able to tell a story in a very unorthodox manner. Your poem was a masterpiece, something fine and well created. I imagine it must have taken time to craft the poem like this.

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StrangelyShiny In reply to JC-Solis01 [2017-02-18 07:06:22 +0000 UTC]

If I recall, I did put this one through some fairly rigorous editing.

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JC-Solis01 In reply to StrangelyShiny [2017-02-18 16:56:32 +0000 UTC]

I guess all that editing paid off.

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StrangelyShiny In reply to JC-Solis01 [2017-02-20 01:34:21 +0000 UTC]

Looks like it did~

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ChaosShadow [2017-02-17 23:43:56 +0000 UTC]

Hah, all right. I went into this expecting a typical Daily Deviation about the rose-colored past being tainted by tragedy and suddenly there's a vengeful plant-woman zombie murdering a gunman.

Well played, sir.

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StrangelyShiny In reply to ChaosShadow [2017-02-17 23:47:18 +0000 UTC]

Pfffff. Suddenly my poem doesn't sound quite as elegant, but that sounds too awesome for me to care. xD

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ChaosShadow In reply to StrangelyShiny [2017-02-18 05:15:01 +0000 UTC]

Nothing but praise, I assure you.

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StrangelyShiny In reply to ChaosShadow [2017-02-18 07:05:54 +0000 UTC]

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