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lekosis [2012-01-29 09:07:25 +0000 UTC]

Before I begin, please note that the author requested Brutal Critique from me, fully understood I was PMSing at the time, and damn well knew this was coming, so don't get bitchy with me if I'm an asshole about this. Okay? Okay.

I'm gonna just ramble here for a bit and spout off some snap reactions.

1. Those fuckers are creepy as shit. They look really excited about something and I bet it's rape. I bet they are excited about raping some bitches.
2. The one on the bottom actually manages to be three dimension with its fucking facial features in monochrome, props.
3. Her hips are seriously deformed. As in, nonexistent. As in, her whole lower torso is stretched out and she's had her major organs removed and all the flesh is gone from her ass. Give the poor girl some curves, Jesus.
4. The composition isn't bad but all that black on the right side of the image kind of squashes your girl there. Give her some space.
5. So one of her arms is plaid? Or is that shading? Fuck, I can't tell.
6. Her hands were designed to be used as murder weapons, I think she is going to kill someone just by putting her fingertips in their eye sockets, they will slide in like fucking toothpicks into sausage balls. I am not fucking around on this one. Actually they look fuckin' rad, rockin' the style thing, but her arms are kinda like iron bars in that they are perfectly straight. Kinda like her torso! I'm noting a theme here.
7. Hitler 'stache.
8. Line quality is all over the fucking place. You love you some dip pens and props on making all the lines straight, but you either need to get some non-bleed paper or start encouraging the bleed on purpose for texture's sake or see if you can fiddle with 'em in Photoshop, because the line quality is turning a cool, stylized picture into an amateur sketch.
9. Facial expression is bitchin'.
10. If you're going to give her a shadow, give her something to sit on. I mean shit, even if it's an empty white room with no windows or doors or furniture, give her a background so she's not pissing black ink all over herself or something. That, and make her shadows consistent. The one on the ground is at a different angle from all the cross-hatching (which I assume is shadow; if it's not, well fuck, I'm confused now) and with the angle it IS at it doesn't look like it's on a horizontal floor. I honestly could not tell you WHAT she is sitting on, truth be told.
11. I feel like where the buddies are coming out of the spine you mighta fucking copped out. Seriously? She's got critters growing out of her spine and you give me two little lines for each one? If they're pouring out of her like liquid, I want that texture. If they're twisting out and getting yanked out of her muscles, I want THAT texture. If they're bursting through her skin, GIVE IT TO ME. I feel gipped; you've got this creepy awesome concept and it's not tactile at all.
12. Love the hair texture, it's in keeping with your neato straight lines and angles and clean curves--this is where I hate the line quality; you've got this cool style and the blurriness and bleeding in the lines, not to mention the occasional splotchy spot, is really fucking with me.
13. Head structure is good, like the shape of her face.
14. Fuck, you know what this shit needs? A creepy border, like darkness creeping in around her or some shit. Or a background. I dunno, the blank white is boring.
15. I kinda want to be able to see her toes peeking out from under her butt. Unless her feet got cut off or something; I respect that.

In closing, you got a good thing going here, now man up and make it better.

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molegato [2012-01-08 00:01:56 +0000 UTC]

That's creepy and funny at the same time. And I like that XD

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Tigrantia [2011-12-30 21:56:53 +0000 UTC]

XD Creepy...

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Chimaerical [2011-12-29 20:35:56 +0000 UTC]

Awesomesauce 8o

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Natmonkey [2011-12-29 18:14:41 +0000 UTC]

This is simply brilliant.

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