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sykopath90 — Farewell
Published: 2006-07-30 20:08:18 +0000 UTC; Views: 622; Favourites: 6; Downloads: 4
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Go onward brave soldierYour journey is done
Your work is finished,
Yet your pain is not
You watch over us;
And sob as we do
You will miss us
As we will miss.
So goodbye brave soldier
May you rest in peace
Curse this grief
Well beyond pain
Pushing the borders
Of anger and wrath
Our remaining tears
Will be spent
Not on your sorrow
But on your revenge
Goodbye my friend…
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2nd + 3rd line You = Your?
Punctuation is needed. It is not really uplifting at all. It is a memorial poem, but it seems to encourage( I don't think that's the word i want) not comfort the survivor. I know you must feel anger at his passing. You should remember the good times with him and not how to get revenge. That is only my opinion though. It is a good piece. I will pray for you in your time of grief.
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*tear* my god i miss him!!!! im so happy that you were able to put so much emotion into this. i can't talk now....*walks to room and locks the door*
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this memorial should be perfect for him...
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it will be........*goes back in room*
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