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talvipaivanseisaus β€” Twelve Moments In The Dead Of Summer
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Description 1. The sunlight glistens on her wet skin as she's walking towards the beach. He has never seen anything so beautiful in his life and even if the words seem to dry up in his throat, he knows what he is going to do next.

2. It hasn't rained for months now so it only takes a small spark from the cigarette to set the undergrowth on fire. On the first sign of fire they panic and run, never to look back but to remember years later, in nightmares, the crazy old man who lived in the shack nearby and was never seen since.

3. They lay together on the grass, watching the sun slowly go down behind the treeline. He takes her hand, old, wrinkled and frail into his, and whispers: "I would give up everything I have for one more summer like this". She responds: "Darling, you already did that years ago". They burst into giggles, just like the one he was supposed to take her dancing for the first time and got lost on the way, and it seems that all these years haven't changed anything at all.

4. The thorns in the rose bush cut into her skin. She is only nine but already knows that the best places to hide from other people are the ones that hurt the most, both physically and on the inside. She closes her lips tight and crawls deeper, then watches the older kids laughing and walking by. Somewhere far away she hears her mother calling for her, shedding only a single tear as she tries to think of a good story.

5. She's ten and this is the first time her parents have taken her on their annual bike trip. The scenery rolls smoothly alongside the road even if it does get a bit hot in the sunshine. They should finally reach grandma's house in the evening. The last night in the tent along with all the bugs and the ghost stories was a lot of fun, but now she's thinking of all the strawberries and the vanilla ice cream she knows will be waiting for her once she gets there.

6. The silence is deafening and moments turn into minutes. Then she lowers her gaze, picks up her purse and walks away without saying a word. When he can no longer make her out from the crowd, the well-dressed man lights a cigarette and shouts to the waiter: "More champagne!", then drowns himself in the noise of the boulevard by the sea.

7. She paces barefoot in the moonlit garden, enjoying the feeling of the blades of grass between her toes. Still, her thoughts lie elsewhere: he has come here, just like her friends said he would, and she knows that tonight is the night that will finally make the difference. She steal a glance, then walks to the pier and waits for the perfect moment. When she hears his steps on the path approaching the shoreline, she takes off the rest of her clothes and dives into the cool water, hoping that he will follow.

8. It was supposed to be just another camping trip, his annual retreat with the guys. That's what he said, and after all these years, it felt like she could finally trust him. Yet, as she sees the police car pull up on the driveway and the look on the face of the police officer getting sluggishly out of the car, she bursts into tears and realizes that their life will never be the same again.

9. Giggling, they open the barn door and marvel at the light that filters through the holes between the old painted boards that make up the walls. She takes him by the hand (or is it his that takes hers?) and they find themselves a perfect spot, a pile of hay in the dimmest corner which also provides some cover from the prying eyes who will eventually notice their absence. The buttons on her dress prove quite difficult for his trembling hands, but smiling she helps him out and after that everything just falls in the place.

10. The days in the desert are searing hot but the nights are cool and dark, so they wake just before sundown and keep moving east as fast as they can. They can no longer hear the gunfire, but the smell of their homes burning does not leave them. At this pace, they should reach the border in less than a week, provided they can find enough water to survive. No one talks of Micha, or what happened to young Anya before they fled. Before they fall asleep the next morning, they try listening to their old radio for signs that the world has not forgotten about them, hearing only static.

11. He is counting the markings he has made on the bunk. Fifty-two. Forty-three. Twenty-six. Now the count stands at fifteen, barely more than two weeks. That many days until he can finally go home, away from this cursed place in the middle of nowhere. The camp counselor has been unbelievably patient and helpful for an adult, but there is nothing that he can do, because he cannot be everywhere all the time. Even school is better because at home he doesn't feel like he has to lie to his parents about how things are. And yet, he knows that after two weeks, he will never see David again, or hold his hand like he did back then on the forest hike when they thought no one was watching. Tomorrow the number will be fourteen. He sheds a few tears and then falls asleep, dreaming of his first kiss.

12. There is a new scent in the air. It smells of winter and hunger and sleep. It has been a long summer. She has forgotten the scent of her cubs already. She heads to the river to seek for fish. She needs to eat. She is hungry. Some of the leaves have turned yellow already. Soon there will be berries again. And then there will be the long sleep.
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Comments: 44

fruit---cake [2015-03-16 12:53:35 +0000 UTC]

Wow it's really beautiful the way you have woven disparate elements into one single cohesive theme.

I am making a summer zine and amidst all the elements both art and prose that i would be adding to it, i wish to add something similar.
Would it be alright if i write a piece similar to this style. I am clearly inspired by the way you have put together this piece and would love to attempt something similar if you do not mind. Thanks.Β 

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talvipaivanseisaus In reply to fruit---cake [2015-03-16 13:20:39 +0000 UTC]

Thank you

I was heavily inspired by Neil Gaiman's Fifteen Painted Cards from a Vampire Tarot (I found it online here if you care to read, excellent stuff www.slideshare.net/985namankum… ), so you are of course most welcome to do your version. If my work is an inspiration for it, it would be nice to read your version as well. Happy writing! Β 

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fruit---cake In reply to talvipaivanseisaus [2015-03-16 13:28:48 +0000 UTC]

Thanks so much for the link, shall get to reading it pronto. I shall write my version and shall definitely share it with you. Thanks once again.Β 

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talvipaivanseisaus In reply to fruit---cake [2015-03-16 14:21:27 +0000 UTC]

You are most welcome.Β 

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fruit---cake In reply to talvipaivanseisaus [2015-09-12 12:51:48 +0000 UTC]

Finally after many moons my version of this piece is ready, as promised i want to send it to you. Let me know the email id to send it across. Thanks.

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talvipaivanseisaus In reply to fruit---cake [2015-09-14 07:44:43 +0000 UTC]

Hi You can send it to martti.nurmikari@iki.fi, or Note me here on dA. Thank you Β 

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fruit---cake In reply to talvipaivanseisaus [2015-09-15 09:01:35 +0000 UTC]

Thanks, I sent it the email id you mentioned in the good old fashioned way as a Word document.Β 

I hope it's not disappointing to you as the original writer that an inspired piece barely captures the essence of how it was originally designed. This is my only and also best attempt. Β 
Do read it and let me know what you think about it.
Thanks

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Sorceress555 [2014-10-10 22:01:54 +0000 UTC]

I thought it was all about the same couple until I read about the bear at the end...is it? Β Or are they just different snippets of emotions and time? Β Either way, lovely work. <3

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talvipaivanseisaus In reply to Sorceress555 [2014-10-11 09:48:04 +0000 UTC]

Thank you I don't think they're all connected. Some might be, though Β 

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brietta-a-m-f [2014-09-30 19:47:21 +0000 UTC]

A well deserved DD for this one! It caught my eye in the footer, and that first snippet held my attention. I didn't have time to read it then, so I did the dreaded fave-and-run so I wouldn't lose it. Boy, am I glad I did!

Normally, I like to give detailed, thought out comments on lit work, but it's difficult to know what to say. However, I'll do my best!

I think my favorite part is the ethereal, almost wistful quality of each vignette. They feel like memories, or like peeping at the world from someone else's vision. While it all ties very well together, and the style is consistent throughout the piece, you give each a defined feel. Each memory definitely belongs to a different character.

This reminds me, in many ways, of the poetry from TS Eliot or Jewel, and I love that. You mentioned that you planned to try the same for the other seasons, and I sincerely hope you do!

Very well done on this! And once more, congratulations!

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talvipaivanseisaus In reply to brietta-a-m-f [2014-10-01 08:25:03 +0000 UTC]

Fave'n'run seem so to be the usual tactic for most people Proper comments are as appreciated as they are rare, so thank you. I have to confess that I am guilty of not really writing thoughtful comments, either. It takes so much effort to wade through written work and I mostly browse dA at work during small breaks, so there's little time for that.

You're not the first person to mention T.S. Eliot, which feels incredibly humbling. Some day I need to read some of his work; I'm not very well versed in poetry at all and English is not my first language, so taking on a task like that feels daunting. Poetry has so much subtlety that's hard to grasp sometimes, and translations, no matter how great, always lose that special something. That said, I think I'll make a library reservation now

There's an autumn version already here talvipaivanseisaus.deviantart.… though it's a bit different. In some ways I think it's better and feels less contrived, on the other hand this one was more deliberate and there's more of myself in this one, I think. Will be interesting to see how the winter goes, it's already getting cold...

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brietta-a-m-f In reply to talvipaivanseisaus [2014-10-02 18:04:49 +0000 UTC]

I really don't read a lot of poetry, a good deal of it goes over my head. However, Eliot has been one of my favorites for a very long time. It has an ethereal story-like quality to it, which is why your piece reminded me so much of it. I highly recommend "The Hollow Men". That one quite possibly my favorite of his, if I had to choose.

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talvipaivanseisaus In reply to brietta-a-m-f [2014-10-04 14:07:32 +0000 UTC]

I read an annotated version at first and was kind of overwhelmed by the amount of references but I loved the poem. It felt like it came from a deep, deep place, with enough hints and references to build a world. The ending I have seen quoted many times. Thank you for the tip, I will definitely need to read more.Β 

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brietta-a-m-f In reply to talvipaivanseisaus [2014-10-05 17:18:33 +0000 UTC]

The ending was what led me to the rest of the poem. Most of the time, poetry sort of goes over my head, but that one got me.

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xlntwtch [2014-09-30 15:17:16 +0000 UTC]

Well done. Congratulations on your DD. The moments are each a story. Thank you.

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talvipaivanseisaus In reply to xlntwtch [2014-09-30 15:50:44 +0000 UTC]

Thank you very much The DD was a nice surprise I hope to eventually do all seasons, some of the microstories are still haunting me...

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xlntwtch In reply to talvipaivanseisaus [2014-09-30 21:13:48 +0000 UTC]

You're very welcome.

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MachinesBleedToo [2014-09-30 02:03:54 +0000 UTC]

The addition of 12 I really like, the animal point of view makes for a good ending...a surprising one but ties it all together somehow. I guess because it emphasizes that these are all separate looks into different lives.

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talvipaivanseisaus In reply to MachinesBleedToo [2014-09-30 08:29:07 +0000 UTC]

Thank you. I think, in the end, the experience and the passion of living is pretty much the same for every living being. Separate, but still something is shared...Β 

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AgonizingSwordfish [2014-09-30 00:54:21 +0000 UTC]

Congrats on the DD!Β  Β 

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talvipaivanseisaus In reply to AgonizingSwordfish [2014-09-30 07:55:21 +0000 UTC]

Thank you Β 

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AgonizingSwordfish In reply to talvipaivanseisaus [2014-10-04 19:43:04 +0000 UTC]

My pleasure

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RoseScarlet [2014-09-30 00:42:48 +0000 UTC]

this took me a while to understand, but it's beautiful.

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talvipaivanseisaus In reply to RoseScarlet [2014-09-30 08:16:26 +0000 UTC]

Thank you I hoped to put something beautiful in it...Β 

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RoseScarlet In reply to talvipaivanseisaus [2014-09-30 23:58:36 +0000 UTC]

everything was beautiful.

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C-A-Harland [2014-09-29 23:11:00 +0000 UTC]

Beautiful piece. I love the range of emotions and scenarios you presented.

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talvipaivanseisaus In reply to C-A-Harland [2014-09-30 08:29:17 +0000 UTC]

Thank you Β 

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hopeburnsblue [2014-09-29 22:15:03 +0000 UTC]

Love this! Congrats on the DD!

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talvipaivanseisaus In reply to hopeburnsblue [2014-09-30 08:02:38 +0000 UTC]

Thank you Β 

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ReenvhAi [2014-09-29 17:26:32 +0000 UTC]

Woah! It's just... woah. Congrats for your DD I'll watch you

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talvipaivanseisaus In reply to ReenvhAi [2014-09-30 07:55:34 +0000 UTC]

Thank you Β 

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grungecatz [2014-09-29 16:27:46 +0000 UTC]

congrats!

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talvipaivanseisaus In reply to grungecatz [2014-09-30 07:55:39 +0000 UTC]

Thank you Β 

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TheGalleryOfEve [2014-09-29 14:31:45 +0000 UTC]

Congratulations on your well-deserved DD!!!

I’m very happy for you!!!

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talvipaivanseisaus In reply to TheGalleryOfEve [2014-09-30 08:01:42 +0000 UTC]

Thank you, me too Β 

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TheGalleryOfEve In reply to talvipaivanseisaus [2014-09-30 15:55:11 +0000 UTC]



(Thank you so much for the llama!!! )

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Eremitik [2014-09-29 09:23:03 +0000 UTC]

A unique and wonderful read. I thoroughly enjoyed each glimpse into a different life. You show just how varied and personal each moment can be.
Excellent work!

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talvipaivanseisaus In reply to Eremitik [2014-09-30 08:18:14 +0000 UTC]

Thank you Β 

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Eremitik In reply to talvipaivanseisaus [2014-09-30 09:16:51 +0000 UTC]

And Thank You for taking the time to browse through my gallery. It is appreciated and a rare occurrence to have someone return a favorite for a favorite.
I plan on returning to look through your gallery a bit more.

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talvipaivanseisaus In reply to Eremitik [2014-09-30 11:01:04 +0000 UTC]

Feel free to browse around. There is plenty to see, I hope...Β 

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brassteeth [2014-09-29 08:01:32 +0000 UTC]

Congratulations on your D.D. Well deserved nicely written!

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talvipaivanseisaus In reply to brassteeth [2014-09-30 08:15:35 +0000 UTC]

Thank you Β 

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cerealnovels [2014-08-29 12:22:52 +0000 UTC]

Does the number 12 have some significance? Moving from number to number there is so much joy, sadness and pain. There is also beauty in emotion and description. This is packed with life's variety. You have given me much to ponder this morning. Β 

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talvipaivanseisaus In reply to cerealnovels [2014-08-29 13:26:18 +0000 UTC]

It's probably the one that I most feel "mine", but there's nothing more "special" about it, I guess. Just wanted to give an non-human viewpoint. There's an older, autumn version atΒ talvipaivanseisaus.deviantart.… . Maybe some day also winter and spring...Β 

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