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fruit---cake [2015-03-16 12:53:35 +0000 UTC]
Wow it's really beautiful the way you have woven disparate elements into one single cohesive theme.
I am making a summer zine and amidst all the elements both art and prose that i would be adding to it, i wish to add something similar.
Would it be alright if i write a piece similar to this style. I am clearly inspired by the way you have put together this piece and would love to attempt something similar if you do not mind. Thanks.Β
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fruit---cake In reply to talvipaivanseisaus [2015-03-16 13:28:48 +0000 UTC]
Thanks so much for the link, shall get to reading it pronto. I shall write my version and shall definitely share it with you. Thanks once again.Β
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fruit---cake In reply to talvipaivanseisaus [2015-09-12 12:51:48 +0000 UTC]
Finally after many moons my version of this piece is ready, as promised i want to send it to you. Let me know the email id to send it across. Thanks.
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fruit---cake In reply to talvipaivanseisaus [2015-09-15 09:01:35 +0000 UTC]
Thanks, I sent it the email id you mentioned in the good old fashioned way as a Word document.Β
I hope it's not disappointing to you as the original writer that an inspired piece barely captures the essence of how it was originally designed. This is my only and also best attempt. Β
Do read it and let me know what you think about it.
Thanks
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Sorceress555 [2014-10-10 22:01:54 +0000 UTC]
I thought it was all about the same couple until I read about the bear at the end...is it? Β Or are they just different snippets of emotions and time? Β Either way, lovely work. <3
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brietta-a-m-f [2014-09-30 19:47:21 +0000 UTC]
A well deserved DD for this one! It caught my eye in the footer, and that first snippet held my attention. I didn't have time to read it then, so I did the dreaded fave-and-run so I wouldn't lose it. Boy, am I glad I did!
Normally, I like to give detailed, thought out comments on lit work, but it's difficult to know what to say. However, I'll do my best!
I think my favorite part is the ethereal, almost wistful quality of each vignette. They feel like memories, or like peeping at the world from someone else's vision. While it all ties very well together, and the style is consistent throughout the piece, you give each a defined feel. Each memory definitely belongs to a different character.
This reminds me, in many ways, of the poetry from TS Eliot or Jewel, and I love that. You mentioned that you planned to try the same for the other seasons, and I sincerely hope you do!
Very well done on this! And once more, congratulations!
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talvipaivanseisaus In reply to brietta-a-m-f [2014-10-01 08:25:03 +0000 UTC]
Fave'n'run seem so to be the usual tactic for most people Proper comments are as appreciated as they are rare, so thank you. I have to confess that I am guilty of not really writing thoughtful comments, either. It takes so much effort to wade through written work and I mostly browse dA at work during small breaks, so there's little time for that.
You're not the first person to mention T.S. Eliot, which feels incredibly humbling. Some day I need to read some of his work; I'm not very well versed in poetry at all and English is not my first language, so taking on a task like that feels daunting. Poetry has so much subtlety that's hard to grasp sometimes, and translations, no matter how great, always lose that special something. That said, I think I'll make a library reservation now
There's an autumn version already here talvipaivanseisaus.deviantart.β¦ though it's a bit different. In some ways I think it's better and feels less contrived, on the other hand this one was more deliberate and there's more of myself in this one, I think. Will be interesting to see how the winter goes, it's already getting cold...
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brietta-a-m-f In reply to talvipaivanseisaus [2014-10-02 18:04:49 +0000 UTC]
I really don't read a lot of poetry, a good deal of it goes over my head. However, Eliot has been one of my favorites for a very long time. It has an ethereal story-like quality to it, which is why your piece reminded me so much of it. I highly recommend "The Hollow Men". That one quite possibly my favorite of his, if I had to choose.
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talvipaivanseisaus In reply to brietta-a-m-f [2014-10-04 14:07:32 +0000 UTC]
I read an annotated version at first and was kind of overwhelmed by the amount of references but I loved the poem. It felt like it came from a deep, deep place, with enough hints and references to build a world. The ending I have seen quoted many times. Thank you for the tip, I will definitely need to read more.Β
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brietta-a-m-f In reply to talvipaivanseisaus [2014-10-05 17:18:33 +0000 UTC]
The ending was what led me to the rest of the poem. Most of the time, poetry sort of goes over my head, but that one got me.
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xlntwtch [2014-09-30 15:17:16 +0000 UTC]
Well done. Congratulations on your DD. The moments are each a story. Thank you.
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MachinesBleedToo [2014-09-30 02:03:54 +0000 UTC]
The addition of 12 I really like, the animal point of view makes for a good ending...a surprising one but ties it all together somehow. I guess because it emphasizes that these are all separate looks into different lives.
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talvipaivanseisaus In reply to MachinesBleedToo [2014-09-30 08:29:07 +0000 UTC]
Thank you. I think, in the end, the experience and the passion of living is pretty much the same for every living being. Separate, but still something is shared...Β
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RoseScarlet [2014-09-30 00:42:48 +0000 UTC]
this took me a while to understand, but it's beautiful.
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C-A-Harland [2014-09-29 23:11:00 +0000 UTC]
Beautiful piece. I love the range of emotions and scenarios you presented.
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hopeburnsblue [2014-09-29 22:15:03 +0000 UTC]
Love this! Congrats on the DD!
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grungecatz [2014-09-29 16:27:46 +0000 UTC]
congrats!
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Eremitik [2014-09-29 09:23:03 +0000 UTC]
A unique and wonderful read. I thoroughly enjoyed each glimpse into a different life. You show just how varied and personal each moment can be.
Excellent work!
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Eremitik In reply to talvipaivanseisaus [2014-09-30 09:16:51 +0000 UTC]
And Thank You for taking the time to browse through my gallery. It is appreciated and a rare occurrence to have someone return a favorite for a favorite.
I plan on returning to look through your gallery a bit more.
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talvipaivanseisaus In reply to Eremitik [2014-09-30 11:01:04 +0000 UTC]
Feel free to browse around. There is plenty to see, I hope...Β
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brassteeth [2014-09-29 08:01:32 +0000 UTC]
Congratulations on your D.D. Well deserved nicely written!
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cerealnovels [2014-08-29 12:22:52 +0000 UTC]
Does the number 12 have some significance? Moving from number to number there is so much joy, sadness and pain. There is also beauty in emotion and description. This is packed with life's variety. You have given me much to ponder this morning. Β
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talvipaivanseisaus In reply to cerealnovels [2014-08-29 13:26:18 +0000 UTC]
It's probably the one that I most feel "mine", but there's nothing more "special" about it, I guess. Just wanted to give an non-human viewpoint. There's an older, autumn version atΒ talvipaivanseisaus.deviantart.β¦ . Maybe some day also winter and spring...Β
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