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Your tangled up soulhas taken a toll,
Hiding dark and deep
the secrets you keep
The tears you have shed
from thoughts in your head,
Dear they were all fiction:
a made up addiction
I want you to know
I see through the show,
I know that your eyes
tell genuine lies
I watch as you feign
as youβre still in pain,
And my soul will be too
until I have saved you
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Aw so glad it does! Thanks for reading.
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THANKS!!!<33
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I FREAKING love this so much! the rhymes are perfect and I've felt this same way for 5 years. *claps*
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Awe thank you so so much dearie!
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okay...am I dreaming? this is amazing and...wow.Β im speechless
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I'm going through my momentary phase of insanity and your words just hypnotize me. It's brilliantly written.Β
I love the last stanza . It's perfect!Β
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Awe thank you so much sunshine! I love your icon so <3
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Truly and amazingly talented writer. Very well written.
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Aw no you are too sweet! I'm just trying to change the world in my own little way. XD
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Haha I love it, keep doing what ur doing!
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still sitting here at 2:18am clicking through ur gallery lol... u have a way of making me relate to ur stuff
have a weird urge to tell the narrator of ur poem that is probably no use, though o_O
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Hahaha, yeah. :/ But who knows, sometimes you can be surpised. AND AW YOU ARE SO SWEET!!!
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'Genuine lies' Oh my god your poems are amazing.
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Haha thank you!! <3
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Tangled up souls from Tangled Tales,Β
lovely.Β
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The emotion and conviction this poem presents is very impressive.Β
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You've captured perfectly a certain essence. Best friend of a suicidal. Lover of an anorexic. Crush on an abused person. Any way you look at it, people in pain can relate. Good job on this one.
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Thank you! Glad you understood and could relate!
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No, thank YOU for writing it!!!
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Oh my god this is what my character David feels about his crush (and later boyfriend/husband) Jayy during one of my stories!! That's just awesome!! 
The characters I'm talking about are in a series I'm working on. I only have 2 of 6 stories up, but the rest are started.
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Woah what a coincidence! Super cool you can relate!
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That's crazy, but so freaking awesome and also really sweet because this describes EXACTLY what David feels about Jayy during his darkened days...
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Awwww, thank you so much! 
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But youβre still in pain
And my soul will be too
Until I have saved you
That's dedicationΒ
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So sad and serious, but well-handled in poetic form.
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You're welcome!
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if i'd let you. wheni don't trust, it'll be a rather hard thing to accomplish. but the person being spoken to could easily be me.
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So glad you understand it!
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yeah, it's not hard for me to... a good bit of my poetry reflects that...
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I love this! This describes perfectly what I've experienced with some people in my life.Β
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Thanks! Glad you can relate and understand!
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Truly marvelous, this pretty much talks about everybody, everybody often keeps things for themselves and lie, sometimes only to others but often they also lie to themselves, this one makes my heart ache in particular, because somebody really dear to me is doing this and as much as i'd wish to help her she doesn't let me help her, with this you really made my emotion go awry, and this is what should always happen with poetry. you did a really good job on this one.
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Thank you! I thought this one was very universal, as it can apply as much or as little as one wants it to!
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