DOAFan247 [2017-12-21 13:57:03 +0000 UTC]
Quite a nice piece here, TB! The way you paint the picture of every scene with words, you describe them beautifully. Engaging from beginning to end. The chloro scene was very well done as well. The gentle motions of both captive and captor were absolutely wonderful. Overall, an amazing read!
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Damselbinder [2017-06-03 04:37:12 +0000 UTC]
Hot effing shenanigans, TB, this was one hot shenanigan. You really got across the sense of Ai's mounting lust as she strips her helpless prize, and you describe her so intimately and gorgeously. Fantastic stuff. I loved that chloro scene as well. Makoto's soft whimpers were just perfect - she was very much the 'sleepy little princess'!
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BungleBing [2017-06-02 19:08:11 +0000 UTC]
Very nice little fic here! Makoto is definitely the most attractive P5 girl, and you did a great job of unwrapping her here. Really feels like we're opening a lovely gift as we read along. Overall a fantastic little story, and a great read overall.
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