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TenderRevenge In reply to ??? [2012-07-27 15:28:17 +0000 UTC]
Thank you so much for your critique!!! I am so glad you loved it so much and felt that way about it! I surprised myself with this one. I always want to improve and here I felt like my writing really was compared to my first oneshot. I am also so bad with grammar usually, it's so wonderful to know you didn't find any fault with that either. I stay paranoid about that too. I really wanted people to be able to see and hear and feel and smell everything as much as I could without getting so into it that it took away from what was happening. I'm so glad I got this critique! Thank you so much!!!!
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ohfrankie0404 [2018-03-15 05:54:37 +0000 UTC]
angry frankie is a sexy frankie Β
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My-Mental-Fiction In reply to TenderRevenge [2013-10-06 12:55:52 +0000 UTC]
Rawr xD Β
Yeah, I can totally understand why, holy mother of god!XD haha he was indeed forceful ;D Β
Loved it anyway ;DΒ
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TenderRevenge In reply to My-Mental-Fiction [2013-10-06 13:31:33 +0000 UTC]
Well in all fairness, Gerard knew he had jealousy issues. He's such a masochist so he pushed him to it. Then kept pushing. I loved that about it!
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DisturbingMachine [2012-09-23 04:48:29 +0000 UTC]
Very hot and very good detail. The ending was perfection.
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TenderRevenge In reply to DisturbingMachine [2012-09-23 14:09:50 +0000 UTC]
You write stuff like nobody is going to read it. Or like just one of your perv friends that is into a certain thing is going to be the only one to read it. If you write thinking of all the different types of personalities that you know and love might read it, you might not write it. It's hard to explain. I just never thought of you as reading this. I'm glad you did though. More glad you liked it lol. Yaay!
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TenderRevenge In reply to DisturbingMachine [2012-09-23 14:16:38 +0000 UTC]
I give a shit! I try to read everything you put out! It is good to write like nobody will read it. Then ppl see inside your sick mind when they do and find out things like what a masochist you can be lol.
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TenderRevenge In reply to DisturbingMachine [2012-09-23 15:39:35 +0000 UTC]
Well one likes it and the other likes to give it. Ahhh all in the name of love. Hahaha!
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DisturbingMachine In reply to TenderRevenge [2012-09-23 18:01:54 +0000 UTC]
This reminds me I may have to change something in Amnesia. Do you remember reading anywhere in Untold or Welcome to the Opera where I put sadist?
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TenderRevenge In reply to DisturbingMachine [2012-09-23 18:23:38 +0000 UTC]
You said they didn't believe in satin I think. I can't remember. I don't know. Hmm.. I just know I love the story, the way you write it, the rp, all of it!!!!
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DisturbingMachine In reply to TenderRevenge [2012-09-23 18:26:46 +0000 UTC]
I think I need to change Alexander from saidst to the m one but Google has me confused.
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DisturbingMachine In reply to TenderRevenge [2012-09-23 18:40:20 +0000 UTC]
Then I go to Wikipedia and Dictonary and it gives me the opposite.
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TenderRevenge In reply to DisturbingMachine [2012-09-23 19:06:17 +0000 UTC]
The answer to everyday issues that piss you off. YES! Dungeons for anger, Tonic for sickness or pain, Alexander for ...everything else! LOL
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TenderRevenge In reply to DisturbingMachine [2012-09-23 19:18:59 +0000 UTC]
In mine! I'm Daniel! Okay so your Mixk. Poor Nari though! I really feel sorry for her sometimes. She needs some.... girth in her life too! OMG LOL!
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fayann [2012-07-20 23:27:01 +0000 UTC]
*dies of fangasm* You have out done yourself with this one, love.
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fayann In reply to TenderRevenge [2012-07-21 15:57:26 +0000 UTC]
I will! I'll call you today as soon as possible. I miss you so much!
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GEEJAZZ [2012-07-19 16:22:13 +0000 UTC]
I love this; it is so far removed from the usual sex & sweet love in the stories normally read. I had never thought Frank could be so feral, but you just know his actions are driven by his deep love for Gerard. He is driven insane by jealousy and needs to possess him completely. I love that he exerts his power over Gerard at the end by holding back when Gerard begs for sweet release. Gerard also know exactly what he is doing, initially just teasing and getting a reaction out of Frank; but then seeing the powerful effect it has, he just keeps pushing Frank to the edge, maybe seeing how far he can go, & how much Frank loves him. I think in a way they are both just proving how deeply in love they are, and how much they need each other.
Thanks Carmen BTW I have my 1st paragraph !!!!
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