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TGping — Spotlight Blurr page 5
Published: 2009-04-15 20:27:25 +0000 UTC; Views: 1863; Favourites: 13; Downloads: 33
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You pulled off the more organic shaped characters, like Blurr, pretty well. They feel pretty natural in terms of their placement and posing. Also, very good work with the background. The main problem is your more boxy looking characters. They feel a bit too stiff. You might want to mold them a little bit so that it looks more natural. In Panel 2, Pitstop, I think it is, his Neck looks totally weird. Same in the third panel. Also, I think you need to work on the pose for the character at the left in the last panel. Too Odd.
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Yeah, I think adding a little curve to the straight lines would help a bit. I'll definitely keep this in mind 
I'll have to work on the boxy guys
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Majorly awesome on the sequentional art stuff!That is so hard of a subject to me that one page like this is worth like a couple thousand of my stabs at that style
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Thanks dude, truly appreciated
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No Problem!
Also Optimus Prime face paint uploaded,but I didnt finish before getting to tired,but feel free to critique anyhow!was hard finding good images of his face without the guard on it.
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Thank you, that is part of my main goal in drawing comics
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Ive decided that if you want the job Im going to put you on my art commissions list as the comic artist for my TF fan fic. I know you would probably want to take part in the cover page thing for each chapter I'll have going soon enough but I like your sequential art of TFs much better! Send me a note of how much you generally charge per page, as I would most likely only be after pencils right now, and if I've asked before about prices then I've forgotten and I'm sorryto ask again! I will be working out a script for chapter one of my Genesis story sooner or later for making into sequential art, feel free to check it out in my gallery and read it, to see if you would like to do the comic commission ok.
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Beautiful lines, TG! I love this page. I think moreso with this page than any of the previous, you can tell exactly what's happening here without any words due to your wonderful use of shifting points of view or camera angle. You can really get a sense of the elation that Blurr's crew has as he invites them to join him out on the town, which is of course followed subsequently by those same hopes being crushed when they realize he doesn't much care about them at all. Wonderful job.
That being said, I think I would like to see the guy on the far left of the last panel looking a bit more depressed, though.
And the other racer that is with Blurr... looks a bit too much like Blurr, I think. But other than that, this page is great! An exceptional example of true sequential art.
- Alty
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Yeah, the guy on the far left should have his head bowed or something.
And for the other racer, I think I'm following the script, they said to make him look like he came out of the same factory as blurr. So i dunno on that one.
Thanks for the in depth...ness? Thanks dude!
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As long as you think it's helpful. I don't want to sound nitpicky or anything.
- Alty
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Not nitpicky at all, anything helps
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Nice. Man, having to draw all that in perspective. I would have died at page 2.
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lol, its your friend dude!
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My friend...and my enemy.
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lol, tell me about it!
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