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ThatNekohacker — Just One Bite, Love (Drabble) by-nd

Published: 2013-04-27 18:59:10 +0000 UTC; Views: 4318; Favourites: 42; Downloads: 1
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Description “You baka! What do you mean that you can’t eat?"
                                                                               
“I just can't afford to eat....end of story"                                                                                                   

“If I know you well, you can’t go a single day- no minute- without eating something especially that American slob you call a hamburger”                                                    

“Well those days are over….if I’m supposed to be a hero, I can’t afford to be eating this junk”                                                                                                                                

“It never stopped you before, Alfred”                                                                                              

“…….You don’t understand how much it hurts to see yourself in the mirror and to see only a huge glob of fat that supposed to be you” Alfred started to tremble trying to hold back the tears forming in his bright blue eyes that lost its former shine long ago.                                                                                                                                      

“Just please eat one bite of this American rubbish I got you at McDonalds…Please eat…You need to eat, love” Arthur soothed while offering the delicious Big Mac to his stubborn idiot of a brother.                                                                                            

“Never again….Never Again!” Alfred knocked the Big Mac out of Arthur’s hands with brute force his voice ringing with pure anger.                                                                    

“Why doesn’t anyone understand? I’m still so fat” Alfred sobbed into his Arthur’s chest with great shame tugging his stomach.  Hugging his brother tightly, Arthur kissed the hero’s forehead softy gently holding up his head so their eyes can meet.        

“Now listen here Alfred F. Jones, you’re stronger than this and don’t be silly you are obviously not fat no matter how many hamburgers you eat. Sure you need to practice self-control, but don’t be an anorexic in the process. I love you just the way you are…my hero”                                                                                                              

“You really think so? B-but you always keep calling me Master of Pudge and making fun of my belly Alfred’s blue eyes met with Arthur’s lime green eyes and suddenly their whole world paused completely.                                                                      

“I say those things just to mess with you don’t take them too seriously ok. Now come on and grab your jacket we’re going to get some sconces for you to eat, love” Arthur chuckled while his hand going through the hero’s luscious shaggy blonde hair.                                                                                                                                    

“Ewwww sconces! Do you want me to die, dude?”                                                                          

“How dare you don’t appreciate English fine cuisine! They were a recipe handed down from my mumsy….but ok for you hero we’ll go to McDonalds to get a Big Mac just the two of us”                                                                                                              

“Ice cream too?” Alfred asked with a huge toothy grin on his face with his blue eyes shining brightly like two diamonds in the sky.                                                                                      

“Yes ice cream too and we’ll share it together like old times. Now let’s go!” Arthur grabbed Alfred’s hand walking out the door.                                                                      

“Wait Arthur before we go I want to give you something as a token of my appreciation”                                                                                                                              

“Now, now….You don’t need to thank me, l-” Arthur was interrupted by Alfred’s lips passionately rubbing against his own.                                                                                      

“I love you Arthur even more than all hamburgers or ice cream in the world”  Alfred spoke softly unlike his usually loud self.                                                                              

“I love you too, baka” Arthur smiled while going in for another passionate filled kiss.
~Fin~
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Comments: 29

ramendangosenbei [2015-02-08 09:49:48 +0000 UTC]

Awwwwww and pfft..mumsy

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xXDodem-DemonicXx [2014-01-13 16:29:27 +0000 UTC]

Ah..I love fanfics like this, gosh..they're so hard to find in my opinion oAo" Great fic! <3

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Siveryyao [2013-04-29 17:24:26 +0000 UTC]

QWQ!I really love this

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TiniEve [2013-04-28 09:26:06 +0000 UTC]

I love this!

Great job!

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Unspoken-Tales [2013-04-28 01:46:57 +0000 UTC]

It's was okay but with time and practice I know that you can not only improve but blow everyone away. Your plot line was good but with your permission I would like to critic a few things and lend you a hand to give this piece a little more substance and a realistic view. I am in no way saying that eating disorders are not a part of everyday life for some people but the way it’s handled/viewed by both genders does vary greatly. Again, I liked your plot line and where it was heading but it could use a bit of work and I would be more than happy to help you out on the things that popped out to me.

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ThatNekohacker In reply to Unspoken-Tales [2013-04-28 01:52:11 +0000 UTC]

Hahaha ah yes this piece of work was more of a drabble than my other stories
About the realistic view, I do plan on writing an alternative ending that makes more sense and not so fantasy like
I know it's not my best work, but thank you so much for the critic!
I'll be sure to take your advice in my next piece of work
Again thank you~

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Unspoken-Tales In reply to ThatNekohacker [2013-04-28 02:37:37 +0000 UTC]

No problem. For the notes though, the second line of the story makes no sense (I think it was just a miss typed line), there is an unneeded comma in the title, and instead of an eating disorder he would, due to what males in real life do and his personality, not necessarily cry over his weight but instead he would trap himself in some type of exercise room and do some extreme exercising that could borderline as an unhealthy obsession. His body type would come from, like you said, heroes. Aiming to be more cut, ripped, jacked, and over all just as good looking and strong as they are.

Again great plot, great getting to where you wanted it to go, and I can't wait for your next piece to this work if you decide to go through it. :3

On another non writing note, thank you for the llama and watch. I've sent a llama in return and I will add you to my watch since I would love to see how you progress in writing.

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ThatNekohacker In reply to Unspoken-Tales [2013-04-28 02:44:18 +0000 UTC]

Oh yes the second line was a typo.
I totally agree about Alfred dealing with the eating disorder...I totally goofed that up and made him OOC!

True xD
And no problem the llama and watch were just a token of my appreciation
Thank you for the llama and watch back ^^

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Yukina-Tenma [2013-04-28 01:29:25 +0000 UTC]

Aww it's sooo fwuffy I wanna squeal for a long time~!

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ThatNekohacker In reply to Yukina-Tenma [2013-04-28 01:54:42 +0000 UTC]

XD Really? Fluff is not my best category
But thank you so much for that kind comment Izzy-chan

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Yukina-Tenma In reply to ThatNekohacker [2013-04-28 02:11:26 +0000 UTC]

But it's one of your categories

No problemo Sa-chan~!

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Mitchie98 [2013-04-28 01:08:26 +0000 UTC]

THAT WAS SWEET AS SHIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIT!!
SO KAWAII!!!!!!

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ThatNekohacker In reply to Mitchie98 [2013-04-28 01:25:00 +0000 UTC]

Lol is that a good thing?

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Mitchie98 In reply to ThatNekohacker [2013-04-28 01:25:45 +0000 UTC]

Yes. VEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEERY GOOD.

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ThatNekohacker In reply to Mitchie98 [2013-04-28 01:27:04 +0000 UTC]

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Mitchie98 In reply to ThatNekohacker [2013-04-28 02:08:24 +0000 UTC]

GERMANY'S DANCING!!!

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LordMuffinX3 [2013-04-28 00:22:15 +0000 UTC]

I see France o-o
I JUST GOT A IGGY PLUSH AND A RUSSIA PILLOW FUKYEAHBICH

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ThatNekohacker In reply to LordMuffinX3 [2013-04-28 00:25:08 +0000 UTC]

Yes oh dat France
Hahaha nice.......wait Russia pillow? I'm like so jelly - 3 -

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LordMuffinX3 In reply to ThatNekohacker [2013-04-28 00:28:53 +0000 UTC]

XD Yup oUo
If I had a acutally decent house and a WORKING camera, I would post it ono

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ThatNekohacker In reply to LordMuffinX3 [2013-04-28 01:25:17 +0000 UTC]

D'awwwww

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LordMuffinX3 In reply to ThatNekohacker [2013-04-28 01:52:23 +0000 UTC]

IT EES SOO FREAKIN ADORABLEZ!!
Yaoi overload o-o

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TheEvilFishImp [2013-04-27 20:39:55 +0000 UTC]

O.o
...
O.o
how cute!:3
Still a really serious issue though I like this cuteness as well :3

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ThatNekohacker In reply to TheEvilFishImp [2013-04-28 00:26:32 +0000 UTC]

Hahaha why thank you
I usually don't like to write fluffy stories, but hey I want to imporve in this genre.
And yes I know the issue is rather serious and I'm thinking on writing on an alternative ending which is much more realistic than this fluffy one shot xD

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TheEvilFishImp In reply to ThatNekohacker [2013-04-28 14:44:44 +0000 UTC]

Aa, yeah i read that you wanted to try that.
And I think you are wonderful at writing such things!
-3- I fail at it mostly.
my humor gets in the way, and I tend to make one or the other ruin the moment with a stupid/or rude comment
But you are very welcome Neko sama!

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DaPencilNinja [2013-04-27 19:27:05 +0000 UTC]

England's mumsy 8D
Lol did you get the diamonds in the sky thing from the song xD

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ThatNekohacker In reply to DaPencilNinja [2013-04-27 19:28:42 +0000 UTC]

Hahaha I know right xD
......Maybe....

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DaPencilNinja In reply to ThatNekohacker [2013-04-27 19:31:38 +0000 UTC]

Shine bright like a....DOITSU

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NoraNecko [2013-04-27 19:18:12 +0000 UTC]

It's just so cuuuuuuuute ~~~ *Q*

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CloneAce [2013-04-27 19:04:15 +0000 UTC]

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