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TheAmazingKent — Beyond Her Garden
Published: 2012-06-01 21:56:55 +0000 UTC; Views: 920; Favourites: 20; Downloads: 17
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-Please visit the FimFiction link for a COMPLETELY updated story guys! This version has a lot of errors, the one on FimFiction is flawless. This won;t happen again, i promise!The mane-six leave to go to Canterlot for only a weekend after hearing some bad news. They get held up there and ponyville begins to fall apart. it is up to carrot top to solve the problems that the town is being faced with and heal the land, but when she does, she gets an unexpected response. An epic two book series, all based upon a background character named Carrot top.
I do have permission from Glaze(aka TheWoodenToaster) for the cover art and story.
Cover art: [link]
Song's the two books are based off of: [link] and [link]
Where i get the cute Derpy floating line: [link]
Support my Fimfiction!: [link]
-Please note, this is not about the mane-six. The prologue is written about them because i needed them out of ponyville, but there needed to be a good reason and this also sets me up for a third book in the installment, if I get a good response
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Comments: 17
Thank you! New chapter soon
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You try your best but it's not quite there
You kick a hoof and say it's just not fair
A simple mare living simple dreams
A rumour that's not quite as it seems
Carrot top, go beyond us
You're a late star, time to fool us
Keep your friends close, they're what drive you
To the cosmos that describes you
Brighter than tonights sunset
Can't mistake your silhouette
Not a sound nor voice nearby
Your mane illuminates this gloomy sky
Lol... I loved this song!
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Yup! it is going to get epic too, it includes the story line of Beyond Her Tomb as well, that will be the second book
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I came over here to see what you have because you have been reading my chapters willingly.
First, I was totally confused because the cover was of carrot top, but the chapter was about the mane six. However, I read the comment and everything makes sense now. I really enjoyed listening to Beyond her Garden before reading this, and it's nice to see a story with it.
Great job on the characters. I think you portrayed them very well. The only think that I would comment on is that I think the letter was a little rushed? I mean I felt like it was oh hey spike, don't read this. Twilight your parents are dead. If that makes sense.
Good job!
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I actually couldn't agree more. I did a lot of studying with the letters that Twilight sent Celestia, but twilight never really received any from Celestia, and the times she did, they were almost always invitations, so when it came to writing the letter, i had to choose whether Celestia would explain in detail over the letter, or make it a quick letter so she could explain it to Twilight better. I went with a rushy-like letter because I didn't want people to think about the prologue more than the story, so i went with a short and sweet prologue that explained why they were out of ponyville.
And thank you for that 
Thanks for the feedback! it means a lot!
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I can understand that. It makes sense because they story should be focusing on other things. I do not think it was bad, just rushed. Otherwise it was really good.
Yessssss, Applejack is so hard to write for. I have to second guess every word that comes out of her mouth. Actually, sometimes I write it out normal and then think.... no, dammit, not right... and have to go edit it. But thank you for that! I'm glad people like the way I have her talking because I work so HARD trying to keep her accent.
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Luckily, the next chapters won't be rushed, so that will be an improvement
And thank you! I am improving her accent on the sideline while i write this, that way, if the series gets a good response, the third will be more in-tune with her accent.
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