Master-of-the-Boot [2016-03-30 02:13:11 +0000 UTC]
This was , this one took it to another level. Madcap is rarely a word I use to describe Wg fiction but that's the word I'm going to use in this. I just love the female fatty gang that you've created in this world; which is more believable and grounded in reality than half the stuff you find in actual marvel comics. "Chubbette" just made me laugh. As too did the rule about Wendy's my favorite place for a cheap bite to eat. And actually the fight scenes in this were rather well crafted in the simulation room. This one is great
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TheChronicler41 In reply to Master-of-the-Boot [2016-03-30 02:32:03 +0000 UTC]
I did try to go more relaxed for this one and lace some jokes in, so I'm glad you laughed.And I wholeheartedly agree, Wendy's is top tier.
Master-of-the-Boot In reply to TheChronicler41 [2016-03-30 15:20:59 +0000 UTC]
The humor was great. It never felt forced or out of place and I legitimately laughed out loud.
TheChronicler41 In reply to Master-of-the-Boot [2016-03-30 15:51:11 +0000 UTC]
The thing about humor in writing is that it needs to be subtle and the writer needs to maintain the narrative while doing it.
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