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Talon1223 [2014-11-05 02:47:18 +0000 UTC]
b-b-but...I love Graystripe *cries* WHY DID YOU DO NIGHTFALL WRONG, GRAYSTRIPE!?!?
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WildBlueBurrie [2012-03-15 05:22:00 +0000 UTC]
but graystripe is a nice kitty :c
but god this is my fave chapter!well written.this inspires me so much <:
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pussrik [2012-02-15 15:42:15 +0000 UTC]
may i just say that this is my favourite chapter ^^
i cant stop going back to read this o.o
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DeviceMODIFICaTION [2011-08-12 16:00:24 +0000 UTC]
Eh... Idk. I was really excited to read this because you're one of my favorite artists, but... honestly I can't say that I really like this very much. The writing is good; great even. But I just don't find the character of Nightfall really very interesting at all, and... though I don't mind some bending cannon for fanfics, especially if it's for OC x Cannon charrie fanfics, but this I think goes a little too far. Also, it's GrAystripe, not Greystripe... I know that in some other countries gray can be grey, but in the books it's gray, but eh... I guess that's not a big deal.
Main thing for me is though A. How out of character you make Graystripe, and B... do you know how big of an age difference there is between Tallstar and Nightfall...? i.e If Nightfall is about the same age as Graystripe... well, hrmm, Tallstar is really about as old as Bluestar. Actually maybe a bit older. So this is like, if there was Fire x Blue, THAT'S how much of an age difference there is... o3o Plus, I honestly just find Tall x Night to be incredibly rushed. I know how hard it is to try to not rush a pairing you like into a fic, or any story really, but you should try to make it at least *slightly* developed... ._.
I'm not hating on it, honest. And ehh if you want to flame me back fine. I'm just giving my honest opinion and maybe trying to give some constructive criticism.
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TheNightCats In reply to DeviceMODIFICaTION [2011-08-12 17:52:14 +0000 UTC]
The first series was GrEystripe. It's just the American version and we're British. Have you read Bluestar's Prophecy? *SPOILERS*: Tigerstar's parents, Pinestar and Leopardfoot have a massive age difference (even bigger than this difference). Pinestar is an old cat and Leopardfoot is super-young. Everybody has their opinions, though!
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TheNightCats In reply to DeviceMODIFICaTION [2011-08-12 18:38:31 +0000 UTC]
No, when he went to live as a kittypet, within the same book he died.
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DeviceMODIFICaTION In reply to TheNightCats [2011-08-12 18:42:07 +0000 UTC]
I know this.
We don't know Pinestar's age though. He could have been a younger cat even though he was a leader. No one said he ever died of old age.
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TheDogzLife In reply to DeviceMODIFICaTION [2011-08-12 16:57:31 +0000 UTC]
Ah dw, I think of myself as a crap writer anyways, I just write because I like to and I happened to post this shit on here xD
Oh and in the books I have some have UK versions, so like for me in the first season it says Greystripe and after that it's spelt Graystripe cuz I got the rest from Amazon xD
(Heheh if you don't find the character of Nightfall interesting you're certainly not going to like me then o3o)
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DeviceMODIFICaTION In reply to TheDogzLife [2011-08-12 17:07:48 +0000 UTC]
Ahhh okay then xP
I doubt that just because Nightfall is like you or something, means that I wouldn't like you or something XD
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SkippySpazz [2011-08-09 07:44:19 +0000 UTC]
lol this chapter: she falls asleep on Tallstar
previous chapter: she falls asleep on Greystripe!!
She sure changed XD
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Icepool27 [2011-01-27 09:58:40 +0000 UTC]
Screw Greystripe DX
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TheNightCats [2011-01-23 16:18:44 +0000 UTC]
I hadn't even read the description yet, and I'd already got sick thoughts XD
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xThistlePath [2011-01-22 11:07:09 +0000 UTC]
Awww. ~<3
Well written, and I can tell how she feels. D;
IMMA GO BEAT UP IMAGINARY GREYSTIPE NAO. >D
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TheDogzLife In reply to CatatouillePlus [2011-01-21 22:45:46 +0000 UTC]
I figured if he would attack his own best friend in the original series then threatening to kill the cat who he may or may not have loved would be a doddle XD
Thanks ^^
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