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Here we have Raine Storm, the female protagonist from my book Leave Me Here to Bleed. I have not drawn her in a while, so it took me a lot longer to draw this than similar drawings in the past."She was not tall, but she was well proportioned. Being Eurasian, she had, in her opinion, a rather flattering mix of both her Chinese and European heritage. She had narrow hips and shoulders, a rounded chin, full lips, slanted eyes, long ink-black straight hair, but also a long neck, pale blue eyes, shapely legs, slim waist, and an ample bosom. She could have lived and been happy without the large breasts, breasts that seemed all the larger on her narrow frame, but she had learned to deal with them. "
I want really honest opinions of this. I am looking at proportion and anatomy. This IS stylized, of course, but I wanted a really natural pose and structure. If anything looks terribly wrong, just say it. This is just line art, I can edit little things on my computer to make this as best as I can before colouring. Is her head too big, legs too long, feet too small? (they look kinda small to me...) I can only improve with help.
Yes, that is a guitar behind her, a gun in her right had, and a ball of flames in the left. The flames are just temporarily sketched in there. When colouring them there will be no lines.
I kinda like this piece. It is not the best thing to ever grace DA, but for me, this is turned out fairly well. Her outfit was fun to draw, and I surprised myself with not messing up her face too badly. My pens like to go BLAH! Around eyes and nose and mouth and things end up crappy and lopsided. Yes, I blame my pens, not myself. It is always the pens damn it.
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This is an excellent piece, but I would add a border to the netted part of her top
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yes, i see what you are saying, but the look of what i was going for was that her netted top was torn/had unfinished edges. i guess i didn't make that clear enough. *head-desk*
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Oh... I see why you did that now! The pic is very amazing
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Wow, Haven't seen this character in a while! She looks really good.
I love the outfit and hair. I'm sure when colored it will have a lot of flair.
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i can hope for that at least. >_>;
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hey ther...
according to the description, its nicely made -but I can pin point a few things -
like her neck...it seems not too long. I hae a long neck and I know how long it seems in photographs. so u may think about extending her neck a bit. secondly her left hand's fingers -two of them are toopointed -just soften them a bit. Other wise its perfect -waiting for it's coloured one.
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really? her neck? that didn't bother me, looking at it, but i will take a look to see what you mean. her head IS supposed to be tilted down though, so maybe i'm just not seeing it the same as you.
and yeah, fingers. bah. this picture is only 6 inchs tall on paper, so the smaller details kinda got muddled up.
coloured might be a while, i have to draw Christian first, and that is going badly. >_<;;
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hhhmmm....
don't worry about christian. I'm sure he'll turn out nicely.
And I'll wait for the coloured as long as it takes
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Well the only thing I could pick out, was already mentioned, which was the hips.
But other then that, you did really well on this. It's very detailed, I love that in drawings/art. Raine is so pretty, one of my favorite characters in your book. :3
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fuck fat-hips. Raine isn't fat, or "curvey" in my story. she is narrow, so that is how i draw her.
one of your fav? who is your favorite? i must know. XD
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Aw, but have some curves isn't that bad! xDD jkjk
My favorite would have to be either Marianus/Marry or Kevin. :}
BUT if I had to pick out of those two it'd be Kevin.
Oh, even though you are the author of the book, do you have a favorite character? xD
Oh, and I have another question if you don't mind, but would you care if I colored some of your lineart, because I have lots of free time and nothing to do. ._.;
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i feel it IS bad. that is just me, however. i find NOTHING attractive about having fatty deposits. Raine is slender, and narrow, and just happened to get her mum's boobs, otherwise she would just be little all the way 'round.
yippie! Kevin. I <3 Marry myself. he is a crazy bitch...wait until you meet his son...somehow he manages to be crazier than his dad. >_>;
I happen to like Kevin myself, but Christian is very close to my heart, and Raine is basically me except hot. XD (Mary-sue much? lol)
COLOUR IT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
I can't colour for shit, so if you did i would love you forever and a day until next week.
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Oh yes I know! And I respect your views! :3
Cause I agree, girl don't need to have curves to be attractive. Well that's what I think. :]
Gawd, I love the fact that Marry is crazy, and, I have ALOT to catch up on. I read the first ch. to LMHTD, because I already finished LMHTB, and I just need to read the other chapters now. ._.;
xDD
Oh jeebus christmas! xD Thanks!!
Coloring your line arts will help me practice more on coloring, so thank you!
;DDD
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i have a fat ass and wide hips. they are not attractive. yuck.
anyways. >_>;
i am working on writing a new beginning to LMHtB, where Christian was ALREADY a student at Raine school and such. taking a new twist in the story and working out writing flaws of mine where i tend to tell too much and reveal WAY too much. >_<
Marry is still crazy as fuck.
the rating for my book is going down though, for "teen readers" you see, so say bu-bye to the sex scenes and a lot of the cursing.
have fun colouring, and if you ever have a question on what colour to use, just ask. this one i plan to colour soon, and Raine's boots are red, as is her shirt, and her guitar is purple.
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Oh really? A new beginning? Did this just one day pop into your head to change it? xD
Or have you put alot of thought into changing it? oo;
Annnnd I don't think revealing too much is a bad thing! 'Cause I love knowing what's going on, it's hard fer me to keep up with long stories and such! xD
Ne ways! I'd figure the sex scenes and cursing would make your ratings go up, 'cause of how sex obsessed teens are these days. -_-;
Alright! I'm going to color her right now! xD
before I have to sleep. >_e;
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No, see, what happened was that this was my first story EVER, so I kinda learned all I have by just sitting and writing, you know? And I developed and got to know my characters through that same process.
It was good for my writing, bad for my story, because a lot of scenes are now superfluous and overly drawn out. My beginning was just my directionless introduction into my vast world I had in my head. Now that I know my characters, and now that I know the plot I have to work with, I can go back and give it a proper beginning, one I like better.
The editing is SLOW, however, because some scenes I just donβt want to part with, so the story doesnβt seem to be changing as much as I would like it to, but it is kinda like peeling an onion, I have to do it one layer at a time. I started making some changes, and I will go back, wave after wave, layer after layer, changing a bit more each time.
My problem with βrevealing too muchβ is really two different degrees. The first is me telling too much about Christian too quickly. He has no air of mystery about him, nothing to long for. He is a vampire, he is supposed to be illusive and vague, but I kinda lay him all out there in the early chapters, so I am cutting a lot of that out (like revealing he is half-fey in chapter 03) I wait to reveal said things and it leaves the readers wondering, wanting more.
The other part is me just taking paragraphs and time to go into detail about things, explaining it to the readers, when I shouldnβt. Things should either be revealed and explained through the story, or in dialog, not just thrown out there for the benefit of the reader, you know what Iβm saying?
Long-story-short, yes, I have put a LOT of thought into this.
No, I mean, not ratings as in β
Iβm actually, kinda, considering being published. Thatβs why I have done all these changes and whatβs up with the rewrite.
but yes, teens are sex-obsessed. my average reader's age is actually 14. *le sigh*
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Oh, alright! I understand what you're saying.
So do you think you'll stick with the idea of Christian being a student at Raine's school? Because I think that would be a killer beginning! It would certainly be interesting. :}
And do you not have people helping you edit? Or is it more of something that you'll have to do yourself? Because of the changes and everything.
I see what you're saying.
'Cause now that I think about it, there wasn't much mystery, I say that not to be mean. o_o; So please don't take it like that, because I really, really like your book. Like..everyday after school it was what I looked forward to when getting home! XD
Oh okay! I get it now, duh to me. e_e;
Well what I would do, is publish 2 books! xD
One censored and the other not! xDD
Okay, maybe not..that'd be alot of money and work. -_-;
And..and if you get it published, I'd be the first to buy it, and would want it autographed by you. That would just..be sooo cool. *__*
OH! Annnd another question, sorry. BUT do you know what all is going to happen in LMHtD? Like, any of it?
:}
ANNND omgosh, I finished coloring the line art of Raine. xD
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"popularity"...not sure why that got messed up and a smily appeared there. fucking website.
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Actually, it's all pretty good!
Great job!
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Wow, love the pants ! Your getting really good !
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*blushes* thanks. I haven't been drawing much lately.
drawing clothing is fun.
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her face looks dead on!!! however if yer looking for advice on an anatomical level her hips look way too narrow, like shes built like a boy. in boys their shoulders are wider then their hips but for girls their hips are the same width or wider then their shoulders. I dunno if this will help you but it helps me, to draw average boys i think of an upside down triangle for their torso and for average girls I think of an hour glass. little tid bit tips i pick up.
her feet look fine to me but I agree the legs look a tad too long. her hands look perfect tho and so does her hair and outfit.
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thank you! i always screw up faces, so it's good to know i got that right-ish on this piece.
and, well 1) i have to combat my HATRED for big-fat-hips on women. i draw women with narrow hips and skinny thighs, it's just what i do, it's what i like...but also, i added a description of Raine from my story above, and "narrow hips" is one of them. And 2) I know women are "supposed" to be all fat and crap, and men are narrow with wider shoulders, but i just choose to style mine different. fuck girls and the "hour-glass" thing. comics make women so disproportioned (hour-glass to the XXXXXtream) that i may be compensating, i'm not sure. she still has big boobs...yippie...
i already shortened the legs, believe that? i draw long legs, so i had to crop them down CONSIDERABLY once scanned so that it better represented Raine as a character with her legs that are not "short" but not long either. if i make them shorter i don't think i will like how the picture looks. not sure.
yay for hands! and drawing clothing is what makes my world go 'round.
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well just because their wider doesnt make them fatter, wideness is based on how wide hipbones are. and yes I totally agree comics make women disproportioned, if they stood like this did in the comics they wouldn't have a working spine. but I just got a whole shit load of art books and tutorials from comic con and narrow hips o women just make them look like boys with breasts jutting out of their ribcage. but I do remember you telling me raine was part chinese and Asian women do have shorter limbs and rounder features unlike their white counter parts ( that advice I got from this girl whose a professional manga artist [link] )
and really? I do that too sometimes, but as a cartoony cartoonist I can get away with that ( not often tho XD I get busted all the time for anatomy errors)
but over all? looks good, just nit picking becuase thats what aids improvment ^^
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wide hip-bones are not sexy either. i know from personal experiance.
stupid comics *shakes fist at them*
I commented on that girl's piece, i liked it.
well, your drawings are more stylized than mine, like, you can draw someone's legs WAY long and it won't come into question as readily as me because yours just looks like you meant it, i just look like i don't know what i'm doing. >_<
thanks for the nit picking. 
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a matter of opinion I suppose, men who wanna be daddys find wind hip bones very sexy ( the stuff you find cursing the forums) but yea,that girl is amazing! she had a booth at comic con- but I was so busy there I didn't get a chance to go and see her :sad: and yea, we work in different styles, but oh man trust me I've gotten the " why is this and this off?" because an image should look good if it's flipped (reverse) horizontally and mine--never do so that means something somewhere is off....and I dunno why. hopefully my new thirst for knowledge will help me with that.
however yea, you will get busted for it more often then I do, but since I know you wanna be stylized yet at the same time anatomically correct may i suggest this tutorial? [link] a cartoonist can not create a style until they are fully aware of how their drawing ACTUALLY looks this helped me TONS and I hope you'll find it as useful as I did.
don't be scared of the critics either XD when I ask for critiques I get ripped a new one- but it's all for the purpose of growth so ya just gotta take it all in.
but I think this would make a fantastic web banner! why not poke yer buddy who colored this [link] I'm sure you guys could work out a trade or something spiffy.
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This is really good, I like the hair and the pose.
However, the feet do look a bit too straight...It seems like it might be uncomfortable to be standing like that.
Maybe you could turn one a little...?
I don't know, I'm really bad at critiques =\
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well, actually, the feet are supposed to be turned in MORE, see, she just spun around, and so her feet ended up pointing together. (i posed in front of my mirror a lot for this piece)
I'll just admit to drawing the feet very poorly and leave it at that.
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Ohh I see. It makes more sense now.
No they aren't. The feet were drawn pretty good, it's just the angle. But if she just spun around, then the angle is fine. 
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aww...thank you.
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Yeah, once you get all the coloring done it's gonna look even better
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i can only hope so. >_>;
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Well, as far as critique goes, the guitar seems a little lacking in effort and detail in comparison with the rest of the piece. Also, the spikes around the collar could use some work. Other than that good job on this piece!
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And by that I mean the angles, and some of the lines on it could use some work to make it look a little more up to par with the rest of the picture (the guitar, that is). And the spikes on the collar just aren't uniform.
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yeah, the guitar DOES look plain, but i didn't know what else to do to it, you know? it is the backside of it, so there are no knobs, strings, face-plate...i mean, nothing. :/ that and since there is no shading in the picture, i couldn't do much to it since all that will take place when it is coloured and there would be no need for any additional lines, they would only have to be erased.
and i agree with you on the spikes, they look like a mess when views so large, but drawing it on paper, this picture is actually quite small (she is about 6 inches tall or less) so the fact that my pen managed to make the spikes look THAT good surprised me. when this pic coloured i can clean and fix the spikes up more.
thank you for the critique though. it was useful.
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her guitar, in the book, is just purple. she does not have the money for anything fancy. the fact that it is purple is enough for her. XD
the angles were a bitch, honestly. i suck with perspective to start with, but they throw in something that is supposed to be straight and stiff and i'm just screwed. >_<
I get the strap thing though, and i'm not sure if i can fix that on my computer or not, but i can try.
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That's fine, this is all for future reference. It's a learning experience, all of life is. Hehe, an exercise I can suggest for you with angles is taking a single, simple characters, sketching them out in a head on view, and then doing the same thing from below, beside, above, and askew from any angle. Then add in more angles over time. Do one a day, and then do it with another character once you have done 10 angles. It will help alot. 
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*twitches* i can't even draw from the basic angles, i wouldn't know where to BEGIN from the others. i have "How to Draw Manga" books and i STILL can't manage expression or posture, or angles. >_<
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hehe, well, first just start out with the front and side views, then the back and over head and below views. if you do each side that's seven angles right there and then if you do one looking from a 45 degree angle from the front, and one again at 45 degrees from the back, that's nine, now all you need is one more ^^
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Yep. As far as the guitar goes, my thoughts would be perhaps if it was a custom it might have some sort of design, or a stripe on it. It's angles are just a little off with the strap, but otherwise it's a good job for a picture that small. God work on it!
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thank you. i'm glad it is mostly hidden by her body because i SUCK at drawing guitars. X(
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lol you're better at drawing them than me X]
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Purdy
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thank you very much. the guitar seems rather plain because, well, it is the backside of it.
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