Comments: 16
SlimeC0RE [2018-12-24 04:12:46 +0000 UTC]
"Maybe it was something you ate."
...
Seriously !?
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Twatbuoy6000 [2017-06-10 19:52:58 +0000 UTC]
just wandering
what does she looks like?
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thgiEytnewT In reply to Twatbuoy6000 [2017-06-11 04:14:34 +0000 UTC]
It's not especially important to me, so whatever makes the reader enjoy the story is fine.
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RuudschMaHinda [2017-03-15 02:26:15 +0000 UTC]
me likey...
also the fact that scientists got to research her abilities
wouldn't mind to read more about what they are doing with her abilities
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thgiEytnewT In reply to RuudschMaHinda [2017-03-15 03:35:52 +0000 UTC]
If you want to find out more, check out Part 2.
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RuudschMaHinda In reply to thgiEytnewT [2017-03-15 04:52:12 +0000 UTC]
Oh, thank you very much for the reminder! Stupid me ^_^
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James-MacCloude [2013-10-07 20:59:38 +0000 UTC]
good story you should write a sequel maybe he could start to develop powers too different ones like building magic items that really work with no harm quickly or maybe instantaneously
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andrewbaay [2013-07-09 13:58:22 +0000 UTC]
well firstly, how can she ( the housemate ) can transmit information wirelessly? only way is by electromagnetic waves. i think there are 3 possibilities:
radio waves, light rays and microwave. Radio is more probable because surfaces reflect light... microwave, idk if microwave is a good info transmitter. but Radio waves.... more probably.... but the radio stations may Jam the communications between the body parts.... and also, these " powers " are defying the laws of physics... the body may be suffocated by the detachment of the head..... and also the parts will lose connection with the heart and she will die... also the creation of duplicates. she defies the laws of physics. how can she create a duplicate out of nowhere? looks like an optical illusion But that`s wrong. because when they (the man and the housemate) got to the bedroom, she actually undress him and it proves that the duplicates were not optical illusions. but when the duplicates merge, in any angle, the thing looked like a sprite... and btw, the ability to teleport and to pass walls is absurd ANYWAY that`s fiction...
The story is good but is over fast paced... and it does not explain why the boy and the girl loved each other so quickly despite the fact that at first they were ignorant of each other.
but still a good story....
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HardcoreDragon1 [2013-01-07 00:37:03 +0000 UTC]
This was a pretty damn good story!
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winstonMP [2012-09-20 14:06:38 +0000 UTC]
A little bit stiff and unsatisfying. It isn't really explained why they like each other, and there isn't much in the way of characters.
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thgiEytnewT In reply to Caller-of-Storms [2012-09-18 23:01:02 +0000 UTC]
Thanks! I've been doing a lot of really heightened stuff lately, and I wanted something more ordinary-seeming.
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boystick [2012-09-18 14:27:16 +0000 UTC]
Awesome story. Keep it up!
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