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ThomasInTheClouds — The Acrobat
Published: 2013-08-10 21:38:51 +0000 UTC; Views: 237; Favourites: 5; Downloads: 0
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Description She climbs and falls, quiet as the night.
Nimble, light as a serpent sigh.
We cry at such a sight.

          Purple spider painted in silver stockings wrapped tight
          In ruby ribbon splashed across her thigh,
          She climbs and falls, quiet as the
night.

Honeycombed in sequins and spotlight,
Trapped in her silk visage as a feeble fly,
We cry at such a sight.

          Lace dancing behind her like tail of a kite
          In the mock fiber optic sky.
          She climbs and falls, quiet as the
night.

No thread entwined hand to catch her headfirst flight.
Just below her waltz, death waits nigh.
We cry at such a sight.

          Sweaty hands slip, and our lips we bite.
          Her embrace is quick, instant as the dew in my eye.
                       She climbs and falls, quiet as the night,
                       And we cry at such a sight.
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Comments: 7

MermaidInDisguise [2013-08-14 21:04:48 +0000 UTC]

THE IMAGERY.


This is probably the most beautiful villanelle I've ever read. Thank you for sharing this!

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ThomasInTheClouds In reply to MermaidInDisguise [2013-08-15 04:42:53 +0000 UTC]

You're too kind! Imagery is what makes a poem for me. I'm glad you enjoyed it

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DragonsChest [2013-08-11 23:07:42 +0000 UTC]

Fantastic to read...

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ThomasInTheClouds In reply to DragonsChest [2013-08-12 18:50:57 +0000 UTC]

Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it.

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DragonsChest In reply to ThomasInTheClouds [2013-08-18 05:07:09 +0000 UTC]

  

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Parsat [2013-08-11 00:40:07 +0000 UTC]

Harrowing to read...I think you do a good job of conveying the tension of the scene.

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ThomasInTheClouds In reply to Parsat [2013-08-11 01:01:24 +0000 UTC]

Thank you I tried to keep everything… fluid, I guess. It's hard for me to build locomotion, keep things kinetic for a villanelle. The two refrains repeated so often can make it static easily. This is the first one I've written that I truly feel builds and keeps a good pace.

Thanks for your feedback. I'm glad you enjoyed it

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