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Published: 2009-09-17 01:58:50 +0000 UTC; Views: 1473; Favourites: 74; Downloads: 9
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A leaf in the streamTwists coyly, drinking in sights,
Or waving good-bye.
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Little olive frog
Huddles scared in my garage;
The world is too big.
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A touch of Heaven:
A raindrop, gentle and small,
Makes me smaller still.
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Children at play
Break vases and your practiced
Gruff exterior.
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I envy spiders;
Eight legs and naught to do.
I'm juggling torches.
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Winter drains the oak,
And even its stubborn leaves
Tumble to the earth.
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Comments: 45
Aw, thank you! I like your user icon!
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Wonderful work! Β Congratulations on your much deserved DD!
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Thank you so much! I'm humbled. You have an amazing gallery.
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Beautifully written, and written with purpose. Your thoughts perfectly reflected through your words. Thank you.
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Thank you for reading! I enjoyed your Guitar Lesson comic - I'm definitely in the Sans + Toriel camp.
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OOOHHHH YA! *team soriel fist bump. lol and thank you tooΒ
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Thank you! I'm looking forward to your next one.
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Such wonderful haiku. I love the precise emotional focus--it lends so much color to each moment. The essence of nature entwined with sentiment. Well done 
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Thank you! I'm happy you enjoyed them. In truth, I would approach a few of these differently today, so I'm resisting the urge to alter them (but I feel that way about most of my older poetry).
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Ah, I know what you mean. Nearly every time I peruse through my older poetry I want to rework all of it, haha.
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I've heard (and can understand)Β the arguments on both sides of that fence. I do like that I can peruse my old works and see evidence of my progression as a writer. And there is something to be said for the impulses of the moment. Ultimately, though, I want my poems to be the best expression I can provide, so I have gone back and reworked a few.
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Grats on the DD!
Love the nature theme in this. So much appreciation on the subtlety and nuances of Mother earth. I found it really calming to read
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Wow, thank you! I'm so glad you enjoyed it.
P.S. I love your Undertale art.
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Of course, no problem
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Thank you. It means a lot. And happy birthday!
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That's so humbling to hear. Thank you.
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Thank you! And welcome to dA!
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Two, three, and five are my favourites, I think.
Your haiku are absolutely stunning. You've really captured imagery in its simplest form and still made it enough to call exquisite. Well done.
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Everyone loves the spider haiku! The frog is my favorite of these.
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I do think that out of those three, the frog one was the best. It had a nice...innocence to it.
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Have I ever mentioned that I adore your haiku? I can't even pick a favorite here.
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I believe you have mentioned it. ^^
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I remember the frog and spider haikus. I still like them.
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I took out the "Me?" at the end of the second line in the spider haiku. Too many breaks and I no longer care about the syllables. Plus, it's implied.
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The hen house seems a bit out of place, but I adore the others, especially the first two and the final. <3
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I was unsure about that one. I may remove it.
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A touch of Heaven....
What a wonderful collection
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I like the second one- frog haiku- a lot. And I really love the eighth one (did you realize it was the eighth in the list?) about the spider. I've seen that one before!
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I moved some of these (including spider) from my 100 themes list. The frog is one of my favorites! We get frogs and crickets in here all the time and I have to try to escort them safely out.
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