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Published: 2008-04-12 01:17:45 +0000 UTC; Views: 8046; Favourites: 143; Downloads: 81
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Personally, I hate this page. I think it's awkward and badly drawn. And not to mention, REALLY cliche!! (Though, the conveniently placed TVs in a store window is undoubtedly the quickest and easiest way to get information about what's going on to your readers!) xDToo bad this page is all too necessary to the plot! >.<
Though, I did enjoy drawing Nina with her face pressed up against the glass!
Oh, and one more thing...
Have I told you people how much I love you!? I don't think any of you have any idea how happy you all made me yesterday with all your praise and support! I was so happy, I wanted to cry!
THANK YOU!
You all get hugs!
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Yes, I plan to eventually. I'm just in a bit of a block now, unfortunately XD
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i like this manga its good you should publish it
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It's a very good manga! You should be proud of yourself!
And if you're worried about the paneling, I can help you. I'm not an expert, but I had a class one term on this stuff.
I think the reason that you're calling this page awkward is because the panel on the right (with the building) is slanted diagonally. It's such a large panel compared to the rest, and it makes you and your audience feel more uncomfortable because it feels like it's squishing the other panels. You need to imagine panels sort of like stacking boxes... Panels usually need to be smaller than ones on the bottom (or you have more panels on the bottom to balance it out), for a more even and comfortable page. There are, of course, exceptions to this rule, like with any rule. Maybe you want your audience to feel edgy and awkward, for example, you'd have a huge frame the top with a looming monster of some sort, and then a small panel underneath it with a terrified face, giving a very uncomfortable feel to the page, and increasing suspense. It's mostly up to the artist, and what the artist feels is right. But I think that was what you didn't like about this page, and what you thought was 'awkward'. I'm not meaning to be picky at all, just trying to help! And I hope I have!
Everything else is wonderful, and it's not badly drawn. You're doing a fantastic job.
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this feels one piece inspired... am i right.... im just guessing cuz of the "worlds greatest treasure" being hidden somewhere....
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what? it's not crapy and i think it's funny ^^ sutch a random and cute thing to see
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Nothing wrong with this page, if you ask me! I like the way it narrows the perspective from the city to Nina (and great job with her face on the glass!).
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Nina's face looks cute with her face squished agenst the window almost like a chibi.
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wow this is a totally awesome story!
I WANT MORE! I WANT MORE!
GIVE ME MORE! GIVE ME MORE!
i love the bottom left 2 frames, especially the lower one! it looks so amazing!
keep it up!!!
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I think it looks great. The only thing I can say is that usually your cheeks wouldn't be squished against a window if your face is forward like that. Unless you're cheeks were HUGE, and her's certainly don't seem to be. But other than that, its great. I'm very interested.
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I love Nina's face too it's cute. Thanks for continuing(can't spell today...not enough sleep) the story it's awsome.
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Tis awesome - I don't know how you can think it's badly drawn! As usual it's amazing 
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yay, is this going to be like a modern One Piece? <3
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Hehe, Nina looks like a funny folk
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OMG this is fantastic, five pages and im already hooked
do more
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*sighs* It is cliche. It also reminds me of ONE PIECE!
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lol...reminded me of one piece too
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Not at all. It's much better than just randomly telling what's going on. Give yourself some credit. This is already a good story you're making.
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Stillin loving it. Keep it coming, can't wait to see more.
And love how did Nina pressing up against the glass.
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I like it! Be confident and proud of urself! You deserve it
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Heh, the last panel is awesome. Nina, you're gonna get fingerprints on the glass xD
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Don't worry too much, the only thing I think is a bit awkward is the pose of the main character in the third panel.
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Do you mean Arkin's pose or Nina's pose?
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I love this
(if someone says this sucks, THEY suck 
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Hehehe! That makes me so happy!!
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cliche it may be, but still nicely drawn. i love the panel with nina's face pressed into the glass, reminds me of myself when i try to annoy my friends XD
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Haha! Thank you! xD
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x3 nina's face looks great on the glass! i just wish my psp would let me read it!
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