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SabasReflection [2013-01-11 18:58:35 +0000 UTC]
Well I know how this feels. I like how you link raindrops and tears here, and linking the themes of water and love is also quite effective. You certainly write lyrics in a way that's enviable!
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TrueishColours In reply to SabasReflection [2013-01-11 21:07:31 +0000 UTC]
Woah, you have added ALL my stuff! Thank you!
Have I made it clear that it's a sad poem about getting over stuff, not just a sad poem? And I'm glad that you like the link; the metaphor was pleasing when it occurred to me. ^_^
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TrueishColours In reply to SabasReflection [2013-01-11 22:39:51 +0000 UTC]
Nooo, it's meant to be about how SAD it is that we are CAPABLE of getting over sadness! Was that clear?
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TrueishColours In reply to SabasReflection [2013-01-11 23:31:43 +0000 UTC]
Well, interpretations are always good. On the other hand, I was feeling so strongly about how sad it is that the things we care about are transient that I'm a bit sorry it didn't come through more powerfully. Do you think I could re-work the poem a bit?
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SabasReflection In reply to TrueishColours [2013-01-11 23:43:37 +0000 UTC]
You can rework the poem if you see an opportunity to improve it, but I think the poem is quite impressive as it is. I know you want your message to be more prominent in the poem, but the best poetry is that which is vague. With vague poetry you can appeal to a wider audience as more interpretations will be available for them to find. It's your call.
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TrueishColours In reply to SabasReflection [2013-01-12 11:09:13 +0000 UTC]
Hm, I'm not sure how I would rework it now anyway. And you're right, it's good to let the audience figure out some things for themselves instead of dictating exactly what you mean. Thanks very much for your advice, anyway!
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