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steakya [2017-06-21 03:37:55 +0000 UTC]
To be honest- she's a Mary Sue. Having a Mary Sue isn't bad at all- it's mediocre. But having a Mary Sue means the character is perfect, and you know the saying "no one's perfect". That applies to fictional worlds too- keep her in only 1 universe, give her flaws- and (please) don't pair her up with everyone- or a character. Plus- make her not so overpowered- maybe stick to one universe- where she's- I don't know, a bartender- who's human, doesn't have much friends; but is remarkably kind. She is single- and is an intermediate beginner in magic.Β
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WynterLynn [2015-03-23 05:16:44 +0000 UTC]
I agree with Zimel, this character is a Mary Sue definitely.
However unlike him I'll help you fix your character. There's not allot wrong, but I believe she should not be a goddess or created life. And remove literally everyone from loving her. Just give her one love interest. (One lover/boyfriend) She should also exist in one universe cause it makes it very confusing. (She should be solely from either FNAF, Harry Potter, or Vocaloid, MLP. But if MLP don't make her an Alicorn, it's really overpowering) She should just be an ordinary girl with some powers(depending on verse, such as FNAF, it wouldn't work), but not any so powerful. She should be a beginner and like mayhaps have difficulty controlling them(not in a 'i'm going to kill anyone nuu' way, but just small pouts of magic) Also she should have some flaws in her or her personality. (Example; She's kind and polite, but is unforgiving and has a tad of temper)Β
Also saying 'Nya' would best be used in Vocaloid, but in FNAF or MLP, the word 'Nya' doesn't fit at all and would be out of place. Β
MLP!Wise, she could not control the elements because only the Mane Six could, and also they were given back to the Tree of Harmony so she couldn't access them anyway.
Hope this helps! It will make her a whole lot likable to many people!
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Zimel [2015-03-19 08:19:06 +0000 UTC]
Is this a parody of a Mary Sue?.. xDΒ
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Tsundere-Echo-Nya In reply to Zimel [2015-03-20 02:58:09 +0000 UTC]
No, ur so rude!!1! ;(( ur so insenstive ur such a hater!!1!
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Tsundere-Echo-Nya [2015-03-04 01:39:21 +0000 UTC]
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