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ummdhibun — AC OC: Dhi'bah Al Hindi [Read description...?]
Published: 2012-02-26 19:14:01 +0000 UTC; Views: 1123; Favourites: 20; Downloads: 45
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Okay, so this is my Original Character. I may want to create a fan fiction on her, so read her profile and tell me what you guys think [especially the AC Experts out there]...UPDATE:
The first chapter of the fan-fic is up so plz go and read it [i'm not asking you to, i'm telling you to]: [link]
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**PROFILE**
NAME AT BIRTH:
Durbhagya or 'Misfortune'
PLACE OF BIRTH:
Mumbai, India
STORY OF HER INFANCY:
Father was a merchant, died whilst travelling - presumably due to bandits - when she was 4 years of age. On hearing this, Dhi'bah's mother was cremated alongside her husband [as was the Hindu custom at the time]. Was then taken in by her aunt, who sold her to a slave driver.
HOW DID SHE GET TO ARABIA?
Sold as a slave in Infancy. Had three masters:
-The first a Bedoiun - worked as a shepherd
-The second, a hunter with a son who needed to develop his sword fighting and riding skills - worked as a worthy opponent and horse racer.
-The third, a crusader with nothing better to do - worked as an 'attendant' [concubine]
Was finally bought out of slavery at the age of 15 by THE Master LaAhad and refused to leave his side until her debt was repaid to him - she became an assassin.
GIVEN NAME:
Khawlah Dhi'bah Al-Hindi or Khawlah 'The Indian She-Wolf'
AGE: 20
SKILLS:
-Huntress
-Good at reading the 'marks of passing' [Tracking]
-Cannot be contained for very long
-Errand Riding
-Archery
SPOUSE:
Presumably Master LaAhad, but no written record.
CHILDREN:
Master LaAhad's only son, but also no written record of this
WHAT MAKES HER STAND OUT?
She has a scar on her face and has been branded twice on her back by the slave drivers she was sold to. Both her ring fingers are missing.
ORIGIN OF SCAR:
???
OCCUPATON AFTER FREEDOM:
Wanted to be a mercenary, but was convinced into becoming an Assassin and Errand Rider.
TOOLS OF TRADE [WEAPONS]:
-4 daggers - two at the wrists and two at in her boots
-One long sword
-Two hidden blades
-[If it can be mentioned] A very innocent look
WEAKNESSES:
-Hesitation [No good at theiving]
-Children
-Great pity for prisoners
-Subservience to her superiors
-Stubborness
WHO DOES SHE HABE ATTACHMENTS TO?
-Master LaAhad and his son
-Her sparring partner, the Master Swordsman - who she has taken as her brother.
-The Master Theif, who accompanies her [everywhere]
CAUSE FOR DEATH:
???
MOTTO:
"Fear is not an option, it is an obligation. Courage is not the absence of fear, it is the conquering of it."
OTHER:
... [What else do you bunch of stalkers want to know?? Leave comments below
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Comments: 29
I loved her story :laa:
I will pass by the fanfic later to leave a comment (=
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okay, thank you. the first chapters up [in case you want to know]
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Critique by an art historian/historian...and failed artist
The structure is solid. The placement of the minor figure to the right needs to be a bit more in parallel with the minor figure on the left to draw the eyes in a bow across the work.
The anatomy is in lines with the genre and is very expressive.
The bodies display movement and are harmonious with the expressions.
The background is stark. This can go two ways. On one hand it emphasized the characters. On the other hand, it brings a feeling of disunity because the characters have such fine detail and seem stuck in space. This is an artist choice and the disunity can work for the piece.
The use of color is nice, but a brighter red would draw the eye as well as convey the emtions of love and death to the piece. The dull red says the emotions of the piece are subdued. This may be the artist's design and as such it can work for the piece.
Over all impression: a solid piece in the tradition of anime and manga. Artist choices can lead to some confusion, but the confusion causes reflection on the piece.
The artist has TALENT!
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Thankies... but i didn't understand the part about the color confusion thing
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You chose a dull red, which can confuse the viewer as to the meaning. Briught red usually invokes blood, death, or danger. The dull red might invoke these sentiments, but it might also warn against them. But remember, confusion is sometimes what a piece is all about. It gives the work an other worldliness.
Does that help? Frankly I like the duller color because it gives more mystery.
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LOL, i used red because i knew that if i fully colored it i would mess it up
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Well, don't admti it! Your choice, even if unconscious, adds to the mystique of the piece!
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Hehe, now i'm doing master pieces by accident LOL
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Or is it subconscious? The world of art can be a little nutty about color and form. I say if they like it keep quiet!
Talent wins out, my friend.
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very nice, should make for an interesting story.
Personaly i don't think she should have two hidden blades. The only time I believe an Assassin had two was with Ezio because of the modification of not losing his fingers. If Altair running the order then I guess you could say he allowed her to do it. He was always someone for change and i think if someone asked to have two and gave him a good reason for it, then he could have allowed it.
Idk, that alone could make for a good chapter.
I hope you do end up starting the story.
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it depends on how many people are in for reading it, but anyhow [trying to regain my train of thought... ah, there it is] this is actually before Altair comes into the picture. The person running the Order is Father or perhaps his Grandfather... [Spoiler] Dhi'bah dies, and because she has no recorded family to receive inheritance, most likely all her belongings are buried with her
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I see, that works out well then lol. good luck writing the story. If you do, i'll be sure to read it
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thank you very much, sir... or ma'm...
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Do you want a formal commentary? I'd be happy to give it, but not unless you want it.
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Do you want me to post it under the picture or email it to you privately?
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post it under the picture, that way people won't start worshipping me LOL
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Alright, I will do it right now!
We don't want worhsip to begin!
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great story and character!!!!!! I loved the motto!!
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Thanks, any suggestions?? i don't actually know how to start the story LOL i just have an idea
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it s very good just the way it is! I think the description of the family is great, so there is no need to get into more details. Now you can describe some of her assignments as an assassin, it would be cool!
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