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Published: 2008-09-26 02:28:30 +0000 UTC; Views: 225; Favourites: 0; Downloads: 0
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Description I've always thought
    that a
         (sometimes) something
frozen in movement
rushed and lost
looking down into
      winterbrook
my world
     is ununderstood
something
     red () green
engines in cold gears
the people in driving boredom locked
lies half-escaped from
     bluing lips
bullets half-ejaculated from
    orgasming guns


and none of it needs
     to finish.




(which is the most
        beautiful
           part of
              it
                  all.)
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Comments: 15

intimachine [2008-10-18 07:59:35 +0000 UTC]

you have a way of expressing images and recognizing beauty in the smaller details in your writing, which i very much admire! well done.

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Unaccompanied-me In reply to intimachine [2008-10-18 21:32:29 +0000 UTC]

Thank you; I appreciate that!

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xSheDreamsInDigitalx [2008-09-27 16:48:31 +0000 UTC]

i'm in love with this idea and the words you put to it. i've been thinking a lot lately about the beauty that can lie in incompletion, so this was timely to me. <3

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Unaccompanied-me In reply to xSheDreamsInDigitalx [2008-09-27 19:19:43 +0000 UTC]

Good timing then! I've found I like things a lot better too when they apply to me.

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b1gfan [2008-09-26 03:06:01 +0000 UTC]

I love the blend of the static and dynamic images - the tension of what's not quite moving on as we might expect it.

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Unaccompanied-me In reply to b1gfan [2008-09-26 03:47:44 +0000 UTC]

Yeah! That was one of the ideas I was trying to plant! Thanks for noticing!

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GwenavhyeurAnastasia [2008-09-26 02:47:16 +0000 UTC]

I think the meaning of this one was far quicker to hit my brain.

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Unaccompanied-me In reply to GwenavhyeurAnastasia [2008-09-26 02:49:41 +0000 UTC]

Yeah this one was a little simpler. Which is okay.

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GwenavhyeurAnastasia In reply to Unaccompanied-me [2008-09-26 02:55:36 +0000 UTC]

Heh. I'm aware of my inability to comprehend more complex things at the moment. I'm determined to understand them eventually, though. So I'll just get back to you.

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Unaccompanied-me In reply to GwenavhyeurAnastasia [2008-09-26 02:59:36 +0000 UTC]

I'm sorry if that was offensive! That's not what I meant.... I just veil things a lot when I say them in a poem on purpose... like a lot of things will only ever make sense to me. This one was a little less veiled. Maybe not simpler.

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GwenavhyeurAnastasia In reply to Unaccompanied-me [2008-09-26 03:04:48 +0000 UTC]

Oh no, you're fine. It's true though, I've been having a lot of trouble understand anything here lately. Yes, it was a lot less veiled, which helped me to understand it better. I don't mind not understanding every once in a while. It's just been piling up. But no worries, I know you didn't mean anything by that.

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Unaccompanied-me In reply to GwenavhyeurAnastasia [2008-09-26 03:48:56 +0000 UTC]

okay good....phew. I hate offending people accidentally. If I mean it on the other hand.... hehe

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GwenavhyeurAnastasia In reply to Unaccompanied-me [2008-09-26 04:16:27 +0000 UTC]

Bit scary there. It's hard to offend me, though.

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RainbowBile [2008-09-26 02:37:53 +0000 UTC]

bullets half-ejaculated from
orgasming guns

wow, the fact that you can use sexual verbs and make my mind see something different is a serious accomplishment.

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Unaccompanied-me In reply to RainbowBile [2008-09-26 02:38:56 +0000 UTC]

It was one of those little risks we take in poetry...I hope it was effective!

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