Pagewolf [2018-08-15 12:16:05 +0000 UTC]
It was nice to read this, because you made the characters act like in real social situations. The presumption of characters always having to be doing something interesting, carrying some exciting meaning in their actions and talk appears in the written fanfics often. Here in YOUR fic they act in their own pace, sometimes doing things that have no meaningful purpose at all. They were acting in their own pace. Because of that Mikoto and Anna seemed more real. Saving enough space for the characters to appear realistic is a good way to assure that the readers enjoy the story.
Mikoto's gruffy personality appears in this fic well. My favorite part was when he came in to the apartment. You had built the athmosphere of wanting to keep the appearence of the apartment secret from Mikoto and when he came in, I felt nervous and excited. His intimidating nature made me feel on alert with a delicious way.
And then he went to conquer the couch. Classic Mikoto~
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