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Vanidar — On how we Interact
Published: 2012-05-08 21:03:01 +0000 UTC; Views: 438; Favourites: 6; Downloads: 2
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Description I don't mean to treat you like a friend
I don't mean to view you like a foe.

I don't like to balance all your words,
I don't enjoy calculating my replies,
or maintaining an, honestly, filtered facade.

I'm sorry that I rationalized.
I'm sorry that I entrusted her to you.

I paid the price, my trust was shattered.
I paid the price, I let you wound me.

She paid the price, and now she's gone.

I can't trust myself
to treat with you unguarded.

I can't trust you at all.
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Comments: 3

MaskedNightingale [2012-06-25 18:04:30 +0000 UTC]

There's several emotions that shown through this poem. Those kind which remain unnamed but can be felt.

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aFreaksWords [2012-05-08 21:08:46 +0000 UTC]

wow, this is nicely formatted. I don't recognize what it is based on though, could you fill me in?

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Vanidar In reply to aFreaksWords [2012-05-08 22:24:59 +0000 UTC]

I'm glad the structure impressed you. While I'm well versed in poetic and literary techniques, I don't always have a poem to write that I can fit into one of them.

I didn't use any standard form for this, which technically makes it 'freeverse', but I paid careful attention to meter and rhythm; mainly though specific use of anaphora (emphasizing and building importance through initial repetition). If you look, you'll see a 2-3-2-3-3 structure to how I grouped the stanzas. I'll leave you to understand the significance of that

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