Joplinx-Caster [2015-07-29 10:47:55 +0000 UTC]
I still think your writing has improved so much.
And maybe sneak Jehane in as a one night stand? d:
In my opinion, This one has a whole lot more flow to it. The chapters seem to carry on where you left off, even if it's a brand new scene. The descriptions have gotten more crisp, and your attention to detail on the scenery is astounding. I feel almost as if I'm witnessing the scenes play out rather than reading them.
So, all in all, 20/10 would read again.
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Vanitelamort In reply to Joplinx-Caster [2013-03-05 23:14:26 +0000 UTC]
Not sure (and it's Jehane, you were close ^^) I am use the format I had before of changing who the chapter is following but I don't think I'll do more than three characters (Spiro, Valentine and Virgil)
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Joplinx-Caster In reply to Vanitelamort [2013-03-12 15:54:47 +0000 UTC]
Even so, have her as maybe a love interest for Spiro, like the old one? And just have it not work out? [i hate to be like that, but I miss her ;^;]
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