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Description Eostara
By: Vindblain

I fell in love with Summer once
with sunlight upon her face;
it filtered through the canopy
casting shadows where we lay.

She curled beside me, quite at home
under canopy of trees
where she had walked through forest streams,
refreshing as the breeze.

I kissed her lips as sweet as fruit
and touched her earthen skin
then trailed my hands across her waist
so soft, yet toned and thin.

She smiled at me with beaming grace
alight with golden glow,
her hair cascading down her back;
her dress, cut loose and low.

We laughed and danced without a care,
awash in solstice heat;
heedless of the cooling touch
of moss beneath our feet.

But Summer storms were yet to come
and early the sun would set.
The green of forest leaves would fade
yet her warmth I'd not forget.

I sat alone beneath our tree
and felt the chilling air,
surrounded by the falling leaves,
of their beauty, unaware.

As the bright and verdant leaves turned gold
I felt that life had fled,
until a new love took my hand;
her hair of Autumn red.

She pulled me to my feet and spoke
of change, and color, and Fall;
of harvest and of equinox,
as she wrapped me in her shawl.

I glimpsed the warmth of Summer sun
behind her knowing eyes,
yet tempered with maturity
and wisdom undisguised.

We spent our days in fields of wheat
together, threshing grain,
then kissed, and touched, and loved, and slept
until the mornings came.

With nights grown long, and harvest spent,
the days grew cool with rain.
She held me close and kissed me deep
and said we'd meet again.

I watched her leave and felt my heart
grow hard and cold as ice.
I'd grown to love the Autumn's touch
and now I'd lost love twice.

Within the throws of Winter snows
I fell into despair
but once again love found me out;
with stunning midnight hair.

She warmed me with her heart and hearth
and gently brushed my face
with icy lips and fingertips,
beside her fireplace.

We stayed indoors and wrapped ourselves
within each others' arms.
Though blizzards battered at her door
she cheered me with her charms.

Beneath her sheets we slept in late
as long nights weathered on.
I kissed her skin, so smooth and sweet,
and for her touch grew fond.

Yet though her love felt wonderful
I longed for sun and life,
and Winter held such lonesome cold
it could never be my wife.

It tore my heart to see her weep
like the melting of the snow
For she knew well I could not stay,
and she beckoned me to go.

I wandered far and left the touch
of Winter far behind,
but the breath of Yule upon my neck
would forever mark my mind.

As days grew warm, and flowers bloomed,
the fruit trees blossomed full,
their petals fell like autumn leaves
and to my heart they pulled.

They guided me up sylvan stream
and through a forest glen.
I'd been alone so long it seemed
that love had never been.

But in the valley just ahead
with gown both sheer and long,
a maiden knelt at water's edge
and drew my heart with song.

She sung of seasons come and gone,
and the journey of the sun,
but the melody was cut mid-verse
as she looked upon me, stunned.

She smiled as though the moon itself
now stood before her, clothed,
reflecting all the light of day,
as she whispered "my betrothed..."

She pushed her hair back from her face
and took my hand in hers,
then spoke with tender confidence,
yet every bit demure.

"When last we parted I promised you
that we would meet again;
I've kept my word with patience long,
and awaited Winter's end."

I remembered then what had been lost,
and all that was forgot;
The seasons changed a thousand times
yet she forsook me not.

I looked into her eyes of green
though not for the first time.
Tears flowed freely down her cheeks
as she pressed her lips to mine.

She smelled of nectar from the blooms
wreathed into a crown,
woven in her braided hair,
so soft, and forest brown.

I held her close, and kissed her long
and feared I'd be bereaved
I felt her warmth, and light, and life
but found I could not grieve

I'd found the love I'd longed for
like the meadows of the Spring,
and on her finger, safe from time
she wore a woven ring.

I knew one day at season's end
we'd have to part again,
I'd feel the call of Summer's sun;
forget we'd ever been.

But I had found my Spring at last.
She held my heart as seasons passed.
Though we would part, we'd meet again,
and in this way our love would last.
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Comments: 38

WolfDreams [2011-10-19 05:23:54 +0000 UTC]

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Vindy.....I am nearly at a lose for words right now. This...what just happened was unearthly. Reading your poem took me through such a emotional ride i am speechless. This was beyond anything I have ever read. It was like a fire was dancing in my heart. You are a amazing writer and if only i was skilled enough to draw the pictures i saw in my head as i read this. It was like being thrown in a movie. Thank you for sharing this, I almost want to have it on my wall. Its breathtaking, lol once again I must say your amazing and never cease to amaze me...


~WolfDreams

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Vindblain In reply to WolfDreams [2011-10-19 22:20:46 +0000 UTC]

Wow O_O What a flattering critique! ^///^
I'm so happy you liked it. I get no greater thrill in life than moving someone as you say this poem did. You really just made my day (or week at the very least). I'm glad you thought it worth such high ratings (though my modesty says it's just too much!)

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WolfDreams In reply to Vindblain [2011-10-20 03:10:20 +0000 UTC]

Lets just say that I must thank our Good Friend Glacierman for recommending i look at your stuff! I am enlightened to know you ^^

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0Iluvater0 [2012-02-08 01:31:20 +0000 UTC]

Dude that was amazing... how... I mean... I don't know what I mean, Can I take a holiday in your mind for just a day? You need to get a book published of your poetry.

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Vindblain In reply to 0Iluvater0 [2012-03-24 01:18:40 +0000 UTC]

Feel free to suggest that to publishers. (Cheeky Grin)

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0Iluvater0 In reply to Vindblain [2012-03-24 03:26:40 +0000 UTC]

Well if your interested check out Blurb [link] scroll down to the bottom and there is a box in the bottom right hand corner select Blurb United State.

You've got some thing awesome here buddy It'll be worth it, I'm getting some of my photos put into a custom book too!

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Axlazu [2012-01-24 17:52:12 +0000 UTC]

I have no words to describe how beautifully written this is. Beautiful doesn't even come close to capturing what I want to say.

I'm at a lost for words, there was nothing but pure poetic beauty with this.

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Vindblain In reply to Axlazu [2012-01-31 19:45:51 +0000 UTC]

Wow, what a compliment! Thank you so much for the kind words.

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Axlazu In reply to Vindblain [2012-01-31 20:31:43 +0000 UTC]

^^

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poisonplum In reply to Axlazu [2012-01-24 17:58:40 +0000 UTC]

told you

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Axlazu In reply to poisonplum [2012-01-24 18:42:55 +0000 UTC]

yes, yes you did.

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poisonplum In reply to Axlazu [2012-01-24 19:47:18 +0000 UTC]

^^

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rileyray [2011-10-24 17:56:36 +0000 UTC]

Oh my goodness. That was amazing. I am lost for words.... Just.. Amazing.

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Vindblain In reply to rileyray [2011-10-25 15:39:30 +0000 UTC]

^///^ Thank you so much for saying so. I'm so glad you liked it!

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MistyMay88 [2011-10-21 01:35:10 +0000 UTC]

This is so amazing! Almost cried...

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Vindblain In reply to MistyMay88 [2011-10-21 01:40:04 +0000 UTC]

(beaming)

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MistyMay88 In reply to Vindblain [2011-10-21 01:41:38 +0000 UTC]

lol well I would think so

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Aldesto [2011-10-20 02:20:45 +0000 UTC]

It's hard to critique something so perfect already. I loved it, and I'm not being bias.

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Aldesto In reply to Aldesto [2011-10-20 02:23:19 +0000 UTC]

Wolfdreams said it best.

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Vindblain In reply to Aldesto [2011-10-20 14:27:17 +0000 UTC]

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chernboyl [2011-10-20 00:50:27 +0000 UTC]

i applaud you.

that is the first poem i've read on this site and actually completed without going "hmph" and removing from my messages haha. congratulations, you may make a believer out of me yet.

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Vindblain In reply to chernboyl [2011-10-20 14:25:19 +0000 UTC]

(huge grin) Well, I'm happy to have shaken your beliefs *wink*

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LoneWolf0628 [2011-10-19 10:54:44 +0000 UTC]

Absolutely amazing Such descriptive language, it really pulls the reader in, not to mention how you personified the seasons and made it into a romantic poem. Wonderful!

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Vindblain In reply to LoneWolf0628 [2011-10-19 22:22:40 +0000 UTC]

I'm glad I was able to pull you into my little world for a moment. I like it here, so I'm happy to share!

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LoneWolf0628 In reply to Vindblain [2011-10-19 23:13:06 +0000 UTC]

I appreciate it!

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chriseastmids [2011-10-19 02:58:11 +0000 UTC]

its wonderful, full of lush images it takes you on a journey, well it took me on a journey

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Vindblain In reply to chriseastmids [2011-10-19 22:24:00 +0000 UTC]

I'm so happy you were able to take that journey and enjoy it. Thank you for saying so!

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chriseastmids In reply to Vindblain [2011-10-20 04:44:37 +0000 UTC]

your so very welcome

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RobertJamesA [2011-10-18 22:54:04 +0000 UTC]

Wow I have to say this is absolutely beautiful, one of the best poems Ive read on dA in a long time.
Your imagery is stunning and it is what keeps the reader hooked all the way through the story.
I love the metaphors of the seasons in that way this can relate to alot of people, this was a real joy to read.

Check out my period piece if you want to. [link]

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Vindblain In reply to RobertJamesA [2011-10-19 22:25:22 +0000 UTC]

Thank you so much for saying so! I'm happy you were hooked. I was hooked while writing it so it makes me feel wonderful to know someone else was drawn in as well. I'm so glad you liked it. thank you for the comments!

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forzaCarlton [2011-10-18 22:48:11 +0000 UTC]

I like it. Remindes me of Yeats a bit.

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Vindblain In reply to forzaCarlton [2011-10-19 22:31:23 +0000 UTC]

Wow, what a compliment! Thank you so much!

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Marius-Drake [2011-10-18 22:18:42 +0000 UTC]

It's a beautiful piece, and takes the reader on a journey that no doubt you've walked before. The rhyming scheme sweeps you up and carries you through so well that the few minor deviations from the rhyme jarr a little. I.e
But Summer storms were yet to come
and early the sun would set.
The green of forest leaves would fade
yet her warmth I would not forget.

Could become

But Summer storms were yet to come
and early sun's would set
The green of forest leaves would fade
her warmth I'd not forget

the personifications work fantastically, and really underline the changing people and how you were changing throughout the poem. however you could change from this slightly at

and Winter held such lonesome cold
it could never be my wife.

made into

and winter held such lonesome cold
she could never be my wife

It's more personal and carries through the honesty that is present through out the work. without it it seemed distant which works in terms of the emotions but didn't seem to flow as well on the first read through.

I really loved this and had to read it a couple of times to let it sink in. Apart from these points (the first occurs a few times but isn't a big issue), it's the best poem i've read in quite a wile. If you have time I'd appreciate some feedback that you might have on any of my poems. Thanks for sharing

[link]

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Vindblain In reply to Marius-Drake [2011-10-19 22:39:57 +0000 UTC]

I hope you don't mind, but I made one of the changes you suggested (changing "warmth I would not" to "warmth I'd not"). I'm torn about changing "it could never be my wife" to "she could..." though. I love it both ways! I'd be interested to hear what the other readers think. Personally, I like "it" only tiny bit better, because it seems to imply the season is the one that's cold rather than the woman who personifies the season. It's such a fine line though!

Thank you so much for the thoughtful critique.

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Marius-Drake In reply to Vindblain [2011-10-19 23:44:17 +0000 UTC]

The changes were only there to illustrate what I was describing but i'm flattered that you would integrate the suggestion. And I enjoyed giving the critique considering other talented writers helps me gain insight into my own bits and bobs. So thank you

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CourtneyParker77 [2011-10-18 22:10:49 +0000 UTC]

absolutely beautiful, absolutely perfect. i normally don't like long poems, but this one is just perfect. had it been shorter, it wouldn't have been half as good. it was very well written.

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Vindblain In reply to CourtneyParker77 [2011-10-18 22:15:08 +0000 UTC]

Thank you so much! I'm glad you liked it.

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CourtneyParker77 In reply to Vindblain [2011-10-18 22:24:23 +0000 UTC]

you're very welcome. one of my favorites, by far.

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