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Published: 2002-10-10 00:46:15 +0000 UTC; Views: 1354; Favourites: 19; Downloads: 194
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surrounded bydaily affection
daily confusion
everyday I'm led on
but it's hard to
care
if I won't allow
hope
but continue the
smile and
daily laughter
daily excitement
adventurer
you tell yourself
I'm beautiful
I doubt
you'll be thinking that
when I'm crying in your
arms
dying for your
touch
numb so deep
frozen to the core
against my will
slap me
like the others
I won't feel
bruised and broken
heart
I'll try another
never learn
from falling
this is different
tell yourself
I doubt
you'll ever be the
same
same tune
same song
same breathtaking
smile
same feeling
unknown but still
it's there
you tell me that I'm
beautiful
don't die while
tearing down the wall
watch for
falling rocks
and watch for
pieces of me
don't fuck with me
I'm not ready
for again
over, under
back and forth
I'm sick of
repetition
I'm sick of
lines describing love
but love's not real
I'm of sick
obsessing
obsession's overrated
I'm sick of
searching for
words to describe
your eyes
I'll just shut mine
avoidance
can cure
anything
I doubt
but like everything
it's worth a try
I'm sick of lines
full of this
when this
is nothing
and I'm sick of
realizations
realizing everything
I say
I do
I hope
I fear
I want
I wish
is wrong
dependent but
I've given up
this works for
me
to live for
you
or you
or him
at least
it's something
to live for
no need for
your push
if I jump
no need for
your help
I'll just lie
as this goes
for it will never
come true
I doubt
you tell me that I'm
beautiful
trip and
don't stop to
catch me
walk by
be there
already
stop
don't stop
I understand
if you walk away
go away
but I won't lie
if you ask
but I won't tell
my secrets
because the truth
can hurt
can scar
can scare
the truth convicts
lies
making completely
useless
the struggle to get
this far
stir it all up
with doubt
and you get
this
me avoiding
you
me avoiding
the obvious
and unable
to believe
you tell me
that I'm beautiful
I doubt
amazement
never watched
your eyes
monitor
for betrayal
never
I doubt
so sick of lines
full of this
when this
is nothing
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Comments: 31
its filled with emotions from one word to another
its a strong piece and its hard to describe but as you read it its like your traveling with the lines
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Wow. this was amazing. i loved the emotions that draws you in.
very cool
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This is very good! Clever I would say. It gave me something to read it, and not many poems do that to me now days... Keep it up!
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oh wow
i love it
that a poem that long can flow so nicely
and its just so full of emotion
damn i can't believe i havent stumbled upon this long time ago
this is def. a fave
awesome work
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wow... you just read and read and read some more and it naturally goes faster and faster and all the words just jumble up inside your head until you think you're going to have a brain overload because you know exactly how this feels and the same thoughts have raced through your head before and you're afraid of having either the equivalent of a mental orgasm or a mental breakdown and then.... it's over and time to write a comment.
and now it's time to add this to my favorites.
~jess~
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there's a lot i want to say about this but i can't seem to find words to say it.
i love it.
i'm amazed you understand.
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The flow of it puts me in a trance. I love it. WOW.
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... You understand ....
Sorry to hear we share the same prison.
...mine is just hidden deeper down inside (for reasons I think you understand).
+fav
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Oh my, Now that was a very nice 20 minutes to spend(5 reading and 15 rereading )
I have never seen a poem that was constructed like that before.
I like it, alot!
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Wow, the repetition and the flow from line to line was great!
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Wow, this is great. The rythym of the poem sucks you into it and the emotions come out so strongly. Wonderful
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very nice, i like the structure and whatnot, though, i can't say i've expirienced this one before...great job though!
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Ouch, I will never forgive myself for taking you off of my devwatch.
This is great, at the start I saw parts I disliked because I have read them 1000 times over, but as I continued, I was graciously granted with originality and complete composure of insanity. I love poems that are written in this broken style, I do it a lot myself.
To me it helps to get points across in a broken stanza, seeing as how the slight pauses add a bit of suspense and flow.
Anyhow, this is sweet, and I will watch you again.
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Great work. I really like the fast paced it seems to take on. Everything is blured with the reading of a newline. It seems as if in everyline theres a new main point which gives it the blur effect. As stupid as it sounds, I don't normally like long poems. I'm more a fan of the "short and sweet" ones, but this....this is excellent. Great work.
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wau. its just.. wau
reminds me of some things.
..wau
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yes we do. we're human. we suck. but whatya gunna do love the poem, very nice.
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sometimes we doubt our own beauty so that we can be reassured when others constantly tell us.
sorry if i sound cynical. my brother was always denying his good points, it started to drag after telling him for the fifty millionth time that he wasn't too bloody skinny.
but this is a very good peice, and as some1 has already said, i still think you're damn beautiful..... are u calling me a fucking liar?!!
do we set ourselves up for the fall?
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Wow
an all time fav
really good work, like the way it flows.
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Yes, it needs wow 'cause that's great piece of art right there
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Never count
falling through
the years
ever scrape
unkissed
insightful
cheers
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I usually don't comment on poems, but this one is really agressive and breathtaking.
Bye
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I know what you mean by these words... not because you put it so well, which you do, but because Ive lived them. I ask myself these questionsβ¦
What are words when eyes can hide insincerity...? How can you know what is the truth when someday you know the phone call is going to come� Who would dare to love when love must die?
Iβm not so sure myselfβ¦
Keep up the good work, It can't rain all the time.
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whoa...
I had trouble reading it because about half way through I had to shut my head up because it was going on about how great it was. After shutting it up I finished and I am astounded. This just locks one's brain inside a box, shakes it about and dumps it in the nearest waste receptical. Total trip, I love it. the words are deep, the pace is quick and decisive.
"...but I won't lie
if you ask
but I won't tell
my secrets
because the truth
can hurt
can scar
can scare..."
That part hit home too. So true with all of us.
Glad I added you to my devwatch.
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Great work as always, it's a beautiful piece, and i love the style it has, and the way it's constructed adds to the feeling. Amazing job.
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I like the lines that come back all through the poem.... beautiful poem
"I'm beautiful I doubt you'll be thinking that when I'm crying in your arms dying for your touch"
Hmmm I'd still say you are... for you really are..... especially in that pic...
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i love how you keep removing yourself from, well, yourself ("I'll try another never learn from falling this is different tell yourself")
the (for lack of a better word) tempo of the poem is strangely mezmerizing
hideously good use of the "nothing better to die for, so i'll die for you" theme.
fantabulous...
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I love it. The emotion of it is familiar and u express it wonderfully. Great work :] i like the pic too!
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