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TheFantaSim [2011-01-12 13:11:15 +0000 UTC]

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I didn't realize I had not written anything about this deviation when it came through at #ManipulateThis , so I'll take the time to write a critique now.

Yes, *da-joint-stock did a great job with his critique and I agree with his suggestions, but I have a couple of things to add.

1. The sparkles look too obvious and out of place. There are other sparkle brushes available that add a touch of magic to a deviation without taking away from the imagery itself, and I think that's what you really want from those brushes. Think about the sparkles before you use them. Are they really needed?

2. The hair on the horse and tail, I think they got over worked. They look flat now, like a shape instead of hair. You could go back to the original stock and see what I mean. One way to fix that is to copy just the mane and tail from the original and paste them onto your deviation. Don't forget to blend the pasted areas so that it looks natural again.

3. Personally, I don't think your lightening is needed. It just seems to be added without thinking about what the image is about. I think groupings of gulls would do better in the background.

That's my take on this, I hope it helps.

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SpunkyThoroughbred [2011-02-06 15:14:51 +0000 UTC]

Gorgeous!

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Waterfall24 [2011-01-21 09:28:27 +0000 UTC]

sorry guys we didn't win the challenge )O: maybe next time (O:

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Metadored [2011-01-19 11:09:31 +0000 UTC]

Lovely piece, good luck

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EquineStockImagery [2011-01-18 21:06:22 +0000 UTC]

Beautiful work! I love it.
Thank you so much for using my stock.

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cazcastalla [2011-01-07 19:19:10 +0000 UTC]

Well, I think Dan has said it all - I really like this manipulation, you have nicely executed a great concept - good luck in the challenge

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da-joint-stock [2011-01-07 01:21:28 +0000 UTC]

Hya!

This is awesome! The background is incredible! It looks natural!

The ballerina and the horse look good too, however I find they seem to stand out from the rest of the scene.

If you'll have them, I have a few suggestions

-First, the only part of teh image that really looks out of place - the lightning. The lightning looks great, but it is very unusual to see it black instead of white. Did you have a reason for making it black? If not, I\'d definitely say white is the say to go

-Second, the ballerina looks really good, except for two details. The ballerina stands out from the scene for one main reason - she is unnaturally light compared to the rest of the scene. Try lowering the Brightness and adjusting the Contrast slightly. Also, try adding a faint dark-aqua overlay, to make the ballerina looks like she is actually outside by the sea with a storm approaching. That said...I assume the horse could represent Poseidon, Greek God of the Sea, who favoured horses. If so, perhaps he could be eminated some sort of light. Just an idea though

Also for the ballerina, her shadow. The main issue here is the shadow you've added doesn't really match the lighting on her body, although it does match the rest of the scene. I'd suggest making the shadow a bit more solid and a bit darker. If my theory of the horse representing Poseidon is true, then you could say he is emitting light (hence the bright light on the ballerina), but in that case, I would suggest adding another shadow trailing off behind her - this one would be dark like the shadows on the rocks beneath her feet.

-Next, the horse. The horse looks really good and very majestic with such a smooth, straight mane, however it looks a little unnatural as well. First, try adding an overlay like I suggested for the ballerina, to make the lighting and colour of the horse better match the scene around it. Second, I agree with *Cynnalia that the mane looks a little too straight. That said, if the horse represents Poseidon, that's understandable

-Lastly, the horse's hooves. The horse's hooves stand out a great deal because of the constrast between them and the shadowy ground beneath. I'd suggest making the hooves darker to better match the lighting.

Otherwise though, this is absolutely amazing!

I apologize if I sounded harsh or offending in my comments, it was not at all my intention.

Best of luck in the Challenge!

Dan

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Cynnalia [2011-01-06 19:21:24 +0000 UTC]

This is a lovely job! Only two things stand out for me - first, I'm a little confused as to why the lighting is black...is there a reason it isn't white, like normal? Also, the horse's mane and tail need further refining - there are too many widely spaced strands that are too uniform in stroke. But I love the blending of the background and the connection between the ballerina and the horse - well done!

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Rickbw1 [2011-01-06 06:08:41 +0000 UTC]

Overall nice work. You might consider softening an/or blur the horse and figure to blend more into the background and make it look less pasted on. Good luck

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Satanoy [2011-01-05 19:27:58 +0000 UTC]

amazing, your works are like dreams

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LegendOfWolves [2011-01-05 17:27:27 +0000 UTC]

Wow, it's beautiful!

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