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Apsara-Silverwing [2009-02-02 01:54:35 +0000 UTC]
The page isn't showing up... I had a similar problem with page 2.
Just thought that you might want to know.
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MysteryMan91 [2007-03-18 23:18:54 +0000 UTC]
The second speech bubble in panel 1, the one in panel 2, and the speech bubble in the final panel just seem a little awkward. Sorry I don't have anything to recommend, it just doesn't read perfectly.
I think for the final panel, a little clarification of this 'charge' would help a little. Good luck!
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MysteryMan91 In reply to whiteshaix [2007-03-19 23:00:09 +0000 UTC]
Hah, I get ya. Yes, "We came for it" sounds decent, or maybe "That is why we're here!" The only change is the italics and some contractions, but it seems to make a world of difference.
And Cap'n Marsh in the second panel sounds okay with your previously said change, and I think in the last panel, instead of charge, say "...He wanted that command badly."
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whiteshaix In reply to MysteryMan91 [2007-03-19 23:05:06 +0000 UTC]
Wow, page fixed! Thanks a lot! ^^
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Kanuka76 [2007-03-17 21:14:39 +0000 UTC]
Gh di questa ricordo pure di aver visto parte della colorazione *brill*
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whiteshaix In reply to Kanuka76 [2007-03-17 23:16:36 +0000 UTC]
...C'era anche Rej... ^^
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thewizardess [2007-03-17 18:46:28 +0000 UTC]
looking great so far, can't wait to see page 5!
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nekomukuro [2007-03-17 18:29:05 +0000 UTC]
Uao, non ho parole *_*
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whiteshaix In reply to nekomukuro [2007-03-17 20:11:14 +0000 UTC]
Grazie! Tra qualche giorno dovrei riuscire anche a mettere la versione italiana sul mio sito (devo ancora costruire le pagine).
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nekomukuro In reply to whiteshaix [2007-03-18 13:17:43 +0000 UTC]
Bene~ *_* ero giΓ andata a sbirciare l'altro giorno, ma era tutto in costruzione >.< attenderΓ² *w*
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whiteshaix In reply to nekomukuro [2007-03-19 14:51:43 +0000 UTC]
Non sono affatto male, mi sembrano tutti ben caratterizzati, lui Γ¨ solo quello che mi diverte di piΓΉ. Forse Kai potrebbe mostrare un po' piΓΉ di carattere, ma Γ¨ una questione di preferenze personali, io vado matta per i personaggi un tantino "maledetti"...
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Caipirina [2007-03-17 18:23:14 +0000 UTC]
I agree with Larissa-Rasputin , is very good so far, I love how you color n_n
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