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Published: 2005-01-20 08:19:52 +0000 UTC; Views: 1805; Favourites: 16; Downloads: 61
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On a cold winter's evening,a hill stands silhouetted against the sky.
A table can be seen atop the hill, overshadowed by a dead tree.
A canopy of stars provide the lighting on this lonely night
and the only sound that can be heard is the faint sound of voices...
Welcome to Tranquility.
poem by Mr.Valentine
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thank you 
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Holy shit, dude! I was the one that wrote that!!
I just sort of spat it out one night when nobody else was really in the room and I was bored -- I can't believe you liked it so much!
...and I agree with that phalacee dude on the echo thing... or, no... well, I dunno. The important thing is you liked it and it's really kick ass that it could inspire you to do an awesome drawing like THAT! It's totally fuggin awesome!!
And by the by, I've always found Stadtler art products to be pretty damn good...
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HEY HEY HEY!!! i figured it was you but i never got around to asking... but then i will give you credit as soon as i finish this comment response
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Oh, wow, Gio. Very nice. It's got that calm, lonely feeling. Sort of like when someone you love has died, but you want to uphold their last wish of keeping a stiff upper lip. It's the midnight of broken lovers. Did you sneak into my mind and paint what you saw there? 
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no... i snuck into mine...
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Great minds think alike, I suppose. ^_^. Only you're the one with the great mind, not me. Even still, beautiful work.
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if only I was the on with the great mind then WE wouldent think alike.. and infact we do... so there. you DO have a great mind...
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Awwww! I love yoooooooooooo!
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^ ^ i love you too
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Paint? Sorry, I meant draw, sketch...er... thingie. You get what I mean...
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whoops, submitted that before I was done. Yeah, apart from that change I suggested, this looks and works great
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just a comment on the poetry ... maybe it would be better to have it as: and the only sound that can be heard is the faint echo of voices...
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dont hate i didnt write this... the thing is i cant give credit to who it was so i figure that whoever it was will say, "HEY THATS MINE" and then i'll give them credit... i like it the way it is because "echo" is a word that is used alot when it comes to things of the sort. besides, its cool because the word "sound" leads the reader to assume that the voices are too audible/inaudible to be catagorized as anything other than just... sound.
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cool, that works too, its just I thought that with the word sound being used once already on the line, it was too repetitive is all ...
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it is repetative, but not in a bad way... on great thing about poetry is that you can write it anyway you want. repetition of certain words, well thats ACTUALLY a poetry property. 
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So you DID learn something last year in creative writing!! Heh, Just kidding. I've read your poetry before, and I find it to be awefull (meaning that it fills me with awe in a good kinda way).
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yes indeed i did learn something in creative writing... but alas, you have to look at the description because i was not the one who wrote this particular poem. i dont like preading my poetry to the universe, becaue usually my art (drawings etc.) say every thing i need to. sorry to dissapoint you.
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Ahem! I was commenting on the comment you left about how there are no rules in poetry. I know you didn't write tranquility, but I still know you have potential of your own. Sorry for the confusion.
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and thats why I got such low grades for english lit in school
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PISH POSH!! its not a big deal my friend. actually the writer of the poem said that he might prefer it the other way, but im not going to change it because ...well plainly i cant... i already plastered the text to this one and well it aint comin off 
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