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xenoneal — Chapter 1-7
Published: 2013-09-08 06:55:21 +0000 UTC; Views: 5801; Favourites: 50; Downloads: 10
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Sorry, 2 more pages and the first chapter is done, and you will have met the villain and someone else. This was the intro and setup chapter, everything that happens after will be the main story. Everything vectored by me (if I remember right) except those kindly provided by
- Potted flowers misteraibo.deviantart.com/art/…
- Twilight, panel 5 mlp-vectorclub.deviantart.com/…
And of course, where would I be without and his help?
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Yes and no. I foolishly attempted this when I had no idea how much time would go into drawing everything, a fact made only worse by the fact I was doing it with vectors. I've since adapted it into a simple, words-only story. So it goes. If you're curious, these are the first chapters xenoneal.deviantart.com/art/Wh… . Same story, just different presentation.
Hope that answers your question.
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Thanks for the encouragement, miss 
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I'm going to assume "trickster" is for Discord. So does that mean Discord is considered the devil in this pony universe?
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When I read it I felt that "The Trickster" would be for Pinkie, as she is kinda a trickster.
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To be honest, I hadn't really put that much thought into it. The story I'm telling is intended to fit within the canon universe, i.e. the show and official comics. For me, using "trickster" was just a cute way of using the phrase without saying devil, which would have been a little out of place. Since the devil is occasionally referred to as a trickster, all the better
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Might I say, your wording and phrasing is lovely. Very close to the show's flow. The "smooth sailin'" of Applejack threw me off a little, cause, you know, farm girl, sailin, not the first one I'd consider.
But all in all great work, really!
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Thank you so much, that's a huge compliment and relief for me! Yeah, in my mind, it's really important for the characters to sound like themselves; can't rely on people reading them in their voices to make up for bad dialogue! I see your point about Applejack, I mostly chose it to limit the size of the balloon, and at the time it seemed like a down-home, rustic idiom that wouldn't clash too much.
Thanks again, really appreciate the input!
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No prob. Need to get into the flavour of Applejack? I used an entire tumblr full of southern US proverbs to get into the mood for her whilst translating a comic. For consideration only, of course.
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Nice, I'll definitely be taking a look at that later. Thanks
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Nothing like a nice intermediate page before things are getting more interesting, well done!
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Thanks! This is just my opinion as writer, but an audience needs to be wooed before you throw them into the middle of the story.
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No problem and I agree, you're doing a good job so far so keep it up!
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Thanks, they're not exactly as nice as yours, but I did my best
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.........? your kidding right?
this scene is set out brilliantly
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Thanks, I appreciate you saying so 
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Great work again, honestly can't wait for the rest of this chapter.
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Thanks man, I definitely appreciate the encouragement!
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Thanks, that's a bit of relief. I was afraid things were getting boring and taking too long.
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Nah, I like the pacing for it. ^_^
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Alright, thanks for your thoughts
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