XGamerGT03 [2004-10-13 09:24:31 +0000 UTC]
DANG IT, my mom deleted it again.... i finally had about 50 pages and she deletes it...
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sisandbro [2004-09-25 05:52:19 +0000 UTC]
hmm.... well, the story is really kewl, but there are a lot of parts that you could have elaborated on, such as the entire sequence of the burning village and stuff. some of the parts are good to read, and there are some good word usages in there, but overall, i don't particularly like how the story is written.
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XGamerGT03 In reply to sisandbro [2004-09-25 13:44:34 +0000 UTC]
OOO thanks for that now i can get to work on those parts, i wrote this in like 30 minas from the book i had started so its gona be alot better once i fix it up and everything. Village burning deffinetly one to work on i knew that already but thanks for the comments. I'lll get the vampire part i promised up really soon.
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