HOME | DD
xspikex — First Kiss
Published: 2006-07-21 12:19:17 +0000 UTC; Views: 26730; Favourites: 564; Downloads: 107
Redirect to original
Description
My lips graze your crimson ones, you virgin lips.I reel back in shock, what have I done?
Have i taken your first kiss, the first time you kissed a boy?
And left your lips no longer virgin?
What have i done to you?
Am i worth it, your eyes reflect mine,
Shocked, scared, silent.
What to do now, i dont know.
Let's just continue.
Our lips connected again, I shudder as i accidentally taste your lipstick.
It's greasy, should i sandpaper your lips?
You deepen the kiss, gaining more experience.
I can hardly bear to breathe for the shame of breaking this
Wonderful thing, as my lips touch the heavens.
People rush past us, fading in a blur. I don't really care anymore
Because you're mine
Odd stares and harsh whispers float and change in to whitetrash.
I don't care anymore
Because your mine
We let go, for the sake of breathe,
Damnation be to that thing.
Spiralling down to reality, everythings seems so
Bland, yet again. Until another tryst.
You lean, tired against me. I silently wish I was more muscular
Your head seems to droop. Sighing softly
An 'I love you' vibrates from you.
Air catches in my throat, and I'll never forget
Your first kiss.
Related content
Comments: 183
This is so beautiful... and this is so creepy since I own that picture! It's hanging up in my room right now 0.0
👍: 0 ⏩: 0
Wow this is very poetic and love the break from girl's POV. Really well written
👍: 0 ⏩: 0
AWESOME!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! That is all.
👍: 0 ⏩: 0
I like seeing this from a boy's point of view! XD
👍: 0 ⏩: 0
This is beautiful. I love how it is from a boy's viewpoint.
👍: 0 ⏩: 0
Mature romance? Really? Anyway, this is a horrible poem in the way a first kiss can be horrible, I hope this is your first poem.
👍: 0 ⏩: 1
Dude, helpful criticism is fine but you don't need to hate on this. I personally thought this was cute. A beautiful poem. You're allowed your own opinion, sure, but if it's a bad one, keep it to yourself, alrighty? No one needs to read about how you hate this poem.
👍: 0 ⏩: 0
This is simply beautiful, i fell in love with it in the first word. wowzaas
👍: 0 ⏩: 0
Very well done, you aptly described the imagry and emotions of the act. Beautiful writting.
👍: 0 ⏩: 0
Drew me in right from the beginning. I'd never thought from that point of view. I really like it.
👍: 0 ⏩: 0
Yep, you nailed it. That was me (well kinda) when I got my first kiss. I could see in his eyes what you described in the beginning.
👍: 0 ⏩: 0
Absolutely amazing! This is, literally, EXACTLY what I felt when I first kissed my angel.
Great job at capturing the moment.
👍: 0 ⏩: 0
I'm sure this is how my bf was feeing just today...
👍: 0 ⏩: 0
thats really good ^^
made me all warm inside
👍: 0 ⏩: 0
It was very sweet and interesting to read! Good job
👍: 0 ⏩: 0
I disagree with the others. It's not corny. The first stanza reflects more... surprise than corniness [if thats a word]. And like a first kiss, the poem gains more confidence in the following verses.
A very satisfying poem.
👍: 0 ⏩: 0
Hi,
After I read your poem, I absolutely had to say how much I loved it. (I had to sign up for DeviantArt so that I could comment in the first place, but I suppose that is not such a bad thing...)
I'm 20 (almost 21...) and never been kissed, so I would so much enjoy if the boy/man who is to give me my first kiss, would remotely give it so much thought and that it could mean so much to him too.
Thank you, your poem has meant a lot to me.
👍: 0 ⏩: 0
wow this is absolutely beautiful!
i never thought about it from this perspective before.
👍: 0 ⏩: 0
You sir... have blissed us with your tremendous work!
No seriously. Great work lol
👍: 0 ⏩: 0
I love it! The first kiss, from a guys point of view! Couldn't have been better!
👍: 0 ⏩: 0
This is truly beautiful. It's touching. It also makes me think that not all boys are the same.
👍: 0 ⏩: 0
aw, that actually made me tear up a bit to imagine that there are boys out there who care about a girl's first kiss. My first kiss was taken without permission, and then the boy just walked off into the night, leaving me there wondering what happened.
👍: 0 ⏩: 0
id never really thought of the concept of virgin lips.
this puts it really beautifully into perspective
👍: 0 ⏩: 0
| Next =>