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Published: 2005-10-15 07:25:43 +0000 UTC; Views: 1840; Favourites: 72; Downloads: 10
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I've decided to call this progress.Every second that passes,
every moment spent waiting.
Eventually,
my memory will fade
or yours will return
and, in either case,
no one will ever be able
to tell the difference.
I once heard you sum up my entire life
in a sentence.
I once saw you move your hands
and make a million reasons
to fall in love.
Eventually,
time fills itself up
and overflows.
(We do not run out of time;
time runs out of us.)
You close your eyes
and I'll shut my mouth -
these dreams can take care of themselves.
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"Eventually,
my memory will fade
or yours will return
and, in either case,
no one will ever be able
to tell the difference.
I once heard you sum up my entire life
in a sentence.
I once saw you move your hands
and make a million reasons
to fall in love."
i hope you don't mind that i love you.
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Wow.
I have nothing to say, that's powerful there. That's power
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there are no words........im so in love with this piece. just amazing!
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do what you gotta do. haha.
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"I once heard you sum up my entire life
in a sentence."
♥ wow wow
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absolutely perfect in every way. by far my favourite thing you've ever written, for it's simplicity.
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I've decided to call this progress
Excellent opening line/strophe. Great title, great wordplay too, as is typical of your pieces.
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I'm joining the choir on the time running out of us line. You probably know I love that kind of concept reversal to death.
I also really like the ending. I don't know if you intended it as I read it, but I think that we often just need to shut the hell up with all our dreams and theories about life and simply enjoy each other. Sometimes words can just sully near-perfect moments.
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thanks
and I know what you mean
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Time runs out of us - that's a scary idea. A bit nihilistic.
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I really enjoy that your work makes me smile. Countless types of smiles, but smiles nonetheless.
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I once saw you move your hands
and make a million reasons
to fall in love.
cute, cute, cute 
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thanks for bumping this. it says much i've had occasion to want to say.
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my pleasure, shane. thank you!
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Lovely work. The parentheses made my morning/day/evening.
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Oh my gosh.
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This is phenomenal! The weight of the first stanza is unmistakable. The beauty and longing in the fourth stanza is breathtaking. I want to roll around in this poem as if it were grass on a warm sunny day. Nom nom nom.
/fin
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(We do not run out of time;
time runs out of us.)
this is really interesting
what did you mean in those lines?
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I'm usually not big on
decoding myself, but, as
this is fairly straight forward
and you seem like a nice girl,
I will:
time goes on
we don't
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