Inry [2017-11-04 09:35:40 +0000 UTC]
I see you did some researtch. But, of course, dogs have rudimentary thumbs on their forepaws (not on hindpaws).
You did some repears: " arms as they get thinner and less complex.... her shoulders become less complex". Try to do descriptions from hero's POW, like "her arms thinnied and when she tried to wiggle her fingers, she can't do it seperately..." Try to describe her exploring range of movements, there are some which dogs can but human can't.
Some about her smell, not just "telling stories about people and places.", but describe what she can smell now, other dogs, humans visited this place ans surrounding. Try to avoid abstract descriptions.
I think, she is not completly dog now. She is simplier and more obedient, but still understands some concepts of human actions and basic commands. She could even remember her past life, but prefer her current state. The total mind wipe is too much, and not useful for K9.
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KnownCamer0n123 In reply to yourdude68 [2017-11-04 02:02:07 +0000 UTC]
well, its definitely better than my first one.
on a different note, could we continue our rp?
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