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Yuki-the-Trickster — Poem for Torchwick (Red like Roses)
Published: 2015-03-11 20:52:12 +0000 UTC; Views: 1579; Favourites: 40; Downloads: 0
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Sorry if it's hard to read but it's technically a poem through Ruby's POV of the trailer and episode 1. I wrote it like that because I had this friend who cosplays Roman and now we're dating. So yeah....RWBY belongs to and Rooster Teeth
Poem by me
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The idea conveyed by this poem is from what I read of both torchwhick and Ruby sharing relationship those teases as to what it exactly is (Love, hate, rivalry, playful?) The font seems pretty unique though the technique of using a symbol behind text is simple, though the kind that is used does seem to work well with the poem. Though you use a simple A-B-A-B Rhyme, you make the most out of it. Lastly the impact I'm left with is that I get a back-story (sorta), and a sense of a relationship two people are in and sounds exciting.
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Whoa... that was deep. Thanks a lot ^^ Actually if you put it into reality Ruby and Roman are years apart, Ruby is gr. 10 while Roman is in 12. The fact that they met through the show and how much they bonded and her giving an image of someone Ruby has fallen for. But have to split apart for a bit at the end of the school year and are trying to make the best of it, despite parents being iffy on it (not knowing much about the guy). But in the end they try their hardest to be together despite all odds.
Though there is a RWBY version to it based off the show.
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No problem friend
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As far I can tell the only that could use critiquing of any sort would be the way you put the words. The theme and everything else however is very solid. The flower that is called that which is a rose in that which called a background is as one would say what called blurry. Yes, typing like the ones who are known as the crang because that which is known as a word counter would not allow me to post 📮 the which is called a critique on that which is called a poem that you wrote. Man just looking at my critique is gonna kill someone with boredom.
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You're welcome 😊
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It being hand written gives it a personality that's so difficult to convey in plain fonts, so good job. The only problem I may have is with the first verse. The rhyme feels slightly forced there, maybe having the first verse flow free would be better. White innocence is Ruby's take on Weiss, Shadows Underneath is her (very perceptive) take on Blake. But yellow moonlight for Yang? Gave no heath? I get that it means she has no proper home there, but the moonlight would be more white... Yellow dragon, I can't breathe?
I dunno, I actually like it a lot. One of my favourite trash ships. And kudos for the love poem, especially the end.
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XDDD Thanks. I'm a bit young so I did it for fun. I may have blindly did the poem in class while daydreaming about a crush I had on a guy...
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Let me guess, he's your Roman 
No worries, everybody starts somewhere. My writing 'career' started when I got bored in a physics class 10 years ago. And either way, your art is much better than mine...
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Yeah, sorry, just sort of saw it on another comment... Cool. I feel so alone being the only RWBY fan in my town.
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Awwww well try looking. They may be in hiding, trust me.
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Well, if they are, I would like to encounter one soon. I'd like a Ruby or a Neo of my own. Well, anything to deal with my mix of Torchwick sass/Jaune Arc lovable idiocy. Anyway, thanks for hearing me out.
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Yeah no problem. Just be yourself, trust me it works.
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Very creative job 
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Oh go ahead. I'm prepared for it.
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