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Limelight-Night [2012-08-16 04:16:14 +0000 UTC]

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Ok my turn!

VISION: Ok first of all I'm not exactly sure what 'vision' refers to. Simply what I'm looking at or the idea/vision you had in mind? I'll go with both to be safe.
Okay, I am a fan of bright colors so when I saw this I was pretty delighted. When I close one eye and blur the other the background looks even cooler. 8) Super trippy. The simple doodle style you used for the background I like as well, I think it's suiting for the paperback idea. It gives it a feel, or mood that can't quite explain. Since the background is more abstract it better represents intangible thoughts of the mind that can only be represented through picture or writing.
I agree with the other person that the girl looks too flat. I think she needs more dimension overall since she's the focus. Like they said, the back leg is too small and her body looks rather stiff. Since this is cartoon styled, I think she could benefit from a cartoon rule that says whatever is strait the other side should be curved. here's a link to what i mean: [link] the same goes for her arms, midsection, fingers etc.

ORIGINALITY: I like the idea for this a lot! It was one sentence but it leaves room for much to learn about this character. e.deviantart.net/emoticons/s/s… " width="15" height="15" alt="" title=" (Smile)"/> I disagree with the other critique when they mentioned not knowing what it was about. It's okay that we don't know what's behind this until we read about it. That's exactly what an illustration is. If you look in any illustrated book you wouldn't know what all was going on until you read it.

TECHNIQUE: Like said, I think the background lines are good, the composition/balance is good too. It's not an elaborate technique you used but it's sufficient. Having the same applied to the girl is not as impressive however.

IMPACT: Overall, everything comes together quite well in this piece, and it is definitely impacting with all bright colors. I think is is an odd rating as well, because not all good 5 star pieces are impacting you know? Like, it's too much of a verb, to literal sounding. Like BAM. IMPACT. So yeah this definitely has that. But I think what it supposed to mean is how well the whole piece hits you, or something like that. Like, right off the back youre like WOW AWESOME PICTURE VERY WELL DONE A+++ But yeah. Your grade letter isssss B-

NOT BAD
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Shiny-Hunter [2012-08-14 00:15:00 +0000 UTC]

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One critique coming up!
I sorta go from the focus to the background.
To start with, it was very nice to be able to easily pick out the black-haired girl as the main focus, with all the other stuff going on, which is really nice. It adds sort of a central feeling.

The main problem I have, though, is I feel like her face is really flat. I get the feeling it's because of the way her nose is tilted to the left, slightly. Rather than the bridge of the nose going straight, it looks more like this: /, if you line it up. If you angle it to the right, however, it'd give more dimension to her face, because it's following the direction she is facing, as well as the direction she is moving in.

While part of it looks like it's perspective, her legs are a tad bit long than they should be, since arms and legs are pretty close in length, though I'm not entirely sure.

The perspective looks really nice on her right leg, but I feel like her left leg is a lot longer, based on this perspective, because it got smaller pretty fast, if that makes sense.

Her arms and torso look to be the right length to me. C:
The shading on her body is a bit weird, because her torso and legs are shaded perfectly, but her head and arms are not, as well as her shoes,headphones, and belt.

Since this is a simpler picture(by that I mean texture and that it's lineless), the lack of texture actually adds to it, but it makes her pants actually stand out a bit more having a texture to them.

I feel that the pose of her overall is nice, but the upper part is a bit stiff. I can easily imagine her legs walking like they are, but her hands and arms in their current position look a bit awkward. Maybe make the arms less tense/straight, because you can sort of see a curve to the motion of her walking, and yet her arms are perfectly straight.

As for the background, it hits you, with all the bright colors that clash and blend together, showing the imagination of the paperback novels mentioned in your description.

The mind's a bit more jumbled, thoughts are bouncing around. It would've looks even more like that if you had mixed them up-thrown around the different images in a disorderly fashion, while blacking out part of it for Margaret. I think that would have conveyed the jumbled mess of thoughts that authors tend to have while writing, as well as show the books that had been thrown away, if that makes sense.

That's all I can think of, so I'll just go over the colorful little star-score things:
Vision: I gave it 2.5 stars here because, while the novels are being compared to her, they instead seem to revolve around her in the picture, because of how orderly they appear. And, had I not read the description, I would not have known what this was about.
Originality: 4 stars, because I really enjoy looking at this. This is something a bit different than what I usually see, and to be frank, I've never heard of a comparison like that.
Technique: 3 stars, because of every detail you find as you look at this more and more. The problem is is that there are minor problems here and there that I keep finding while looking at this.
Impact:3 stars, because, while the bright colors grabbed my attention, it wore out a bit after a while.
Overall, there are tiny things here and there that need to be fixed, but it still it very nice to look at.

If you have questions, or you think this or that is a bit skewed/whatever, feel free to say so! C:

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Easecon [2015-07-28 11:41:41 +0000 UTC]

Despite the critique this is the only picture i had to save for later use (use meaning only for myself, no artwork stealing here ^^) meaning it means alot to me. Its wonderful and caries alot of meaning in my eyes it makes alot of sense its like dreaming awesome !

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KeatonsGhost [2013-01-11 21:04:40 +0000 UTC]

DAMMIT THIS IS SO COOL

I love how wild this piece is, yet for all it's neon colors and eccentric lines it ties together and flows beautifully. What fun! I'm especially drawn to her shoes and that bizarre bird thing hovering over the baby carriage.

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PaDubs [2012-09-26 21:31:14 +0000 UTC]

Very nice !

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TheStarlightIllusion [2012-08-31 16:03:50 +0000 UTC]

Gotta love hairy feet!

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walkingParanoia [2012-08-14 14:29:49 +0000 UTC]

I love the story this tells! The neon-ness kind of reminds me of The Studio Killers, too.

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Fizzybopper [2012-08-14 00:30:42 +0000 UTC]

Kiki. Can I marry your art plz?

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Shiny-Hunter [2012-08-13 23:40:09 +0000 UTC]

I was thinking of critiquing, since you asked. C:>
Is there anything in particular you want imput on? Because some people want to be critique on certain thing. :1

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