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Zalisa — Abandoned
Published: 2004-04-10 18:34:11 +0000 UTC; Views: 184; Favourites: 0; Downloads: 11
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Hiding in the path of my own ignorance,Crying from the inside.
Looking out at the sick beauty of this world.
Watching the only one who can understand,
turn away from me.
He was my savior, but now...
Now, I am alone.
Alone in this sickening world,
alone with my own cries
engulfing my languishing soul.
Today I leave,
to find the one that turned away.
The one who understood my cries
to take the pain away.
Oh, please find me!
This is my last plea.
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Comments: 25
i felt the same way about sammi...if you remember who i'm talking about
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Very beautiful and deep. A lot of emotion is involved in this, and it's hard not to relate to it. I love the style and word choice, excellent job.
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Very nice composition, you are a very gifted writer, the poem itself is quite poverful and ties in well with the title. 
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Thank you very much. I appraciate the comment.
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Usually I'm not into poetry...
but luv the title and...
" Looking out at the sick beauty of this world.
Watching the only one who can understand,
turn away from me.... "
.. Those words are the same words flying around in my head few months ago..
Well done !
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Well, thank you very much! I'm glad you liked it!
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Thank you very much for commenting!
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WHat I find absolutely TREMENDOUSELY AMAZING about this poem is that you have already come to the realization that will eventually negate the need for someone else who understands...
"Looking out at the sick beauty of this world."
You found it... no matter how twisted, no matter how downright FUCKED UP the world becomes.. finding the beauty in all that will catapult you above the grey masses and will give you a divine perspective on that which you are a part of...
All the luck in the world to ya!
Marius
PS: I really should switch accounts for comments on poetry but it's late and I'm tired...
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Wow... wow... wow... Thank you so very much for commenting on my work with such praise!
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It's a mere observation....
We have these levels of awareness that we can either evolve into or attain... As a poet or artist we become attuned to them subconciousley at first.. and that is evident in this poem...
It is being able to consciousely attain these heights that truly makes us evolve as humans, artists, and spirits...
Marius
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I'm really, really dumb. Thank you so very much for enlightening me, I have never quite grasped the depth of an artist.
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I really don't know if that was supposed to be sarcasm or not...
But if it wasn't.. there's plenty more wisdom where that came from...
Just come on over, hit that DevWatch button and watch the wisdom roll on in.....
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Wow...I like the way the ending is just so sudden.
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Thank you very much!
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To find the one who betrayed you and beg him to back to you. But if he doesn't then you are left alone in this sick world.
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Pretty much...
Thanks for commenting!
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