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Zekio — A Plague of Words

Published: 2005-11-11 22:53:22 +0000 UTC; Views: 165; Favourites: 2; Downloads: 2
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Description The room is dark, as per usual. I hate unnatural light. It’s bad for the soul. I avoid it if I can. The soft glow from the computer screen, however, I see as a necessary evil. I have to write, though. If I don’t write, the words will haunt me. Haunt me.

I’m still sitting here, quite alone. The bed is a mess, a tangle of sheets, comforter, and pillow cases. Papers – short stories, novels, poems – cover the light brown carpet almost completely, occasionally punctuated by a shoe or pair of pants. And all of this is bathed in the soft white glow of the computer screen, the moon of my little kingdom here.

Despite the glow, the room is still dark. Only so much light can come from the little page on the word processor, falling prey to the assault of letters as my fingers fly across the key. Word word word, phrase, sentence. I have to wonder how it can stand to live any longer, with the words, tearing at its pale flesh. Tearing, killing, thrashing. But it survives.

An unnatural cold begins to take me, causing me to shiver. That’s them. The words. They want to find the page faster, to find a victim faster. They can’t let me hold them back. If they can’t get out through my writing, they will try and tear out through my skin, slashing, gnawing, and biting. They would leave me broken, bleeding, and dead.

But I can’t let them do that. No, I won’t let them do it. My typing speeds up. Words are flying at frantic pace, every phrase that pops to head rushing into the story. But will it be enough? Good God, it’s not happening fast enough! Faster, faster!

Though the chill still takes my insides, I begin to sweat, my skin heating up and my heart hammering. I can’t die here. Not tonight. I don’t want to die. Don’t let me die. Not now. Just let me live one more night.

Oh God, there they are! I can feel them, like insects, crawling under my skin, moving the very flesh above them. No, not now! I’m almost done, I swear! Just let me finish! Biting, gnawing, slashing – all of the little insects trying to break to the surface in a wave of fresh red blood. Fingertips still flew across the keyboards as the pain began to sear, and their chittering voices carried up through my skin. I had to hurry! So close, so–

The room is dark, as per usual. But now, it is silent, save for the sound of the printer, vomiting page after page of paper covered with black ink. Blackness takes hold as I turn the computer monitor off. I stand, pushing the chair back, and walk to the bed, finding peace in slumber while page after page falls from the printer to the floor.
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Comments: 16

Trava [2005-11-15 20:35:45 +0000 UTC]

"I see as a necessary evil. I have to write, though." -If you see it as necessary, why add the "though"? It doesn't seem right, to me. Awkward. It is contradictory.

A nice job, though it seems terribly rushed and muddled together. Almost as if there's so much going on, that no definitive meaning and impression can escape. Bravo, despite.

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Zekio In reply to Trava [2005-11-17 04:51:24 +0000 UTC]

Yeah, a bit muddled, I agree, though I think that helps the tone of the idea of a writer frantically working to get an idea out before it kills him. That effect probably got lost, though.

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Kirjailija [2005-11-15 19:46:45 +0000 UTC]

...*fav* thats really all I can say. This was brilliant. Incredible personification, and very well written!

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Zekio In reply to Kirjailija [2005-11-17 04:51:36 +0000 UTC]

Aww.. thank you so much.

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Kirjailija In reply to Zekio [2005-11-17 20:19:15 +0000 UTC]

You're very welcome!

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JL-Miller [2005-11-12 21:10:49 +0000 UTC]

Clever.... Every author and poet's fate... I'm like this too... I have to have it down or I won't sleep no better if I'm tired or not.... Nice job...

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Zekio In reply to JL-Miller [2005-11-14 04:22:01 +0000 UTC]

Thank you.

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YouThiefofLove [2005-11-11 23:51:00 +0000 UTC]

It's good. A little vague, I think it needs a little more description here and there. But I like the overall idea.

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Zekio In reply to YouThiefofLove [2005-11-14 04:25:47 +0000 UTC]

Thank you. And, yeah, it was a bit rushed at times, so I lost some detail.

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demonlight [2005-11-11 23:20:12 +0000 UTC]

I hate unnatural late - typo - 'light'.

The soft glow from the computer screen, however I see as a necessary evil - The grammar here is a bit messed up. You don't really need the comma or the 'however' - that strikes me as being filler.

You do need to go through this and even out the language; there is some repetition that seems unecessary, and some of the grammar is inconsistent.

Hah - meta-literature. I've experimented with that lately as well. I suppose you're describing the obsessive urge to create and complete. It doesn't sound like my experience, but that doesn't mean it's any less valid. This is fine as far as it goes, but it's very much a small, concept snapshot, and as such, is limited.

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Zekio In reply to demonlight [2005-11-14 04:29:39 +0000 UTC]

Thank you for the typo fixes, and you are correct about what I'm describing. And yeah, it is rather limited based on how small of snapshot it is, but I can't see myself expanding it.

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Podkayne [2005-11-11 23:01:25 +0000 UTC]

Interesting and engrossing story. But if I could make few suggestions:

-Second sentence: "I it if I can." It seems like a word or letter is missing there.

-"carper" should be "carpet"

-Good visuals, but if you want to make it a little stronger, I would suggest using a few more color descriptions in there.

I'm just suggesting these, you don't have to use them. I think its a rather good story overall, but I admit, I'm a little prone to nit-picking. Keep up the good work!

I'm going to go look at your gallery.

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Zekio In reply to Podkayne [2005-11-14 04:36:45 +0000 UTC]

Alright, thank you so much.

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Podkayne In reply to Zekio [2005-11-15 00:37:07 +0000 UTC]

You're welcome. ^_^

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Webcomiker [2005-11-11 22:59:12 +0000 UTC]

wow. i like it. its very good. has a nice, dark feel to it. kinda makes me think that poe must have felt like that, staying up late at night, working on the type writer, trying to get all of his twisted thoughts out before they could get him, haunt him when he tried to sleep... wow. im scaring myself. *nervous chuckle* im never gonna get on the computer late at night again...

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Zekio In reply to Webcomiker [2005-11-14 04:37:09 +0000 UTC]

I'm glad it got that feeling out. Thank you so much.

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