Blue-Strokes In reply to Asolem2 [2016-10-17 02:58:51 +0000 UTC]

It has not been released anywhere but privately with my friends/editors. It's currently on hiatus due to School taking up most of my time, laziness, and a rereading of FoE by me to get some inspiration, and I do not plan to continue writing until at least around Thanksgiving break. As of now it is about 5 1/2 chapters long and about 140k words. There was almost a 60k word chapter but I split it in two.
If you would really like I can give you access to it, just keep in mind it is very unpolished as of now.

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Asolem2 In reply to Blue-Strokes [2016-10-17 10:26:44 +0000 UTC]

I am still very interested. 

So if your okay with it i would definitely like to read it

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Blue-Strokes In reply to Asolem2 [2016-10-17 17:16:05 +0000 UTC]

docs.google.com/document/d/10Z… Feel free to read and add comments at your leisure. At this rate I'm just looking for any and all feedback abiut the story. Think you should also have access to past comments on here though as well... So yea.

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Asolem2 In reply to Blue-Strokes [2016-10-17 17:58:01 +0000 UTC]

Thanks

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Blue-Strokes In reply to Asolem2 [2016-10-19 21:37:53 +0000 UTC]

So how goes that?

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Asolem2 In reply to Blue-Strokes [2016-10-20 05:02:30 +0000 UTC]

pretty good, but with it being me i get distracted a lot and i have an education i have to keep up with during most of the day, so i have only gotten a bit into the second chapter.

But i definitely like what i have read so far, give me a few more days and i might have more to say, with the weekend coming up i can spend more time reading.

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Blue-Strokes In reply to Asolem2 [2016-10-20 16:13:38 +0000 UTC]

Alright good to hear. And yes, I understand how school is, I'm in a bunch of advanced classes so I have such little freetime myself.

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Asolem2 In reply to Blue-Strokes [2016-10-28 10:23:43 +0000 UTC]

Ok so... i finally finished chapter 5, and i apologize it took so long but i blame the fact that i am very easily distracted and the fact that Fallout 4 is so very distracting.

I do like it and hope that you continue writing. (hehe "drunk Aroura" that was fun)

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Blue-Strokes In reply to Asolem2 [2016-10-28 22:38:29 +0000 UTC]

Well thanks, and Drunk Aurora was hard to write for me. Any thoughts specifically on the story itself? Any part or aspect particularly you liked?

also, ew, Fallout 4. 

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Asolem2 In reply to Blue-Strokes [2016-10-29 17:42:09 +0000 UTC]

Just keep in mind that i am not exactly a reviewer or anything.

I kinda liked how i could understand most if not every characters action and sort of figure out why they did what they did.

I also liked how you decided to have Aurora try to remember how she got stuck in a cell and what is supposedly wrong with her, since it is something i haven´t actually seen all that often and it allows for some intressting foreshadowing.

I was however a little uninvested in some parts of it after they got outside since they sort of lack an objective beyond surviving.
Now don´t get me wrong i understand why they don´t have a goal beyond that yet, it just made me a little unintrested in what they were going to do next, but like i said the way you wrote it i understand "why" they don´t have a "main" goal yet.

Overall i have to say it is well writen since i can understand pretty much everything that is going on, with the exception being Aurora´s imprisonment (and apperant growth), but since that is how the story is told it makes sense that i don´t understand it yet.

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Blue-Strokes In reply to Asolem2 [2016-10-29 19:02:46 +0000 UTC]

Yea understanding how (and more specifically why) she is locked up is supposed to be a mystery and far off until that's figured out. (I should mention the first arc of this story takes place about approximately a dozen years before the original FoE Story.

I'm glad to hear you found all the character's and their motives believable. Although right now I have purposely tried to hold back on revealing too much about any of them, because it's my philosophy that "everyone and everyplace in the wasteland has a story to tell."

And I am aware and have been told before aboit how the part after leaving sort of seems uninteresting. If you had read up on the progress I made on chapter 6 you would have seen I began to get slightly on a track, and planned quite soon for a sort of starting point for the over arcing story to begin. 

And in case you didn't know already, this story is mostly going to base around trottingham.

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Asolem2 In reply to Blue-Strokes [2016-10-30 08:13:36 +0000 UTC]

1. Good to know.

2. Yeah it´s not like people/ponies just suddenly appear and decide to do this or that or places containg a ton of ghouls for no particular reason, there is a motive and reson for everyones actions and words some obvious and some not.

3. I did not read what you had written for chapter 6 yet, i decide to wait for now.

4. This is also good to know (and they did mention that they were in Trottingham so i kinda figured they would stay in that area for most part).

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Blue-Strokes In reply to Phoenix-Cry2Crash [2016-08-16 04:55:50 +0000 UTC]

Good OC Design.

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Phoenix-Cry2Crash In reply to Blue-Strokes [2016-08-17 02:55:25 +0000 UTC]

Thank chu so much! Free cuddles? (>o3o)>

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Blue-Strokes In reply to kera2112 [2016-08-14 04:43:17 +0000 UTC]

Sup?

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kera2112 In reply to Blue-Strokes [2016-08-18 16:07:46 +0000 UTC]

lol heyehye




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Blue-Strokes In reply to SpartanNinjaDragon [2015-08-11 21:46:44 +0000 UTC]

Sure, What did you have in mind?

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SpartanNinjaDragon In reply to Blue-Strokes [2015-08-11 22:25:07 +0000 UTC]

I have one question though. Is there a limit to the amount of ponies you'll draw in a picture? I want you to draw my version of the Hooves family, but it's Kind of.... huge. If it's too much I can request something else if you want 

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Blue-Strokes In reply to SpartanNinjaDragon [2015-08-12 00:16:47 +0000 UTC]

That would be Fine, Including Derpy, The Doctor, Ditzy, and Amethyst Star?

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SpartanNinjaDragon In reply to Blue-Strokes [2015-08-12 00:31:45 +0000 UTC]

Yes, but who's Ditzy?

My (incredibly large) Hooves family is Derpy, Doctor Hooves, Dinky, Amethyst Star, Chirpy Hooves chirpyhoovesfanclub.deviantart…

DJ Hooves derpibooru.org/90969?scope=scp…

Dizzy Hooves (DJ's twin) derpibooru.org/320946?scope=sc…

Dipsy: (The Red-Eyed filly) asika-aida.deviantart.com/art/…

And Derpy's niece who lives with them: Scootaloo.

Also can DJ and Dizzy be hugging? They're super close, and can DJ have his hat and Chirpy have her lucky broken quill?

If this is too much for you I can request something else. I'm sorry I'm asking you to draw so many ponies in one picture.

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Blue-Strokes In reply to SpartanNinjaDragon [2015-08-12 01:02:27 +0000 UTC]

Ditzy is another name for Derpy But I meant dinky. And as far as I knew the only family was Derpy, Dinky, Amethyst, and the Doctor. I would draw those four if you want or is there another request you would prefer?

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SpartanNinjaDragon In reply to Blue-Strokes [2015-08-12 01:34:20 +0000 UTC]

I would rather my whole Hooves family be drawn than only half of it, but again if the whole family is too much I can request something else. Do you want me to? 

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Blue-Strokes In reply to SpartanNinjaDragon [2015-08-12 01:50:46 +0000 UTC]

If I would draw the hooves family I would prefer to draw the main 4, But I can draw all of it depending on what you can offer. Or if there is something Else I would Do that.

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SpartanNinjaDragon In reply to Blue-Strokes [2015-08-12 01:54:01 +0000 UTC]

What do you mean what I can offer? Do you mean points? I'm all out of those and I could make my own picture for you, like an art trade, but I'm not exactly Michelangelo. Faaaaaaaar from it. Just look at my gallery and start laughing from how bad my art is.

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