peety701 In reply to peety701 [2017-03-14 03:19:20 +0000 UTC]

Fire the Steamies vs diesels

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peety701 In reply to peety701 [2017-03-14 03:19:40 +0000 UTC]

*FOR

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LoneDrifter213 In reply to Count-Author [2014-10-08 18:31:22 +0000 UTC]

Your welcome, as you can see, not many people view my profile or enjoy my work. (I write fanfics!)

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Count-Author In reply to LoneDrifter213 [2014-10-08 20:05:51 +0000 UTC]

Well you've been around for over a year and you haven't uploaded anything other than the 2 pages of fanfic chapters in the past year. If you get more stuff out, I'm sure you'll attract more of a crowd. Give it time, but most importantly, give it effort. 2 pages of writing won't get you too many viewers.

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LoneDrifter213 In reply to Count-Author [2014-10-08 20:11:29 +0000 UTC]

It's not that, I just lost interest of this account for awhile, but been trying kick start my motivation again. Started a new FIM fic, my first one as well.

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Count-Author In reply to LoneDrifter213 [2014-10-08 20:13:03 +0000 UTC]

Well, I wish you luck.

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LoneDrifter213 In reply to Count-Author [2015-02-23 00:02:26 +0000 UTC]

I doubt you'll be interested. But I've nearly finished the 1st chapter of my fic, however, I would like an editor to give their input/improvements. You seem to have an knack these things.

If you're interested, then I'll upload it. If not, and think I should f*** off, fair enough. Just would like to know if you wanted to or not.

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Count-Author In reply to LoneDrifter213 [2015-02-23 04:51:47 +0000 UTC]

By all means. I can't guarantee the best criticism, but I would like to see what you've got! 

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LoneDrifter213 In reply to Count-Author [2015-02-23 23:12:05 +0000 UTC]

Ok, thank you.

Chapter 1 is up. Rip it to Pieces!

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Count-Author In reply to LoneDrifter213 [2015-02-24 04:55:55 +0000 UTC]

Okay, first thing. Why did you not give it a title BEFORE writing it?!

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LoneDrifter213 In reply to Count-Author [2015-02-24 07:35:01 +0000 UTC]

I had a few ideas, but they were stupid,. Although, there is one I like. 'Age of Destruction' But still sounds stupid.

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Count-Author In reply to LoneDrifter213 [2015-02-24 16:58:13 +0000 UTC]

Another problem is that there's barely any build up and in just the first chapter you filled it with a bunch of dramatic tension that jumps everywhere with almost no transition.

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LoneDrifter213 In reply to Count-Author [2015-02-24 18:12:37 +0000 UTC]

Could you explain? Sorry. 

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Count-Author In reply to LoneDrifter213 [2015-02-24 18:15:25 +0000 UTC]

I just did.

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LoneDrifter213 In reply to Count-Author [2015-02-24 19:38:14 +0000 UTC]

I think I understand. What I was going for everything to start off as normal day, that changes rapidly into battlefield. Basically, the story is about an alien war that has descended on Equestria within the span of two weeks, which until now has gone unnoticed. Chapter 1 just covers the first major skirmish in Equestria, that only happened by unfortunate events. Plus it starts off from the Pony's POV, they don't know what's happening. So the backstory of the war would be revealed in the later chapters and how it came to Equestria.

If you would like anymore details, I'll tell you but, then it would spoil it for you. So if you don't mind, tell me and I'll explain in more detail.

Sorry, if I'm annoying you or wasting your time. If your annoyed, tell me and I'll stop bothering you.

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Count-Author In reply to LoneDrifter213 [2015-02-25 02:13:36 +0000 UTC]

Stop worrying about annoying or bothering me. I'm happy to assist, but I would recommend you organize and shorten your chapters to make them easier to follow.

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LoneDrifter213 In reply to Count-Author [2015-02-25 21:07:12 +0000 UTC]

Ok, thanks for the advice. Chapter 2 is more of a explain background chapter anyway, not much action.

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Count-Author In reply to LoneDrifter213 [2015-02-25 21:12:34 +0000 UTC]

That's another thing. Try to balance out exposition with action.

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LoneDrifter213 In reply to DarthWill3 [2014-07-08 08:14:29 +0000 UTC]

Err...your welcome

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DarthWill3 In reply to LoneDrifter213 [2014-07-08 15:02:35 +0000 UTC]

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LoneDrifter213 In reply to DarthWill3 [2014-07-08 17:20:11 +0000 UTC]

Sorry if I'm surprised, not many people view my profile.

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DarthWill3 In reply to LoneDrifter213 [2014-07-09 02:08:15 +0000 UTC]

Consider me the first.

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