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NeutraStaff In reply to Synarialle [2013-10-19 20:53:18 +0000 UTC]

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Synarialle In reply to NeutraStaff [2013-10-21 00:32:24 +0000 UTC]

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NeutraStaff In reply to Zero-CZ [2013-08-25 20:51:28 +0000 UTC]

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NeutraStaff In reply to twipplestoast [2012-12-31 05:29:40 +0000 UTC]

Did you click the first one, that's the link. If that doesn't work try this one:

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twipplestoast In reply to NeutraStaff [2012-12-31 17:25:42 +0000 UTC]

That worked! Read up to chapter 3 so far. I really like it! There were a lot of errors, but I understand your reason. I do the same. xD Just splatter all your thoughts down and don't bother with the editing till your done with the draft. The puncuations as the people are speaking though, should be within the quote rather than outside, and a new paragraph should be made for each new speaker, or else it get's a bit confusing on whose saying what.

But I shall read somemore later this evening after I've done some writing myself. :3

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NeutraStaff In reply to twipplestoast [2012-12-31 20:48:49 +0000 UTC]

Thanks for taking the time to read, I very much appreciate it and I'm glad you like it!!! Yeah, it's that you have a good idea and if you wait too long it disappears in your mind. Also, you do tend to make mistakes if you rush off to do something, I'm starting to realize that more and more I wanted to get a few people on goodreads to help me proof read it as it seemed like a good site, but no one responded. Sometimes I like to keep the dialogue together because if I put it on a new paragraph it indicates that I'm moving onto a completely different thing, also I think on goodreads someone told me that it made it longer to keep making paragraphs and it would discourage people to want to read more. Before I do get it officially published I do intend to recheck it again.

Honestly I do wish I could find someone to assist in editing, though I have been having much trouble during the fall to get people to read.

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twipplestoast In reply to NeutraStaff [2013-01-02 19:54:48 +0000 UTC]

Most definately. I rushed through all of part one and half way through part two of my book, and now have a buttload of rewriting to do, both the plot and style, as it changed from the basic, "he did this, she did that," to more of the old english format. But in nearly every novel written it's bound to happen, as you may learn more about your book and change details - which is a good thing if it betters the overall story, so don't be scared of all the extra work - and if you become a better writer towards the end.

I wouldn't be too concerned with the length. If it's good then it shouldn't matter, people will want to keep reading it regardless of how long it seems. Terry Goodkind's book, "Wizard's First Rule" is over 300,000 words, and it's a NYT best seller. And for moving on to another subject intirely you could duble-space or use acronyms.

You don't have a friend or family to help you edit? D:

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twipplestoast In reply to twipplestoast [2013-01-03 18:47:55 +0000 UTC]

I just realized that it's not acronyms. xD I meant use astriscs (i.e. this symbol: '*') to define a jump in the scene. That is at least the typical symbol used over the internet. But if I'm correct, when submitting a manuscript you use '#' instead.

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NeutraStaff In reply to twipplestoast [2013-01-02 21:52:46 +0000 UTC]

Thanks to you I've learned finally how to post material here so I had to go back to my earlier short stories and spent the last few days doing the pain staking task of rewriting and correcting things in them It wasn't too bad, just takes a while. Also the biggest problem I have in rewriting, especially in novels, is if I change things around too much early on it would contradict and create plot holes later on (example: when a character says they know about something but later on say they don't know), and when you have to go back and reread the novel, that's a lot to remember to make sure everything's working right-course all this just helps improve my skill, so I agree

Thank god you said that because for my 'Atlantis' novel the later chapters on the second half are quite lengthy but I feel that they will keep readers captivated. And for dialogue, I usually have trouble when there's a break, when two characters are talking but one stops to do something then come back (example: when they're talking, one has to step out for a second then come back and resume talking) is that all in the same paragraph or do you divide it? And when they're talking but one person looks around to see something suspicious then goes back to talking again, things like that.

No I don't, it's just me. I actually been to several other writing sites as well but they're not very good and don't really help

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twipplestoast In reply to NeutraStaff [2013-01-03 03:43:32 +0000 UTC]

I'm glad you were able to figure it out!! Short stories are fun to write, just because you can see the end much sooner. xD Haven't written one in a long time, though.

For me I have a photographic memory (which was much better before the anesthetic from my surgery caused a bit of brain damage . . .), so I'm able to keep tabs on things that have changed, and then fix those earlier on in the plot which contradict the later changes. What you could do though, is when you come to a part that you want to change, or think you've changed in the plot earlier on, is take a note of it, and when you reread and go over the spot in question, you'll not only have that note to go over but you'll have a better memory of needing to check it. But also that's where a proofreader comes in handy.

It all depeds on the subject matter. If there's a speaker and the dialog is of the same subject then it should remain as one paragraph. An example would be:

"Shall we all just sit here and listen to you stuff your face like a famished boar?" said Griffin. His eyes then turned to the man, who gazed at him with a bitter scowl. He then smirked compacently. "Or shall I go and fetch you a fork?"

Then, if it's someone whose talking and then leaves it should be like:

"Parden me while I go retrieve the artifact from the bacement." The old man then left the den and disappeared down the long, dark stair.

There was deep silence amongst the four strangers as they sat awkwardly beside one another in the flickering torchlight. No one lifted their intent gaze from dark, wooden floor and not a stir nor a word was to be had. It was indeed a long and uncomfortable moment.

At last there came the creaking of the stair, and presently the elderly man appeared with the old, beaten artifact in his hands. "Sorry for the long wait," he said. "My apprentice had buried it amongst all his ghastly and useless clutter, of which I told him to toss out."

And, if the person is talking but changes the subject it should change to another paragraph, like so:

"I've always hated walking this road at night," said Corvin, hugging his books tighter. "It gives me the willies whenever there's a rustle in the wood and when white eyes peer at you through the blackness. If not for there being no preditors around here I'd be too afraid to walk this road at all - even at day.
"By the way, will you be coming over tomorrow? I figured with all the work that we're both bogged down with that we could perhaps help each other out. It would go by much faster, and not be such a bore."

Course, some of that could be fixed, but that's just off the top of my noggin.

D: D: D: I'm not the greatest with grammar, but I could help you out if you'd like. At least give you a start. Later though I'd still have a professional go over it, as puncuations are possibly my greatest weakness. rofl

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NeutraStaff In reply to twipplestoast [2013-01-04 03:49:17 +0000 UTC]

In addition, I like short stories because I can pretty much write them in about an hour or two, many of the ones I wrote usually only took that long (well I tell the story in my head a couple of times before I write it).

Your lucky, that would have helped me so much and sorry for what happened (as I've had bad experiences with doctors as well). Usually I have to write down notes so I don't get lost, so that really helps

Yeah, those were the examples I was talking about. I wasn't quite sure, so thanks. I'm taking a time out from making new material to go back to some of my older work. Before I post it I spend a good while proof reading, changing the dialogue. I'm doing pretty much these examples. I know on one of my more recent works I said that it's the final version of the story that I'll post but truth be told I may still go back and reread it again. But that's what I needed to know, when someone leaves, does something and resuming conversation, that it's in three different paragraphs (talk,action,talk). Also for the changing subject how it's two different paragraphs. Thanks for that

I'm not too good with grammar either, but I like to keep things simple to understand it easier anyway though I will say sometimes i don't want it to sound like a child write it If you want you can check out my medieval story, I went through so many changes with that. I'm currently working on that slowly rebuilding it, but I feel that I still have a long ways to go with it.

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twipplestoast In reply to NeutraStaff [2013-01-04 21:34:16 +0000 UTC]

Remember to keep in mind that if the character talks, does an action, and then resumes talking that it should remain as one paragraph. But should the subject matter change then a new paragraph needs to be started.

Try not to do too much rereading. You may start to overlook and become numb to misused words and structure. Try reading it from a reader's perspective and read it out loud. If it doesn't sound right then it more than likely needs to be changed.

I'll check it out when I'm caught up reading everyone's material. I have so much to catch up on, but mostly I need to finish the last two chapters of my novel. Once I'm done with the draft I'll take some time off to read my friend's work.

And I have a long ways to go with my writing as well. My sister though left her Writer's Referance book behind, and so lately I've been reading it. I'm amazed at how much I've forgotton over the years that I was sick. O_O (crummy doctors.....never going back, lest I'm dying.) I love this book though - it will help a great deal when I start the rewrite and editing.

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NeutraStaff In reply to twipplestoast [2013-01-05 12:45:41 +0000 UTC]

Got it

Yeah, that's the thing, there's but so much reading I can do. If I were to reread my entire Atlantis novel, it would probably take me no less than three weeks to do all of that. In fact, now that I'm going back overlooking my medieval story it takes around three hours for one chapter.

I have similar stuff like that as well, on booksie I get tons of reading request, but with my classes and working on my own stuff, along with other things it's hard to do all of that. I occasionally take a day or two reading some of their work but it's tough doing it all I usually tell people that I'm developing sequels to those stories (for both that I mentioned) but add that they won't be coming any time soon due to all the work I have to do. Next week, my college classes resume so, yeah it will be a while.

I occasionally take breaks. I got a similar book from one of my English classes last year, that tells you about where to put quotes, words and all kinds of things. I have to find it as it's under tons of papers but, that could help, probably not as much as your sister's book though. Actually I'm hoping my new English class next week will lend me a hand hopefully^^

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twipplestoast In reply to NeutraStaff [2013-01-07 16:54:45 +0000 UTC]

You have an advantage over me being in collage. I don't have the money for it. What I hear a lot of people do is send their manuscript to their english professor for advice. So once you get one of your stories cleaned up you could send it to one and get their opinion.

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NeutraStaff In reply to twipplestoast [2013-01-07 22:33:25 +0000 UTC]

It's just community at the moment (in fact I only have one class this semester which is English) but I hope to transfer to a larger university later this year. I didn't think I could do that, I was wondering if I could ask my teacher this semester, yeah maybe I'll do that^^

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twipplestoast In reply to NeutraStaff [2013-01-07 22:36:37 +0000 UTC]

That would be great! Good luck!

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NeutraStaff In reply to twipplestoast [2013-01-08 06:07:13 +0000 UTC]

Hope so, thanks

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NeutraStaff In reply to NotAlabaster [2012-11-03 22:16:02 +0000 UTC]

Your very welcome thank you for sharing your work!!!

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NotAlabaster In reply to NeutraStaff [2012-11-16 13:10:26 +0000 UTC]

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NeutraStaff In reply to Alecat [2012-10-21 23:09:12 +0000 UTC]

Thanks for sharing it

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devilxgirlxangel In reply to NeutraStaff [2012-09-30 02:10:18 +0000 UTC]

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